Nov 30, 2020

Crime

Police swarm me, forming a circle around the rusty metal chair Iโ€™m sitting in. Everywhere I look, I see darkness surrounding me, except for the little light above my head, making me a spotlight in the center of the room.ย 

โ€œSon, Iโ€™m asking you for the last time. Did. You. Do. It.โ€

โ€œNo.โ€ย 

They all groan, and the chief whispers something to them, and they all leave except for him. He pulls himself a metal chair and sits across me.ย 

โ€œItโ€™s going to be easier if you tell the truth buddy. I want nothing but the truth.โ€, he growledย 

โ€œI. Didn't. Do. It.โ€ย 

Thatโ€™s the thing about police. They donโ€™t take no for an answer. If they think we did it. We did it.ย 

โ€œLook, we know it was you. You were the only person nearby and you were holding the gun. All evidence points to you. So I could have you in juvie right now, but Iโ€™m giving you a chance to admit your mistake. You should be gratefulโ€ย 

That does it for me. I snap.ย 

โ€œGRATEFUL? YOUR SAYING I SHOULD BE GRATEFUL FOR GETTING SHOT? GRATEFUL FOR BEING ACCUSED? GRATEFUL FOR LOSING MY FAMILY? I ALREADY TOLD YOU A MILLION TIMES. I DIDNโ€™T DO IT. WHOEVER SHOT THAT WOMAN THREW THE GUN AT ME AND RAN. I PICKED IT UP AND YOU SAW ME. I. DIDNโ€™T. DO. IT.โ€ , I scream at the officer. I donโ€™t care about politeness.ย 

The office opens his mouth to speak but Iโ€™m not done yet.ย 

โ€œYOU SAID ALL THE EVIDENCE POINTS TO ME, WE GUESS WHAT? THE GUN ALSO POINTED TOWARD ME, AND WHAT DID YOU DO? YOU BLAMED ME FOR GETTING SHOT. YOU THINK I โ€œACCIDENTALLYโ€ SHOT MYSELF? REALLY? ARE YOU EVEN A POLICE OFFICER? YOU- โ€œย 

โ€œTHATโ€™S ENOUGH ISSAC. THAT IS NOT THE WAY TO TREAT A POLICE OFFICER. LEARN YOUR MANNERS CHILD.โ€

His face is a shade of beetroot red, and his ears might as well have smoke coming out of them. Fuming, he stood up and kicked his chair behind him. I stayed where I was and held his gaze. I will not give up. He paces around in front of me, his arms crossed over his chest. Finally taking a deep breath he kneels in front of me.ย 

โ€œLook here son. I have given you many chances to tell the truth-โ€

โ€œBut I-โ€

โ€œNo I want you to listen. I have given you many chances to tell the truth, and yet, being the stubborn teenager that you are-โ€

โ€œOh, so you now youโ€™re insulting-โ€ย 

โ€œYou have kept lying to me.โ€, he raised his voice a little so he could dominate over my interruptions.ย 

โ€œFor the last time officerโ€ฆโ€, I said in an unnervingly calm voice. โ€œI. Did. Not. Do. It.โ€ย 

The officer looks at me. Then sighs. โ€œI will see you in court.โ€ย 

He left the room.ย 

Left me to my thoughts.ย 

Iโ€™m seventeen. Why would I kill someone?

I looked down at my arm, wrapped in bandages. The shooter had shot the woman, saw me, aimed for my head but shot my arm, ran out of bullets then threw the gun at me and ran away. The gun had landed at my feet, and I remember gingerly picking it up and feeling the blood trickle down my arm. When the police arrived, I thought everything was going to be fine, and that they were going to help me.ย 

Boy, was I wrong.ย 

They roughly seized me from the ground, and handcuffed my hands. Before they took me to the station, we made a stop at the hospital. The nurse was shocked to see a whole army of police with a bleeding teenager and a woman who hopefully was not dead.

She had died.ย 

And I felt like dying too.ย ย 

I will never forget the shocked look on my fatherโ€™s face when he saw what his stupid son had got himself into. I miss my mother. If only cancer hadnโ€™t taken her life. I hear the voices of police officers discussing my fate. My fatherโ€™s voice joins the chorus of shouts and finally, they stop. The click of the door opening echoes through the dark room, and I prepare myself for what would come next. The same officer that had grilled me before came in, his face redder than ever from the shouting match outside. He tosses a piece of paper onto my lap then starts untying the bonds on my arms. I bend my head and read the flimsy paper. It read:ย 

โ€œ Name of offender: Issac Wells

Crime may or may not have committed: Murder with a weaponย 

Witness: Mr.Smith - called police after hearing gunshotsย 

Victim: Belle Terryย 

Date for Trial: Dec 2ย 

Lawyer: Vincent McNouganย 

My heart almost stopped. December 2. Only two days away. Mr.Smith. Half of this was that old manโ€™s fault. If he wasnโ€™t 80% blind, maybe he wouldโ€™ve seen the gunman running away. Maybe he wouldโ€™ve seen me being shot. But instead, he described what he saw as โ€œA speck in the distance running from a young man with a gun near him.โ€ Well, when you put it that way, of course Iโ€™m the offender. If only he remembered to put on the glasses that were resting on his head. If only. Belle Terry? Oh. I guess that was the name of the woman I apparently โ€œkilledโ€. Looks like my father finally managed to get a lawyer for me. Last time I heard, he charged $7000 per case. Damn. The police officer finished untying me, and shoved me out the door. My dad is there, waiting for me. His face looks stressed and he grabs my arm and drags me out of there. I guess Iโ€™m free.

Jerking, I wake up from the dream. Boy was I wrong again. Rubbing my eyes I tried to forget the trip I just took down memory lane. Wow. I look around and let out a cruel evil laugh. Iโ€™m sitting in a prison cell. Wearing an orange jumper.ย 

Iโ€™ve been here for two years. And will be here for a few more.ย 

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182 comments

Very different indeed. Spent hours working on this at night. completely random. enjoy.

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Very interesting indeed. it fits the prompt, so it's not COMPLETLY random. ooh. i did enjoy.

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Alex Allison
23:49 Dec 14, 2020

This was brilliant! I particularly loved the plot twist at the end! It was unexpected in a very good way. The dialogue felt realistic and how you describe the surroundings is spot-on, I knew exactly what you were going for. Well done Sapphire! Can't wait to read more ๐Ÿฅฐ

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Oh wow thank you so so much! Your feedback is appreciated! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks again!๐Ÿ˜€โค

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Nainika Gupta
17:51 Dec 16, 2020

such an awesome story Sapphire :) i loved the uniqueness of it and how it fits your style :)

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Nainika Gupta
17:53 Dec 16, 2020

and just a quick grammar stuff bc I know you want constructive critisim โ€œGRATEFUL? YOUR SAYING I SHOULD BE GRATEFUL FOR GETTING SHOT? GRATEFUL FOR BEING ACCUSED? GRATEFUL FOR LOSING MY FAMILY? I ALREADY TOLD YOU A MILLION TIMES. I DIDNโ€™T DO IT. WHOEVER SHOT THAT WOMAN THREW THE GUN AT ME AND RAN. I PICKED IT UP AND YOU SAW ME. I. DIDNโ€™T. DO. IT.โ€ , the 'your' should be you're there shouldn't be a comma after 'it' right at the end and that's really it!! Great job again

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Nainika Gupta
17:55 Dec 16, 2020

and upvote for upvote spree?? I'm going to get you to at least 600!!!!

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Aaaaah OMG i LOVE constructive criticism. Thank you for the corrections, I will see if there is a way to fix 'em. And yes....UPVOTE SPREEEE! But im in class, so I'm gonna take a break in between. Yasss

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Nainika Gupta
18:08 Dec 16, 2020

No problem!! And that's cool, take your time :)

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I'll help with the upvoting!

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Nainika Gupta
21:41 Dec 22, 2020

Aww, thank you!!

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Anything to help you out! (Just wondering: was it a downvoter that made you lose points, or did you just need to get a bit higher? I've upvoted a few Reeders who've been downvoted, but I also upvote just to get people higher.)

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Livia R
20:51 Dec 12, 2020

Hi, Sapphire! I really loved how you told this story, especially the what-ifs at the end, I just like those personally. I also liked how it was told in a dream form so that we are told both the far off ending and the beginning. Liliana

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20:44 Dec 15, 2020

Imma upvote u for this storyyy

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Wait are you celeste simmons? or Luna? or just a new reedsy friend :)

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20:47 Dec 15, 2020

Reedsy friend! Thank you!

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20:50 Dec 15, 2020

Imma get u to 400

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20:45 Dec 15, 2020

Eeee Oh, love ur name!

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Ray Dyer
21:17 Dec 10, 2020

Hey, Sapphire! Nice job setting up a situation that feels real enough to be genuinely disturbing. The bit near the end where Isaac puts together what must have happened is welcome, but my favorite part is the ending. "It was all a dream" is used too often, but I like the twist you put on it. It was all a dream...of what happened a couple years ago. Great twist, on that old twist! Thank you for sharing your story!

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Hello Ray! Thank you so much for your critique, it is really appreciated. I'm glad you like the ending, I happen to be a fan of twisting twists (did I just make a tongue twister?) Thank you once again for stopping by!

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A.R. Eakle
17:46 Dec 10, 2020

This story is really dark and twisted when you get down to it. A seventeen year old that killed somebody? Geez! If you'd like me to review your writings, check out my Instagram @EakleReviews!

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Haha yeah, I have a thing for dark, twisted tales. Ya know, to let our my inner demon or something through writing, since my friends would think I'm delusional (๐Ÿ˜‚) And yes, I will totally check out your Instagram! Thanks for stopping by!

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F. A.
22:13 Dec 07, 2020

Great job! Well-written, my friend!

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William Liu
03:11 Dec 07, 2020

I like the memes on the doc in ur bio :D

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01:11 Dec 17, 2020

Amazing story, Sapphire!!! You portrayed the injustice perfectly! It made me, as the reader, care what happened to your main character. I love how it looks like he will have a happy ending then it turns it was all a nightmare he had in jail. The ending really tied the story together perfectly. Also, I really loved the line, "YOU SAID ALL THE EVIDENCE POINTS TO ME, WELL GUESS WHAT? THE GUN ALSO POINTED TOWARD ME." Really nice job!!! Keep writing! Btw do you want to do an upvote spree? :)

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aaAAAAAAH IM SO SORRY I DDINT SEE THIS EALIER!! You are soo nice and thank you for the feedback! And yes totally ready for an upvote spree when you are!

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17:02 Dec 17, 2020

Ok, I'll try to get you to 900 points. :)

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yess thank you! I'll try to get you to 400 or 500!

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17:29 Dec 17, 2020

I upvoted all your comments. :D Thanks so much for upvoting me!!! OMG you're at exactly 1000!!!

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:DDDDDDDDDDDD (lol im so late to this sorry I luv you by the way thank youuuuuu!!!)

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:DDDDDDDDDDDD (lol im so late to this sorry I luv you by the way thank youuuuuu!!!)

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Angelina S.
11:11 Apr 10, 2021

Hiya Saph! I know this'd been written preeettttyy long back but I somehow came across this one, particularly. This was damn good, I loved reading every single bit of it although, I didn't get the part where Isaac took the gun from the ground. "THE GUN ALSO POINTED TOWARD ME, AND WHAT DID YOU DO?" it says here that the gun was pointing "toward" Isaac so did he like take the gun from the ground that way, meaning pointed it toward him? *grinning sheepishly after realizing what a stupid question I just asked* There are a few minor errors thou...

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Hi!!!!!! **cough cough** this was written in my innocent days when editing wasn't exactly my forte XD Thank you!!!!

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Angelina S.
05:40 Apr 11, 2021

Oooh, it's alr, will check one of your recent ones! Melcow!

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Eeek those are pretty lame as well XD haha is it backwards day? XD uoy knaht!!!!

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Angelina S.
09:43 Apr 13, 2021

Naw theyโ€™ll be good! haha it is? llew....yppah sdrawkcab yad ot uoy oot!

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We'll see- :P Maybe it is! ahahah ylthgils detacilpmoc tub nuf ta eht emas emit!

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Hope Reynolds
19:10 Jan 12, 2021

Ohhh...know that I go back and read part 1 before reading all the other parts (crylaughtertears) Did he have to wait years until his trial in part 2? amazing intro setting. Oh MY, the mood evoked by visuals, the emotion, the imagination! โ€œFor the last time officerโ€ฆโ€, I said in an unnervingly calm voice. โ€œI. Did. Not. Do. It.โ€ The officer looks at me. Then sighs. โ€œI will see you in court.โ€ Also great part quoted above - its simple, but it cuts, and the tension or however I describe it. He seems like a really strong character, who eithe...

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Thank you so much!!!! Yeah I love making things dramatic and ominous, creating tension in stories is also fun. Basically, I love writing negative emotions, I feel like it's something that I can really pour out from my heart lol. Thank you for the feedback, I will make those changes for future stories!!! :DD

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Hope Reynolds
20:37 Jan 12, 2021

Oh, that wasn't a critique - with the quote. If that is what you meant by changes. :D It must have sounded like I was saying that those lines sucked the tension, especially in a bad way lol. Sorry, I confused you. It's was all good commentry; you have the focus of the audience, and he says that with all the good periods, and then the guy kind of is like "fine."

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Ohhhhh yeah that makes sense haha XD

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Hope Reynolds
20:53 Jan 12, 2021

By the way, I just edited it and also added more detail to the more recent comment, just in case you wanted to know XD

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Danny ~
04:12 Dec 19, 2020

Wait HAHAHAHAHA i was the 100th commenter.....sorry...time to ruin it.

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LMAO that's so cool... nah that's fine i'm still in shock that I even got a hundred (probably form the extra long comment threads above XD)

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Danny ~
04:11 Dec 19, 2020

Oooh great story~ I loved the ending :)) I'm always in for a good plot twist

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Haha thank you so much! Damn, how did it feel to be the 100th comment? Well 101th now lol

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Danny ~
00:16 Dec 20, 2020

My comment feels like a sprinkle in a confetti cake, congratulations on 100+ comments, btw!

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XD ah, oh how I wish to feel that beautiful! Thank you, but I'm pretty sure most of it is just mine and Celeste's extra long comment thread lmao!

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02:03 Dec 17, 2020

Hi! Talk?

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16:29 Dec 17, 2020

Great! You? (Ur in ma bio XD)

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I KNOW I SAWWWW AAAAAH THANK YOUUUUUUUU

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16:35 Dec 17, 2020

NOO PROBLEM UWU :D

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:DDDDDDDD Lmao we're doing a Kahoot XD Whatcha up too?

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16:36 Dec 17, 2020

New story!

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AAAAAAAAAAAH YESSSSSSSS LEMME CHECK IT OUT!

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Ari Reynes
19:56 Dec 15, 2020

Awesome story! It fits the prompt well. Nice job.

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Ari Reynes
20:12 Dec 15, 2020

No problem. You did a great job!

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:D Also, you said something about figuring out your name in your bio...Teddy Lupin is from harry potter right? Like Lupin's son.

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Ari Reynes
20:14 Dec 15, 2020

You got it!

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Livia R
06:19 Jan 13, 2021

Umm banana?

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hehehe thank you I will add your name into the list XD

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Livia R
17:42 Jan 13, 2021

XD hahaha

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Whoah. I'm so glad that part 2 is already out, so I can keep reading this wonderful, breathtaking story. The beginnings mostly flashback (actually most of it was a flashback) but that's ok!

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AH THANK YOU SO MUCHHHH!! Yeah, part two is less of a flashback, so that's nice :D

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D. Kase
16:46 Dec 17, 2020

Wow! I love this story!!! You are very talented! ๐Ÿ˜Š I look forward to reading more of your stories!!!

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Thank you so much! This means a lot!

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D. Kase
16:57 Dec 17, 2020

๐Ÿฅฐ

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Miles Swanson
21:57 Mar 02, 2021

That was so good. The whole story was really easy to get into from the beginning and I really felt for your character, hoping he'd find a way out of this. The plot twist was my favorite part...oh it's just a dream, but a dream of something that happened. I usually don't like stories that are down on police but this overcame that and still made it enjoyable. 90% of police I know are really great people, it's just sad the few that are bad get the attention of the media.

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Lol plot twists are so fun to write :) Yeah, it is a pretty touchy subject. Police officers have my utmost respect, and writing this story wasn't to offend any of them. Yeah, most officers are amazing people. But I guess the media is also pretty useful, because without them we wouldn't've known about what was happening. It is pretty sad. Thank you for stopping by to read this story! I really appreciate your feedback :)

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