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Nov 28, 2020

Crime Drama Romance

“Where are you taking me?” I ask for the fifth time, as Levi leads me forward, a blindfold over my eyes.

“I’m still not going to tell you, no matter how many times you ask.” 

He replies, laughter in his voice. 

Without warning, he stops walking and I smash right into his muscular back. I use my hands to push myself away from his back and I rub my forehead. 

“I just got a face full of shirt! Next time, warn me!” I call in the direction I’m assuming Levi is. I hear his snort and assume I got the direction wrong. I feel two strong hands gently turn me around to face him. 

“It’s not nice to yell at nature.” He replies, his voice so soft, he seems bored. 

“Ha-ha! Very funny!” I strike back at him as the cloth covering my eyes is slowly lifted off my face. 

My eyes take in my surroundings, it’s beautiful!! Levi has taken me to a spot on a big, open field. Where we are is shaded by a big, willow tree, and we are on top of a small hill. There’s a blanket spread out in front of me, all sorts of fun snacks are laid out on the blanket. There’s a brown, old-fashioned picnic basket beside the blanket on the grass. 

“So...what do you think?” Levi looks at me, biting his lip in nervousness.

“I love it!” I scream and wrap my arms around him. He laughs with pleasure and wraps me up in a hug. Once we break apart, Levi takes my hand and leads me onto the soft, blue blanket...

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I sit up in bed, shaking and sweating. It seems like the most wonderful dream ever, but not when you know the boy in the dream died that day. It’s been three days since I found Levi dead in our favorite spot. He’d texted me to meet him there, said he had a surprise for me. I couldn’t think of what the surprise would be, after the picnic that morning. 

When I walked through the vines, into our shaded, secluded spot, I saw him lying there, as lifeless as a log. I remember seeing his ghostly-white face and the blood surrounding his chest. I don’t remember much of what happened next, all I know is that I dropped the bundle of flowers I had collected, and knelt down beside him. I sat there and cried against his lifeless form. I don’t know how long I stayed like that, but I do know that my mother came in and tried to pull me away from him. I clung onto Levi like my life depended on it, she gave up and went to call the police.

When they came, I was pulled away from him and held back by a tall, muscular police officer. I remember hearing a scream, but not even being aware that it had come from me. I’m not sure what happened after that because I curled up and cried my heart out as soon as Mother got me home. 

I wipe my eyes free of tears as the memory of that day overcomes me. Levi was my best friend, and meant a lot to me, and now that’s all gone! I sniff and slowly slide out of bed. I walk over to the mirror and wince at my reflection. These past few days haven’t exactly been kind to me. I do the best I can to make myself presentable, including changing into jeans and a t-shirt from my pajamas. I throw my auburn hair into a messy bun and call it good. 

I walk out of my room and fresh tears start to water in my eyes as I come to the doorway of the lounge. This was where Levi and I spent most of our time. With soft steps muted by the carpet, I make my way over to the center wall. A beautiful, shining black piano rests against that wall. A soft sob breaks in my throat as I imagine Levi playing all of those smooth keys. 

Levi was always drawn to our piano. I never understood his need to play, maybe it was because he didn’t own a piano, only a keyboard. He always told me that it didn’t sound quite the same, which meant he was always at my house. I run my hand softly across the keys, remembering how captivating it was to listen to Levi play. It was like you were pulled into a dream of sorts when listening. It was incredible! 

I slowly slide the cover over the keys and a single tear slides down my face, onto the piano. 

“May! Can you come down here? Someone’s here to see you!” Mother yells from downstairs, taking me from my thoughts. More tears stain my cheeks at my nickname. Levi used to call me that. 

“Be right there!” I cringe at how fake cheerful that sounded. I wonder who is here...maybe a neighbor or one of Levi’s parents? I speculate as I descend the stairs. When I reach the bottom of the stairs, I turn left to go into the front entryway. I freeze in my steps when I see who is here. Pure dread washes over me. A police officer? 

“Honey, this is Officer Janet, she would like to ask you some questions about Levi’s death.” Mother says this in her sweetest voice, but she’s fooling no one. This is going to be a difficult conversation.

“Alright.” I manage to say. Officer Janet motions for me to join her on the couch, I do so reluctantly.

“Okay, Maybelle, let’s start. When were you last in contact with Levi James Hunt?”

“About ten minutes before I found him.” I reply, trying to be as honest as I can so I can get this over with. 

“Okay, how did you know where he was?” 

“He had texted me to meet him in our spot.”

“That’s your spot? Who all knows about that spot, or knew about it before Levi died?”

“Levi, me, and my Mother.”

“Why does no one else know?”

“Because we wanted a space to ourselves, but we told Mother because we wanted to make sure someone knew in case of emergency.” I look up from staring at my hands and see an odd expression cross Officer Janet’s face. I have a feeling it is anything but a good thing. She gives a slow, sharp nod and stands to talk with Mother. I hear bits and pieces of the conversation:

“I need to take her in for questioning.”

“...you mean?”

“...she could be...suspect.”

I sink lower on the couch. My heart is pounding hard against my chest, and my thoughts are racing. Me? They think I killed Levi? Mother will tell them otherwise....right? I’m so terrified I think I might puke. There’s no way I’m leaving with her! I won’t! I was the last one with him, so I’m basically already charged with the crime! I race upstairs as fast as I can and gently shut and lock the door of my room. I collapse onto my bed, not sure what to do. This can’t be happening!

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56 comments

Joe Bob
16:59 Nov 28, 2020

Is this the end of the story?

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Lord Hunkyhair
17:05 Nov 28, 2020

yes....cliffhanger

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Joe Bob
17:07 Nov 28, 2020

gasp

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William Liu
04:27 Nov 30, 2020

aww i would love it if u could make a part 2 :(

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Lord Hunkyhair
15:52 Nov 30, 2020

If i can come up with more content I will try my best :)

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William Liu
02:18 Dec 01, 2020

ok :D

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Lord Hunkyhair
00:20 Dec 01, 2020

Currently working on a part 2

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F. A.
21:47 Dec 07, 2020

YASS! Thank you so much!

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Leya Newi
17:27 Nov 28, 2020

YOU’RE LORD HUNKYHAIR!!!! *ahem* I loved the story! Such a cliffhanger! It was written skillfully, I think you have talent. I want more, and that’s definitely a compliment. Keep writing, Lord Hunkyhair! *fangirl squeals*

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Lord Hunkyhair
17:53 Nov 28, 2020

Thank you so much! If i get a good prompt I will!

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19:37 Nov 29, 2020

I’m guessing you know who Lord Hunkyhair is? XD

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Leya Newi
02:32 Nov 30, 2020

I do indeed. *smirks*

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15:23 Nov 30, 2020

Hehehe... XD

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F. A.
21:45 Dec 07, 2020

This was the best cliffhanger story I have ever read! It could have been Levi who killed himself as a surprise or a murderer who was walking in the forest. The end is urging me to want to read more. Please make part 2!

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Lord Hunkyhair
21:58 Dec 07, 2020

Most defiantly will! Thank you so much!

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Disney Lover
17:17 Dec 06, 2020

It’s so easy making a first part that end in a cliff hanger but when you make a second part which has a real ending it get really difficult and you don’t really want it to be good ending because most murder stories don’t end happy

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Lord Hunkyhair
20:41 Dec 06, 2020

Wally true

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Lord Hunkyhair
20:42 Dec 06, 2020

Oops really

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Lord Hunkyhair
20:42 Dec 06, 2020

I have beginning and end ideas but still have to come up with middle

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16:03 Nov 30, 2020

Hey, you’re right! This one is pretty good! :D Nice job..........Hunky! XD

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Lord Hunkyhair
16:27 Nov 30, 2020

Thanks!

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Ana Govindasamy
21:06 Dec 15, 2020

NOOOOOO NOT THE CLIFFHANGERRRR

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Lord Hunkyhair
22:39 Dec 15, 2020

I’m truly an evil writer, hence i make my readers suffer. XD

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Empress Mayhem
22:59 Dec 13, 2020

I Love This ! It Is Truly Phenomenal, But I Do Hate How It Ends On A Cliffhanger . I Am Praying There Will Be A Part Two . Excellent Work !

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Lord Hunkyhair
01:30 Dec 14, 2020

Thanks! I am working on one

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Kate Reynolds
14:07 Dec 11, 2020

WOW I loved this story!!!!!!! (Are you going to make a part 2?)

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Lord Hunkyhair
14:49 Dec 11, 2020

It’s in the process at the moment!

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Kate Reynolds
16:36 Dec 11, 2020

YAY! Tell me when you're done!

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Lord Hunkyhair
16:46 Dec 11, 2020

Will do! I’m at 1576 words at the moment

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Kate Reynolds
17:07 Dec 11, 2020

:D

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Lord Hunkyhair
01:58 Dec 16, 2020

Did you like part two?

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Ray Dyer
20:53 Dec 10, 2020

Hey, Lord Hunkyhair! Love the exuberant beginning and the break into the tragic storyline. The entire section about the piano is also a beautiful character study. From the line about "I never understood his need to play" till the end of that moment, I can tell you, it's so true. My wife talked for years about wanting a piano, and we would still love to be able to get the real thing someday. I've lived that entire paragraph and have seen the joy that playing brings. Really enjoyed reading your story - Thank you for sharing it!

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Lord Hunkyhair
23:34 Dec 10, 2020

I really appreciate you thoughts, and I also took that part from personal experience, since I only have a keyboard.

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Liana S
03:05 Dec 07, 2020

Absolutely love your writing. Every thing about this story is just incredibly, cant wait to read part 2!

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Lord Hunkyhair
14:14 Dec 07, 2020

Wow! Thank you so much! This means a lot!

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That was very good. I hope you do a part 2. I will be looking for it.

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Lord Hunkyhair
22:57 Dec 05, 2020

Thanks so much!

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Tvisha Yerra
03:34 Dec 01, 2020

Also love the story! Nice ending :)

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Lord Hunkyhair
14:31 Dec 01, 2020

THank you, and YESSSSSS

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Tvisha Yerra
03:32 Dec 01, 2020

Is that you Keefe?!

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Ari Reynes
16:09 Nov 30, 2020

Awesome story! Is there going to be a part 2?

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Lord Hunkyhair
16:26 Nov 30, 2020

If I can come up with the content

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Ari Reynes
16:27 Nov 30, 2020

I hope so! Great job!

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Lord Hunkyhair
16:27 Nov 30, 2020

Thank you so much!

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Ari Reynes
16:35 Nov 30, 2020

No problem!

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08:12 May 07, 2021

Nice story! btw may i ask what is the moral of the story? Just wanted to know

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Lord Hunkyhair
00:34 May 30, 2021

Nothing really. Btw I don’t really right stories around a moral

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Litlover 📖
14:54 Dec 02, 2020

Great job!!!!

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Lord Hunkyhair
18:44 Dec 02, 2020

Thank you!

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Litlover 📖
18:45 Dec 02, 2020

I posted another story!!!

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Lord Hunkyhair
18:51 Dec 02, 2020

I will read it!

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Litlover 📖
18:52 Dec 02, 2020

yay!!

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