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Mar 08, 2021

Fiction Drama

You reach for the door, but you canโ€™t bring yourself to open it.

You step forward, your hand reaching for the glossy knob.

Your reflection, bloated and distorted, mocks you as you pull your hand away.

Your hand feels like it's burnt, but you know it's not. You cradle your hand, blowing on it, even though youโ€™re doubting it will help.

Thus is your curse.

Everyday you walk towards the teasing knob, only to be burnt.ย 

This is your fate, your destiny, your curse, until the end of forever.

When is the end of forever?ย 

The end of forever is when everything stops. Your puny planet stops turning. Your flame dies out. You are gone as fast as you came.

There is no evidence of your existence. The next species comes along. Rinse, repeat.

You

Are

Dust.

You think about these things, about how insignificant you are. This is your curse.ย 

Is the burn real? Is it your imagination?

Are you crazy? Is that why they put you here? Cursed you?

Or was it because you were different?

Too powerful for even the gods to contain?

Too much of a wild card?

Too much yourself?

They cast you out.

They knew you were special.

The prophecy the Fates stated for you stated you would be powerful.

Powerful enough to make a choice to save or destroy the gods.

Let us just say, the gods were not pleased.

They gave you a chance, they said.

They allowed you to train, so you didnโ€™t end the world as they knew it, they said.

You blew it, they said.

They meant that quite literally, didnโ€™t they?

You blew up the heavens, so they cast you out,ย 

Labeled you an abomination.

Sent you here.

Willed you to stir from your thoughts,

Trod across the floor,

Reach for the doorknobย 

That would burn you.

You did not want to destroy the gods.

Destroying the heavens was an accident.

Although,

Now destroying the gods

Doesnโ€™t sound

Like such

A bad idea.

You sit against the cold wall, imagining yourself standing over the gods.ย 

They are at your mercy now.

And you crush them

You imprison them

Just like

They

Imprisoned

You.

Twice a day food is shoved through a little slot by a hand you cannot see.

Whose hand is it?

Do they know who they are aiding?

Do they know you?

To keep yourself sane, you imagine what the body attached to the hand would look like. Maybe a tall fellow, with blonde hair? Blue eyes?

You never expect to find out.

Of course, every so often you allow yourself the delusion of what you would do if you ever escaped. Your list goes something like this:

i. Get back your power

ii. Show everyone whoโ€™s boss

iii. Imprison the gods. Do them wrong like the wrong they've done you

iv. Show no mercy.

You didnโ€™t used to be this way.

At one point you were happy, you were bright, you were smart.

Then they found you out. Tried to shove you in a box. A box that they put every other special person in.

And they punished you when

You

Burned

That box

To the

Ground.

One day they came for you.

They tried to imprison you but your power, it couldnโ€™t be contained.

You killed, they say.

You were dangerous, they said.

You turned from the golden boy into โ€œwhat a shameโ€ conversations mumbled in the market between women with no lives.

You fell.

And so will the gods.

Power.

They said it was dangerous.

Maybe it was.

Maybe it was a challenge

Too dangerous

To their system

Their agenda

Their rules

Their tyranny

Their lies.

You thanked those who helped you.

You punished those who ratted you out.

Not yet, obviously,

But when you get out of here

They

Willย 

Pay.ย 

They say that's why they put you here.

To pay for your crimes.

Havenโ€™t you paid for your crimes enough?

The guilt that has dragged on your heart?

The nights without food?

The death or imprisonment of everyone you love?

Isnโ€™t that pay enough?

The tears that fall now do not taste like salt.

They taste sweet, because you know you have earned these tears.

These are not tears over a broken toy or a lost friend.

These are tears mourning everything youโ€™ve lost.

Family, friends, your life.

They are all gone now.

Replaced by this room.

Who needs friends when youโ€™ve got the rats?

Who needs family when youโ€™ve got the guards?

Who needs your life when youโ€™ve got the familiar

Of theย 

Dripping ceiling

Rusty toilet

Scurrying rats

Moldy bread

And cloudy water?

Who needs it?

Not you.

You persevered.

You stayed one step ahead,

Until they took your boot.

When they take your boot,

It's hard to get ahead,

Isn't it?

Will the end of your forever come?

What will it be of?

Disease brought by the rats, or the moldy bread?

Malnourishment?

Sadness?

Sometimes you can make out your motherโ€™s face.

In the clouds.

In the ripples of the drip bucket.

In the bubbles of the bread.

She whispers to you.

Stay peaceful.

You shouldnโ€™t have done this.

Every time, you turn away from the window.

You splash your hand in the drip bucket.

You crush your bread in your hands.

She reminds you.

Your friends warned you.

They told you that the guards were coming.

You ran, thankful, but you did not miss

The headline.

Five civilians dead.

Was it you who killed them?

Or was it your decision to run that killed them?

The end of forever

Seems pretty daunting.

Also, it seems

Like a pretty long time to spend

In a gross cell.

But you know,

You will get out of here.

So, did I get it right?

Did I?

Was that the last year of your life?

Come on, stop ignoring me.

You can tell me, seeing as weโ€™ll probably be spending a lot of time together.

Come on, could you at least tell me your name?

Fine. I see how it is.

That makes me sure of one thing.

Youโ€™re just like me.

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So, a few notes: -I'm not sure where I set this story. Is it Greece? Maybe. I wasn't really specific to any culture other than a polytheistic one. -I guess I read the prompt wrong, but its fine. -Hope you enjoyed! This is a little more poetic than I usually do. -Here's a really good TED Talk that has really nothing to do with this, but I really like it anyway. https://www.ted.com/talks/lee_mokobe_a_powerful_poem_about_what_it_feels_like_to_be_transgender?referrer=playlist-powerful_art_activism&language=en#t-248994 -Have a good day, y'all!

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16:26 Mar 10, 2021

the second person is just fantastic!, the end was awesome, I almost spoke out. the choppy style made it livelier, it was an amazing read! Happy Today!

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22:50 Mar 09, 2021

Hi, Carolina! SO I HEARD UR A PJO FAN SO I CAME OVER!!!! I really enjoyed this story, it's complex and somewhat abstract. Also, thanks for the follow! :D

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Thank you! I AM I AM I AM No Prob! I have a pjo fanfic, idk if youve seen it, but if you want to read it here's the link! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/71/submissions/45130/

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00:12 Mar 10, 2021

Awesome, thank you! I'm going to read it now :D

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00:47 Mar 11, 2021

I have Arachibutyrophobia! AHH

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01:37 Mar 11, 2021

Ik :/

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13:52 Mar 10, 2021

Hey, please read my bio. It's important.

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14:49 Mar 10, 2021

:) Great! I think you'll be happy.

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15:40 Mar 10, 2021

Hey, is it alright If Denver isn't genderfluid? I'm really sorry. I'm not really sure how I would do that. Nothing against you, of course!

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oh, no, thats totally fine! :) I understand how that could be difficult.

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15:46 Mar 10, 2021

Oh my gosh, thank you! I really liked the genderfluid idea.

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Nainika Gupta
16:40 Mar 09, 2021

Doubling the counttt: ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ๐Ÿงƒ

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Ellie Yu
03:47 Mar 09, 2021

The second person really pulls you in! I felt like I was inside the story, not just watching words scroll across my screen. And by the way, I know I donโ€™t really know you but I fully support your coming out! Thank you for being you. :)

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second-person poems people these days are getting so good at writing XD I think it's really cool that you're genderfluid, could you maybe explain it more? :) also, your pfp is really cool! ~ Amethyst

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Thank you! Yeah! so its basically I'll have (as i like to call them) boy days or girl days. Boy days are the days I use he/him pronouns and dress like a boy. Girl days I use she/her and dress in girl style clothing. :) Thank you! Do you want the link so you can make one?

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Np! That sounds like me sometimes lol you can MAKE one? yes please! :D

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Here you go! Warning, its in japanese so i hope you have google translate on your computer. https://picrew.me/secret_image_maker/1ATjYgP9eVbd7xP9

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Uhh I don't mean to sound like a dolt but whats gender fluid? (If it has sumthing to do with LGBTQ+ then I S U P P O R T ALL THE WAY TO DEATH M'FRIEND!) Heyaaa! I'm writing a new story(s) and I was wondering if you'd like to be in it! If you want to be in it, please fill the thingy out below: Name: Gender: Sexuality: Normal Clothing: Personality (please describe well): Eye Color: Hair Color: Skin Color: Power(s) (might be included:

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Hey hey! Its alright- you're the second reeder to ask! It is LGBTQ+, but its basically where someone's gender changes. It varies how often, some have a gender for a day or a week or an hour. Thank you, your support means a lot :) Name: KD Gender: female Sexuality: bi Normal Clothing: Orange Tshirt with jeans Personality (please describe well): Myers-Briggs ENFP, (The Campaigner) Eye Color: Green Hair Color: Bronze Skin Color: Caucasian Power(s) (might be included: Lightning powers Thanks for including me!

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No problem! Mind explaining your personality more? I don't know what it means...Sorry for being so dumb and sorry for asking!

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No, no, you're not dumb! I'm sorry for being so vague https://www.16personalities.com/enfp-personality Heres an article you can skim!

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