Nov 13, 2020

Sad

Hi everyone! This is a story I'm really proud of, so I hope you enjoy! A couple things:


1 This is my first poem I've written on Reedsy! All feedback is appreciated!


2 I would like to dedicate this story to Aamena Khaki, who introduced me to Reedsy, and to Caramel Leaf, who introduced me to writing stories! Thank you both so much!


I hope you enjoy this poem!


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I've witnessed a murder.


That much is true.


Perplexing thoughts.


Of which I'll tell you.


From cursed mirrors.


To an ugly sweater.


To movies and shows.


You knew better.


You knew not to.


Listen to the voice.


The voice in your head.


Saying, "You have no choice."


"You're ugly."


"Pathetic."


"Freak."


To the point you were apologetic.


Yet when you looked in the mirror.


You didn't see these things.


No, what you saw,


It was you who had wings.


An angel you were.


Guiding others through rough times.


For you learnt that the mirror.


Didn't have control over your eyes.


Over what you see.


Or who you were.


Or how you looked.


Sometimes it wasn't all a blur.


Yet there was someone you couldn't save.


Save them from their end.


This person shook you.


Since she was your best friend.


For it started on,


A chilly January day.


Two popular girls.


Walked up your way.


"Hey, I like your sweater,"


Said one sarcastically.


"It reminds me of trash,"


Said the other drastically.


They circled around you two.


Malice in their voice.


Telling you lies.


Your friend makes the choice.


Over the years,


Your best friend start to listen


Listen to the mirror


To their vision.


She didn't realize.


How perfect she was.


Inside out.


Only because:


What people see


Isn't true


But then you listen to them


It affects what you do


To how you dress


To how you eat


To how you think


You feel incomplete


You feel like


You'll never be enough


Until the day


You're fed up


You ignore these words


You believe again


For self doubt won't affect you


So you help others in pain.



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ALWAYS remember, you're special in your own way! Never believe what people think of you! If they don't see the real you, then let them hate. Let them stare. Let them joke. You're beautiful inside out, and if they can't see that, then they're blind. I can see it. Even though I've never met you. Even though I've never seen you, I KNOW you're beautiful. I know your special. I know your perfect. Don't let words affect you. And if you've come out of a rough battle, help others in pain too. Tell them to repeat this:


You are beautiful.


You are loved.


You are perfect.


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432 comments

B. W.
23:58 Dec 23, 2020

heyyy

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B. W.
01:59 Dec 07, 2020

This could be the new thread?

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B. W.
03:04 Dec 07, 2020

Could i tell ya now?

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B. W.
06:40 Dec 07, 2020

I kinda have a regular idea for a story on here and not a novel, I kind of want to do it as a audio/voice log if that makes sense. But I've never done it before and I don't think anyone else has, so I need some help on what to do and all that.

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I think I've read a story where someone did something like that. They put the log in quotations, and put what the character said, like this: "Log 31: I've been following the footprints for three days, still no lead. Should I continue?"

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B. W.
20:34 Dec 24, 2020

do you see the new prompts?

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Mhm, they're pretty cool? What do you think?

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B. W.
02:56 Dec 25, 2020

I'm kinda confused, why would they be out today instead of Friday?

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Ohh yeaaa it's Thursday- that's really odd-

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B. W.
14:53 Dec 25, 2020

Also, Merry Christmas :)

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B. W.
03:00 Dec 24, 2020

Sorry for asking again, this is probably getting annoying or something, though hows it going with the drawing?

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No it isn't annoying! It's going good so far, although I'm redoing the face constantly- I'm going to sent you a photo tomorrow, sorry I keep forgetting!

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B. W.
05:24 Dec 24, 2020

It's fine, i guess all of our memories can be a bit bad from time to time :/ Why do ya keep redoing the face though?

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It just keeps messing up. I draw one eye and it looks nice, but when I put them together it keeps looking a bit wacky-

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B. W.
05:28 Dec 24, 2020

From how it is right now, how much longer do ya think it'll take until its fully finished and all that?

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The face is the last part of Evelyn I need to draw, apart from the hands. So after that I'm gonna need to draw Freddy. So about 2 weeks-? More or less

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B. W.
05:23 Dec 22, 2020

I kinda made a new story, could ya check it out and leave some feedback?

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B. W.
17:22 Dec 22, 2020

yay ^^

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B. W.
04:02 Dec 12, 2020

heyyy

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B. W.
04:07 Dec 12, 2020

help me please

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B. W.
04:09 Dec 12, 2020

me and some others are being spammed by the same person

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o-o noticed that on ur recent story-

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okie...noice poem and all, but I'd replace 'you are perfect' with 'you are enough'. 'Cause no one is perfect, only Jesus :)

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Thx for the feedback! I believe everyone is perfect. In their own way pfc, not pErFeCt pErFeCt. You know? Idk if I make sense xD Basically, we're all perfect. To be US. Although that isn't our definition of perfect. But it definitely should xd. Get what ur saying tho

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yeah I see your side too ;)

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XD *aNoThEr tHrEaD eNdEd* (maybe ;)) )

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17:16 Feb 25, 2021

✨✨✨✨✨ - a scorpio '-'

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17:52 Feb 25, 2021

ayy

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Livia R
07:12 Nov 27, 2020

Hello, M! I really, really liked the poem, very well thought out and it conveyed the story very well! I admire the moral, the message of the story and I think you're a beautiful writer. Keep writing! -Whirl

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Thank you so much, Whirl!

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Me when I read the dedication: WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA Anyway, it was an AMAZING poem!!!

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Lol, thanks! You know how my last poem went, it was (kinda) fun so I tried doing it again πŸ˜‚

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Caramel Leaf
18:29 Nov 16, 2020

Thank you so much for the dedication, I really like this poem because I hate myself lmao- Hey, did you know if you stare at yourself in the mirror in the dark for long enough you start to see things that aren't there?

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Caramel Leaf
20:30 Nov 16, 2020

GO ON THE DOC I HAVE A QUESTION-

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B. W.
04:54 Jan 01, 2021

New thread?

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B. W.
05:38 Jan 01, 2021

the ball hasn't dropped yet, its like 11:40pm where I live, though it still close to finally becoming the new year and stuff. Is it already 2021 where you live?

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B. W.
06:04 Jan 01, 2021

Do ya even think 2021 is gonna be better?

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I hope so, I really don't want a repeat of this (well, last for you now) year.

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Did you see the ball drop for NYC? If ur in the US

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B. W.
04:10 Dec 21, 2020

Ya like zodiacs?

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Mhm, I research about them a lot xD, I'm Scorpio, yet I don't seem MUCH like one

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B. W.
04:42 Dec 21, 2020

I'm a Virgo ^^

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Oo cool! Virgos are practical and tend to be perfectionists, I love zodiacs xd

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B. W.
06:31 Dec 21, 2020

Your a scorpio right? I think you said it in your bio but I ain't sure

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Mhm, I don't really feel like one though. Cause scorpios are mysterious and passionate, but misunderstood and emotional. The emotional part I get

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B. W.
21:06 Dec 20, 2020

Heya ^^

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B. W.
22:10 Dec 20, 2020

how are ya today? ^^

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B. W.
22:18 Dec 20, 2020

I'm fine, though check youre points now ^^ Ive been upvoting you for a while now and I got ya to 400 ^^

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WHAAAAAAAT you didn't have to!! D:

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Now I'm upvoting you, goal is to get you to 15000 u-u

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This is such a good poem! how did you manage to rhyme every other line? it has a really good message too. great job! 😊πŸ₯°πŸ’– - Amethyst

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upvoted u to exactly 200 points :D

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Aww thanks! :D Gonna upvote you too!

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thank yuuuu! πŸ₯°

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B. W.
18:39 Dec 16, 2020

Heyyy

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B. W.
19:44 Dec 16, 2020

how are ya?

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Good! I made the form btw: https://forms.gle/DKbf97MhzLm8vWfv6

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B. W.
20:07 Dec 16, 2020

it seems really great ^^

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Thanks xD I made that around June

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I was only able to find one drawing in my files, I'll keep looking for them and send them to you soon!

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B. W.
05:32 Dec 13, 2020

Hey

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B. W.
17:41 Dec 13, 2020

how are ya?

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B. W.
17:49 Dec 13, 2020

Im a bit annoyed by something but I guess I'm fine

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14:56 Dec 04, 2020

This is hands down an awesome story. I loved reading this!!

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B. W.
17:41 Dec 01, 2020

New thread?

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B. W.
20:39 Dec 01, 2020

how are ya today?

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B. W.
22:05 Dec 01, 2020

I'm still a bit tired and bored but I guess I'm fine

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B. W.
18:22 Dec 19, 2020

Hola amiga

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Hola! Como estas? XD btw I'm reading ur story rn

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B. W.
02:03 Dec 20, 2020

which story do ya mean though?

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The one you told me to check out xd

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B. W.
02:38 Dec 20, 2020

the second part to dragon watcher?

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