Feb 13, 2021

Friendship Fiction Horror

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โ€œWhat are you going to do for your birthday?โ€ Emily asked as we walked into my room.


I shrugged and responded, โ€œWhat do you like to do?โ€


โ€œKeara, itโ€™s your birthday, so itโ€™s your choice.โ€


โ€œI know, but I donโ€™t know what to choose.โ€


โ€œDonโ€™t you like haunted houses?โ€


I nodded.


โ€œSo why donโ€™t you do that?โ€


โ€œItโ€™s the middle of March.โ€


โ€œWho cares?โ€


โ€œOkay, fine, Iโ€™ll do a haunted house for my birthday.โ€


Emily grinned with satisfaction and laid down on my bed.


The walls were a soft pink with little stickers placed inexpertly when I was 7. The desk was white with organized shelves with colourful pens inserted in them. My bed was also pink, with fluffy decorative pillows and little cherry blossoms on the duvet. Emilyโ€™s black hair was stark against the calmness of my room, her light skin gleaming under my fairy lights.


I sat down next to her and the bed made a little squeak.


โ€œWhere do you get haunted houses made for you?โ€ I asked her.


She sat up and told me, โ€œYou donโ€™t know? The Jerrinsons are the best haunted house makers in the world. Just say โ€˜I want a haunted house on this day at this time for this many peopleโ€™ and then youโ€™re done. Oh also, you say if you want mildly scary, medium or scare-your-eyeballs-out-of-their-sockets scary.โ€


I nodded and slid up to the top of my bed, where little pink fairy lights wove around the headboard. I wrapped a few around my hand, letting the warm light soak into my skin.


โ€œWho are you gonna ask to come?โ€ Emily said, breaking the silence while fiddling with one of my pillows.


โ€œThe cheerleading squad?โ€ I suggested.


โ€œThatโ€™s it? You canโ€™t only have girls at the party Keara.โ€


โ€œFine, Iโ€™ll just invite the whole class.โ€


Emily nodded.


โ€œSo,โ€ I started, โ€œAre we gonna study for the math test or not?โ€


โ€œNo one ever studies with their friends,โ€ Emily said. โ€œLetโ€™s just talk about stuff.โ€


โ€œWhat stuff?โ€


โ€œAnything!โ€


โ€œUh, okay.โ€



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โ€œHereโ€™s an invitation,โ€ a girl I think was called Emily said.


โ€œTo what?โ€ I asked, looking at the envelope.


โ€œTo Kearaโ€™s birthday. Itโ€™s gonna be in a haunted house.โ€


The envelope was a black and pink gradient, with a somewhat scary picture of a ghost on the front. It said โ€˜Youโ€™re Invited!โ€™ in light pink letters. The address just said The Jerrinsons House. No one needed an address because everyone already knew where they lived.


โ€œLike a lame one or an actual scary one?โ€ I asked.


Iโ€™d been to many lame haunted houses with cardboard jump-scares and slippery โ€œbloodโ€ that was actually fruit punch. I didnโ€™t want to go to another one, not in 11th grade.


โ€œA scary one. The scariest option,โ€ Maybe-Emily said.


I nodded, tucked it into one of my jean pockets and walked over to my locker.


โ€œHey dude, who was that?โ€


It was Andrew, my best friend.


Well, you could call him that.


โ€œI donโ€™t know, I think her nameโ€™s Emily,โ€ I responded, pulling out my textbooks.


โ€œWhat did she give you?โ€


โ€œAn invitation.โ€


โ€œTo what?โ€


โ€œBro, why are asking so many questions?โ€ I asked, shutting my locker with a loud bang.


โ€œYouโ€™re not the one to ask that,โ€ Andrew said. โ€œWhatโ€™s the invitation for?โ€


โ€œA birthday party.โ€


โ€œWhoโ€™s?โ€


โ€œUgh,โ€ I grunted, speed-walking away from Andrew. โ€œCould you stop?โ€


โ€œYou didnโ€™t answer the question!โ€


โ€œMaybe you wouldnโ€™t have had to ask me if you got one! Maybe if you were nicer, you wouldโ€™ve got one! Maybe if youโ€™d actually been to any parties, you would understand and wouldnโ€™t have to ask.โ€



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โ€œHow did it go?โ€ย 


Emily shut my bedroom door with a little click and sat down beside me.


โ€œWhat do you mean, how did it go? I handed out 20 papers, thatโ€™s how it went.โ€


Emily pushed me off the side of the bed, making me land hard on my backside.


โ€œWhy are you so grumpy today?โ€


โ€œWell, maybe some people were asking me for invitations that werenโ€™t in our class. Maybe I had to say I didnโ€™t have any left and that they werenโ€™t allowed to come without one. Maybe they punched me, maybe they glared at me, maybe they acted like I was a spider they wanted to crush. If you didn't ask me to hand them out, if you just did it yourself, I wouldn't be the embarrassment of the class. Or the school. But who cares?โ€


Emily stood up with great irritation and stormed out of the room, closing my bedroom door with a loud slam.


I laid down on my bed and while I twisted my fairy lights around my hand, I thought, Well, there goes my only friend.


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As I walked to Math, I wasnโ€™t accompanied by Andrew. Or Steve. Or any of the people on the football team. It was a bit lonely, to tell the truth.


I found my seat at the back of the classroom and set down all my stuff. I looked around in silence, taking note of all my classmates.


โ€œHi, youโ€™re Hadyn right?โ€


A girl sat down on the desk next to mine, pulling out fancy pens and shiny notebooks.


โ€œUm, yeah. Whatโ€™s your name?โ€


โ€œOh, Iโ€™m Keara.โ€


โ€œYour birthday is coming up?โ€


She nodded.


โ€œThe one with the haunted house?โ€


โ€œYes.โ€


โ€œWho was the girl that was handing out the invites?โ€


โ€œWhy are you asking so many questions?โ€


I blushed, realizing she repeated what I had said to Andrew.


โ€œUm, I donโ€™t know?โ€


She giggled and said, โ€œItโ€™s fine, I like answering questions. Emily used to be my best friend, but Iโ€™m not so sure now.โ€


โ€œOh. Me too.โ€


โ€œYou have a friend named Emily?โ€


โ€œNo, just- I mean, well- like-โ€


Keara smiled and just said, โ€œI get it.โ€


โ€œClass! Get out your textbooks and turn to page 394. Do not forget, we have a quiz on Monday. DO NOT FORGET!โ€


I smiled at Keara, and she smiled back.


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I heaved all my books onto my desk and ran downstairs, the smell of spaghetti sauce wafting through the house.


โ€œHi sweetie! Did anything interesting happen today?โ€ my mom asked.


โ€œNot much. Hmm, actually, I think I made a new friend.โ€


โ€œOh how nice! What is her name?โ€


โ€œTheyโ€™re a boy. His name is Hadyn.โ€


โ€œOh ok, what does he do?โ€ my mom questioned.


โ€œWhat does that mean?โ€ I said incredulously. โ€œHe does school.โ€


โ€œObviously. What else?โ€


โ€œFootball, I think.โ€


My mom nodded and set down a steaming plate of spaghetti in front of me. I grabbed the parmesan cheese and dumped a whole truckload onto it, just how I like it.


โ€œKeara, you always put too much cheese,โ€ my dad said, looking at my pile of cheese, noodles and sauce with concern.


โ€œNo, I donโ€™t! Everyone should eat it like this because itโ€™s the best way,โ€ I responded, and dug into my pasta.


After dinner ended, I went back to my room to study for our math test. I rolled my fingers over my pens, reading the colour labels on the sides.


Red

Orange

Gold

Yellow

Grass Green

Forest Green

Sky Blue

Ocean Blue

Violet

Lavender

Rose

Grey

Chocolate

Waffle Cone

Black


I slipped my phone out of my pocket to check the time, but I got distracted by something else.


สœแด€แด…สษด 6:03 แด˜แด

Hi! What r u doin?


How was he texting me?, I thought. I didnโ€™t even give him my number!


I texted him back.


แด‹แด‡แด€ส€แด€ 6:37 แด˜แด

How did u get my number?


He texted me back almost instantly. The three little dots beside his profile picture were rolling up and down as if taunting me.


สœแด€แด…สษด 6:38 แด˜แด

Um, a post-it note fell on ur chair in Math and it had ur phone number on it soโ€ฆโ€ฆ..


Aha.


แด‹แด‡แด€ส€แด€ 6:39 แด˜แด

Its fine. Do you want to go to the park tomorrow?


สœแด€แด…สษด 6:40 แด˜แด

But we have school


แด‹แด‡แด€ส€แด€ 6:41 แด˜แด

We can go there after school


สœแด€แด…สษด 6:41 แด˜แด

Ok. see u tomorrow!


แด‹แด‡แด€ส€แด€ 6:42 แด˜แด

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Bring!


โ€œDonโ€™t forget your paper about the American Revolution is due tomorrow!โ€


Ugh, I thought, Teachers are so annoying.


Once I had put everything back in my locker and my backpack was next to empty, I walked out of the school doors, a brisk early spring wind biting my cheeks.


Kids milled about in groups, a few strays caught here and there. They were gossiping, making plans for after school, talking about the latest filter on Snapchat. I used to be one of them, so I felt a bit awkward walking to the park by myself with no one to talk to.


Snow crunched beneath my feet and birds chirped in the distance. The trees looked oddly bare with no leaves on, as if they had forgot to change into them.


โ€œHadyn! Over here!โ€


Keara was sitting on a bench next to the pond, her dark brown hair flowing in the wind.


I ran over to her and sat down next to her, and time seemed to stop.


The pond had a thin blanket of snow covering it while a finch tiptoed on it carefully. The wind seemed warmer now, whipping at Kearaโ€™s hair and my face. I looked down to my feet, where I observed that Kearaโ€™s shoes were a similar size to mine. I looked up to her and she asked . . .ย 


โ€œWhat school did you go to when you were in Grade 3?โ€


Not the question I was expecting.


โ€œWhy?โ€


โ€œI feel like Iโ€™ve met you before.โ€


My eyebrows arched up in question.


โ€œDid you go to Harrowood Elementary?โ€ she asked.


โ€œYeah! Whoโ€™s class were you in?โ€


โ€œMs. Smith! What about you?โ€


โ€œMr. Luigi.โ€


โ€œYour teacherโ€™s name was Mr. Luigi? That mustโ€™ve been fun.โ€


โ€œIt was,โ€ I said, laughing my heart out.


โ€œDid he like Mario?โ€


โ€œI donโ€™t think I asked!โ€


Keara buckled over with laughter, spilling out of her like paint.


Never would I thought I would be talking about Mario and Mr. Luigi with a girl from History class.


โ€œWhenโ€™s the party again?โ€ I asked.


โ€œOn Saturday at 6 pm,โ€ she recited.


โ€œWhat day is today?โ€


โ€œFriday.โ€


โ€œSo tomorrow! What do you want me to get for you?โ€ I asked.


โ€œNo one asks what to get for their birthday Hadyn.โ€


โ€œWell, I want to get something you like!โ€ I protested.


Keara said, โ€œA cat?โ€


I laughed. โ€œI canโ€™t get you a cat.โ€


She pretended to pout. โ€œAw. Fine, what about a onesie.โ€


โ€œYou like onesies too?โ€


โ€œYes! I didnโ€™t expect boys to like onesies. Also, who gets a birthday present one day before the party?โ€ Keara asked.


โ€œWell I do,โ€ I said. โ€œDo you know why I didnโ€™t recognize you before?โ€


โ€œOh right. I think that I bit you and then your dog bit me so our parents said not to talk to each other. So I think we slowly drifted apart from being best friends to strangers.โ€


โ€œHow do you know that?โ€ I asked curiously.ย My parents never said anything about a girl biting me.


โ€œI remember,โ€ Keara said.


โ€œYou have a good memory. Oh yeah, what type of onesie do you want?โ€


โ€œA cat one.โ€


โ€œOkay. so-โ€


Buzz buzz


I pulled out my phone and opened it up to a text from my mom.


โ€œUgh, my mom needs me at home. See you tomorrow at your party!โ€ I said.


โ€œOkay! Bye Haydn!โ€ Keara responded.


I got up and ran towards my house, thinking about what store had the best onesies that were not $40.ย 


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I looked over to my clock to check the time.


5:45 pm.


15 minutes โ€˜till the party started, so I ran downstairs and slipped on my raincoat.


โ€œMom! Dad! Iโ€™m going to my party now!โ€ I called out.


โ€œOkay, sweetie! Have a good time!โ€ my momโ€™s voice said, floating down the stairs.


โ€œDonโ€™t get into any funny business!โ€ said my dad.


He always said things like that.


โ€œBye!โ€ I called out.


I turned the door handle and stepped out into the cold, walking a few blocks to the Jerrinsons house.


A crowd of people were gathered around the door, shivering and mumbling about who-knows-what.


I found Haydn and asked him, โ€œWho told the Jerrinsons that I had a party?โ€


โ€œI did. It was on my way to my house anyway, so I thought Iโ€™d stop by,โ€ he said.


His black hair curled around his forehead, framing his blue eyes. They looked like ice but felt warm like a campfire, warm and inviting. He was much taller than everyone else so it wasnโ€™t hard to pick him out of the crowd.


โ€œYou should go up there and announce that the party is starting,โ€ he suggested.


โ€œBut itโ€™s not time yet.โ€


โ€œYes, it is.โ€ He turned on his phone that blared 6:00 pm is bright white numbers.


โ€œBut-โ€


โ€œThere are no โ€˜butsโ€™,โ€ Haydn protested and pushed me up in front of everyone.


Everyone slowly quieted, looking at me expectantly to say something.


โ€œUh, so hi. Iโ€™m Keara. This is for my haunted house party, and-wait. How many people are here?โ€


โ€œ34,โ€ a quiet male voice peeped out.


โ€œThatโ€™s way more than the people in my class though.โ€


โ€œPeople invited other people to come with them because having a haunted house party in March was like the best idea ever,โ€ a female voice answered. Everyone shuffled in agreement.


โ€œOh ok,โ€ I said, beaming. โ€œCome in!โ€


And then I got trampled underfoot by the crowd like a herd of elephants.


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After everyone had dinner, Keara and Hadyn led the crowd to the entrance of the haunted house.


There were three entrances; one on the right, one on the left and one in the middle.


โ€œItโ€™s kinda like a maze,โ€ Keara said. โ€œChoose the way you wanna go. I think you should stick together because being alone in a haunted house isnโ€™t the best idea.โ€


Everyone started talking and organized themselves off into groups, people slowly flowing into the three different entrances.


The last group was a group of five: Emily, Danielle aka the girl who had spoken up during Kearaโ€™s mini-speech, Hadyn, Joey aka the boy who had said โ€˜34โ€™, and Keara.


โ€œWho should pick the way?โ€ asked Hadyn.


โ€œKeara,โ€ said Danielle and Joey.


Emily just shrugged.


โ€œOk,โ€ Keara said, โ€œLetโ€™s go in the middle one.โ€


They made a single file line with Hadyn at the front and slowly walked into the darkness.


It was pitch black, and they couldnโ€™t see anything. Emily looked around and thought she caught a glimpse of an evil red smile peeking out from the darkness, but then it vanished.


โ€œIs everyone okay?โ€ Haydn asked cautiously.


โ€œYeah,โ€ they all responded.


Emily started saying, โ€œThis is a little bit boring, is something interesting gonna happen-โ€


Her voice was cut off with a scream, one that only appears when someone is in real danger, one that could pierce the air like a nail.


Danielle swirled around and flailed her arms. โ€œEmilyโ€™s gone!โ€


Haydn and Keara locked eyes, worried about the rest of them.


They kept going, and Joey remarked, โ€œDo you guys see that face?โ€


โ€œWhat face?โ€ Haydn, Keara and Danielle asked.


โ€œYou really canโ€™t see it? Itโ€™s really obvious-โ€


His voice got strangled by someone, and Joey was gone.


โ€œGuys, I normally like haunted houses but this is getting actually scary. . ." Danielle said.ย 


โ€œStay close,โ€ said Hadyn, so they inched across the hallway glued together.


โ€œAre the Jerrinsons haunted houses always this good?โ€ asked Keara.


โ€œWell, people donโ€™t normally disappear. . .โ€ responded Hadyn.


โ€œGuys, I see someone smiling at me . . . โ€œ said Danielle.


Keara snatched Danielleโ€™s hand and her hand turned cold. A subtle breeze brought a foul smell, one of rotting flesh and dried blood.


An ice-cold hand wrapped around Keara and Danielleโ€™s hand, causing both of their nerves to freeze.ย 


โ€œCome with me, you wonโ€™t be disappointed.โ€


Danielleโ€™s hand was ripped away from Kearaโ€™s, pulling away with a final scream.ย 


And then there were two.


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Keara and Hadyn walked together in the darkness, spotting a few splatters of maybe-fruit-punch on the floor.ย 


โ€œWhat is happening? People are disappearing,โ€ Keara asked.


โ€œLetโ€™s forget about that,โ€ said Hadyn. โ€œRemember that time it snowed in the middle of summer?โ€


โ€œYeah, that was weird. Also, that little girl was on the news talking about how she saw fairies,โ€ said Keara.


โ€œProbably just her imagination.โ€


โ€œProbably.โ€


They walked along the endless hallway in silence, Kearaโ€™s flats clicking on the floor.


Click click click


โ€œI see something,โ€ said Hadyn.


โ€œWhat?โ€


โ€œA red grin.โ€


โ€œOh no. Oh no. Oh no oh no oh no.โ€


โ€œDon't worry, nothing will happen.โ€


โ€œYouโ€™re gonna disappear.โ€


โ€œ. . .โ€


โ€œHadyn? Hello?โ€


Silence.


Haydn turned his back on Keara, staring emptily into the darkness.


โ€œHello?โ€ Keara asked again.


ย She tried to reach for his hand, but it was occupied by something else.


A knife.


Haydn turned around slowly and when they made eye contact, she realized he was different.


His pupils were white like snow, with little red veins trailing out from it. He smiled, but it wasnโ€™t warm or inviting. It was crazy, dashed with insaneness. He looked like a clown from one of those horror movies.


โ€œHello, Keara. Want to play a game?โ€


She just glared at him and he walked slowly towards her, raising his knife higher and higher.


โ€œNo response? Oh well, I guess that means I win.โ€


He brought the knife down and Keara screamed.


And then there was one.


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so I TRIED to make it a funny horror story (sia's challenge), but that obviously didn't work :/ title suggestions please if one doesn't fit the story the best horror is fun to write lol XD did anyone catch the harry potter reference? comment if you did! hope ya like it!!!!! ~ Amethyst

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Ruby ๐Ÿ’ซ
22:45 Feb 16, 2021

Wow. The end tho! It was really nice story. You should be really proud๐Ÿคฉ๐Ÿคฉ Good job! -Ruby

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:D yea ikr???? thanks!!! I am, because its pretty long and was fun to write :) thank you!!!!!!

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Lillian Brooks
18:14 Feb 15, 2021

Ames Ames Ames do you wanna be in my TSD series??

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:O YESSS I WOULD LOVE TOOOOOOOOOOOO i just finished commenting on it lollllll

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Lillian Brooks
18:28 Feb 15, 2021

Could you answer this please: Name in the story: Hair(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine): Eyes(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine): Skin tone(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine): Clothing preferences(anything from color preferences to exact outfits is fine): Personality: Fav Color(if you want multiple, please choose up to two): Power (please choose one of the below): Elemental: Weakness: restrictions based on area Mental: Weakness: will always tell...

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Name: Emeryn Hair: light blue hair that fade the dark purple that is shoulder-length Eyes: lavender Skin tone: https://i.pinimg.com/originals/8b/b5/0b/8bb50be5a80ea11ff84ffaff95be1311.jpg the 'limestone' one clothing: always cozy and comfortable, neutral colours except for ice blue and dark purple. ALWAYS wearing white sneakers and a purple bracelet. hoodies are her favourite :) personality: kind, caring, shy with meeting people and has really bad people skills fav colour: ice blue and dark purple power: shapesifter. can I choose my a...

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Lillian Brooks
20:24 Feb 15, 2021

AHAHAHAHAHAHA I HAVE THAT SAME IMAGE SAVED TO MY COMPUTER

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Lillian Brooks
20:26 Feb 15, 2021

Also, shapeshifters can shift into any animal they study but you can choose your prefered animal.

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okee my animal will be an . . . arctic wolffffffffff i love arctic animals :D

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New threaddddd I bet you'll like it!!!! um probably just some cookies:D

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heyo sorry for not responding quickly oooh what kind???

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hi! that's ok:D um I'm not sure lol, maybe just chocolate chip!:D

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Oh wow, I donโ€™t even know how I didnโ€™t catch that plot twist. I mean... โ€œhow did you get my number?โ€ Combined with a haunted house? Still though, amazing job!

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Thank you! It was a random idea but I liked it, so I went along with it XD

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00:46 Feb 14, 2021

PLOT TWISTTTTTTT!! I love this sooo much. Canโ€™t wait to see what else you come up with. Keep writing! -Mj โœŒ๐Ÿพ P.S. Could you check out my newest story if you have a chance?

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YESSSS :D thank you!!!! actually, i've already read it but I forgot to comment! I'm heading there right now

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17:28 Feb 14, 2021

Okay thanks!

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17:28 Feb 14, 2021

Okay thanks!

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OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH I WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT ENDING!!!!! This was so good!!!! It was an amazing mix of humor, and a bit of *teen romance* Ig and then the horror got AMAZING at the endddddd You're horror stories always blow me away bcuz I never expect it!!!! This was probably my fav story you've written!!!! IT. WAS. AMAZING.

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:D THANKS SO MUCHHHHH yeah i know a tWiSt XD *teen romance* didn't really mean to do that but yAy!!! horror is fun to write :) :O wOwEeE!!! thanks! this is also one of my favourites too it was another long one lol XD

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XDDD lol I mean...until the end I saw a connectionXD long ones are the besttttttttt:DDDDD

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hahah yeah yessssssssssssss they take a long time though I have a lot of time so I like it XD

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XXDDDD ALSO, YOU HAD THE PERFECT OPPURTUNITY TO WRITE, "TURN TO PAGE 394"!!!!!!!! XD

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WAIT XD should i add that????

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Radhika Diksha
11:44 Feb 21, 2021

2 new stories would love your feedback on it.

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Mira Caplan
00:23 Feb 20, 2021

PART 18 HAS BEEN PUBLISHED

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Antman ๐Ÿœ
13:17 Feb 19, 2021

Oh My Gosh. This was a GREAT story! ๐Ÿ˜ฑ I loved it! Especially the ending, and how you only gave certain clues leading up to the end, giving a suspenseful air and filling us readers with dread. โค๐Ÿฅ— Amazing story! I can't wait for more! ๐Ÿคฉ Also, I don't know if you meant to do this, but the perspective changed from 1st person to 3rd. Honestly, it made the story better, but I was wondering if you noticed that. ๐Ÿ˜…

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thank youuuuu!!!! ahaha yay :) oh yeah i did mean to do that, just so you could see what was happening instead of the person perspective :D

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Antman ๐Ÿœ
01:45 Feb 21, 2021

I think it's great! Can't wait for your next story!๐Ÿ˜

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:D thanks! HOPEFULLY itll come out today but that's if I write like lightning XD

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Antman ๐Ÿœ
21:04 Feb 21, 2021

๐Ÿคฃ Typing like lightning is hard! I'm also writing a story, but am only like a 3rd of the way thru!๐Ÿ˜… I actually can't wait๐Ÿ˜๐ŸŽ‰

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WOWWW THIS IS SOOO GOOOOOOODDD! CONGOOO! BTW I LIVED TJIS SO DANG MUCHHHHH Just a little something, maybe make Danielle's death a little later, and maybe make the object different, so it wont be a lil cliche. Like..... Scissors? Or a red smile? Just my 2 cents!!

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THANK UUUU SIAAAA ok, I like the smil idea, Iโ€™ll change that :)

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Maya Emerson
21:29 Feb 13, 2021

Ohmigosh this was so fantastic, and the ending was perfect! I have goosebumps! XD It was interesting how the story started out with a happy unthreatening tone with them planning a birthday party and ended in MURDER. XD I think you had a good amount of characters and their personalities were well developed. The casual dialogue made the story flow really well. In the end, when they were walking through the haunted house you built up suspense well by having the kids be picked off one by one. I loved how you had them each see a balloon before th...

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thank you so much!!!!! yeah, tWisT XD thanks! yeah, picking them off was also really fun >:D :DD I used generators XD they are REALLY helpful though THANK YOU!!!!

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Maya Emerson
22:03 Feb 13, 2021

No problem! XD Oh yeah generators are great! Of course! :)

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Keya M.
21:12 Mar 15, 2021

So freaky. This is a great story Amethyst, you should be very happy! For reals! You're so talented! Would you mind checking out one of my stories and giving me some feedback? i'd really appreciate it.

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Awww thanks Keya!!! yes, you're on my list but I have so many things to do, it might take a little bit of time for me to get there, but I promise I WILL :)

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Keya M.
23:28 Mar 15, 2021

Thanks so much, Amethyst, ur a sweetheart.

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Maya Emerson
21:56 Feb 19, 2021

New thread XD

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yay XD mmm, they're not the best for me cause I don't love science fiction wbu?

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Maya Emerson
23:02 Feb 19, 2021

Aw alright. Um, I don't like them much either. But I do have an idea to continue my reedsy-cast series. :)

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Maya Emerson
23:32 Feb 19, 2021

:D Were you doing a collab with Luke?

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well hes not responding so idk

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02:10 Feb 19, 2021

AAAAAAAAAAAAND Hadyn was evil (called it!).

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well, not before he got possessed but YEAH

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Hi Amethyst just posted part 2 of THotF!!!!:DDD

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:D yayyyy ill check it out after school :)

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Danny Dorito~
02:24 Feb 18, 2021

Hmmm, new thread here? :D

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Danny Dorito~
02:38 Feb 18, 2021

how are you? :))

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almost done my logbook for the science faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaair oop sorry, I'm good :) wbu?

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Danny Dorito~
02:51 Feb 18, 2021

Ohhhhhh, that's great! I'm great! But omigoshhhhsdhfhhd, my 40 second video presentation sdlksjdlfkdjslfk lol Anything fun happening to you? :D

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ksjfksdjfkj40secondvideosnsjkdfjSKNFDSKJFJDS um . . . not really XD

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Tru Sorcerer
01:56 Feb 18, 2021

I tried to calculate and evaluate this way and that, and that way and this. โ€œI think, I want to read a trilling murder mystery now!โ€ I jumped up and started browsing through long lists. โ€œNa, too dramatic, too long, too short, too unheard ofโ€” WAIT!, thatโ€™s it!- โ€˜And then there were none!โ€™โ€ โ€œand then there were none....โ€ Something else caught m eye, a notification in reedsy... โ€œHm, oh, heavy praise, Amethyst, cool name, and profile pic, and likes purple, like me, I guess. Guess that Iโ€™ll check the stories out...โ€ I clicked and scrolled ...

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ahahahahaha thanks! also thank for this looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong comment :) ~and then there were none~ XD

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Tru Sorcerer
15:59 Feb 18, 2021

Did you actually read the full thing? XD Tho I ended reading 'ordeal by innocence', didn't feel like reading the other, lol, XD Have you read it?

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yeah i did lol wait is that a book? idk what that is XDDD

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Tru Sorcerer
16:02 Feb 19, 2021

XD yesss!, i read newer books in fantasy but in crime fiction i love to go old school. it's by Agatha Christie, you gotta try her books out, one of my favourites so far is 'the ordeal by innocence'. do you read crime fic anyway? what's yur favorite genres, Amuh? Happy Today!

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