The Witch Convention

Submitted for Contest #65 in response to: Write about a group of witches meeting up on Halloween night.... view prompt

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Oct 27, 2020

Fantasy

“Welcome to the 7,459th annual Witch Convention. Please don’t forget to leave your black cats, toads, werewolves, manticores, chimeras, and any other in the cages provided,” a monotone feminine voice drones from somewhere up high. 

“Ah, Hazel, how wonderful to see you again!” I glance behind my shoulder and see a witch in an emerald-colored robe walking towards me. I suppress a sigh of dismay upon seeing my aunt.  “What do you think of your very first Witch Convention?”

“It’s spectacular, Miss Andromeda,” I say, bowing low.

“Oh, there’s no need for that,” Andromeda says, though it’s obvious she’s enjoying this, “This isn’t the 16th century.” I smile at her and continue walking down the row of stalls. There are stalls advertising potions, spellbooks, ingredients and rare herbs, broomsticks, robes, and so much more. I brush past Andromeda and go to the robe tailor. 

“Hazel!” I hear a voice shout. I turn around just in time to be nearly suffocated in a hug. 

“Geez, Esme, get off!” I mumble, pushing her off of me. Esme takes my hands, a huge grin on her pretty face. Her shiny, raven-colored hair falls down past her waist, and her shining green eyes are alight with magic and mischief. She has the looks of a perfect witch. I, on the other hand, am blonde with brown eyes, which is nearly unheard of here. 

“I’m so excited!” Esme shouts, practically bouncing with pleasure, “I can’t believe we’re here! We’re going to be real witches, Hazel!” I laugh and link my arm through hers and we go on exploring the stalls, leaving my aunt in the dust. We pick out our first robes, Esme picks green and I pick red, both traditional colors. Then we both pick out our conjuring items, which are essential to being a witch.

“Hallo there, girls! What can I get for you today?” A kind older witch in purple robes smiles at us and moves to display the wall of conjuring items behind her. There are hundreds of items anywhere from pencils to papers, jewelry to jars, boxes to books. Esme gives a sudden squeal of delight and points to a fraying leather bracelet. The old woman takes it down and hands it to her.

“Thank you!” Esme cries.

“Now, I know you both probably know this already, but I have to tell you what a conjure item is and how to use it. So, a conjure item is an item through which a witch can channel her magic. It can be anything, as long as it has been magicked by putting it in the Fountain of Youth. Use it wisely, and have a lovely rest of your day. Now, what can I get for you?” The lady looks at me expectantly as I examine the shelves. I’m starting to panic. What if there isn’t a conjure item that’s perfect for me? But then, I see it. There is a small hair clip with a shining red butterfly on the end. I can feel the magic in it calling to me. I point to it and the lady hands it to me. I pin it into my hair and I can feel the magic coursing through my bones.

“C’mon, Hazel!” Esme pulls me along to the next stall where they are selling pets. “Ooh! Look how cute that little pixie is!” The pixie Esme was referring to came to the bars of the cage and smiled at her, reaching out.

“That one’s a trouble maker, she is,” A witch in grey robes says, smiling. 

“Sounds perfect for you, then,” I say, nudging Esme. The witch pulls the tiny pixie out of the cage and sets her in Esme’s palm. The little pixie snuggled up against her fingers and went right to sleep. Esme, with shining eyes, put the pixie in her pocket. I pick out a little black kitten and decide to name her ‘Stella’.

As Esme and I are walking towards the next stall I hear a small noise coming from a nearby room. I let go of Esme’s arm and walk over to it, and slowly push the door open. It’s too dark to see, so I walk all the way in. Suddenly, a hand wrapped around my mouth and someone slammed the door shut. I was shoved to the ground and someone put a foot on my chest. Someone hit the light switch, and I gasped. A boy of about 16 was hovering over me, and he looked just as shocked as I did.

“Sorry! Sorry, I thought you were someone else!” the boys said helping me up. 

“How-What-Why-”

“I’ll explain later,” the boy grabbed my arm and jumped out of a window in the back. I glanced back just in time to see Esme’s terrified face as she called out for help. Now, you’re probably wondering why seeing a boy is such a big whoop. A couple of centuries back, some wizards decided they would take over the world. So they put a curse on all of the witches and wizards so they lost their magic. Eventually, the witches and wizards defeated them. However, the wizards' magic didn’t return, only the witches. Over the decades, the people who knew of the wizard population died out and they were forgotten.

“Stop,” I yank my arm out of his grip and glare at him, “Who are you? And how in the name of beetles did you get in?” The boy pulls me into an alleyway and glances around to see if anyone is looking.

“You know about the loss of the wizards' power, yes?” he asks.

“Yes,” I say, unsure of what he’s getting at.

“Well, forget that. It’s all a lie, created by you witches. Some of your type are keeping our powers for themselves, and we have to stop them.” I stare blankly at him. What? How could that be true? My aunt, Andromeda, is one of our leaders. She may be extremely obnoxious and nosy, but she’d never hold anyone's powers captive. Would she? “I know it sounds crazy, but you’ve just got to believe me. I need your help.” I look at him.

“Okay,” the word is out of my mouth before I can stop it. The boy grins and takes my arm, leading me farther down the alley.

“And just what,” a cold voice behind us says, “do you think you’re doing?” I’d know that voice anywhere. Andromeda.

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129 comments

Hello there Felicity! I want to praise you by saying that you did a spectacular job with the plot of this story! You had all the elements a good story, and even a good book needs! Every second I was reading this, my mind was relaying a movie! It only takes a very talented writer to do that, and you are one of them! 😀 Another detail I want to shout you out for is that you did a great job with the plot of your story. This prompt was one of my favorite prompt out of all the other ones. But your story made this prompt even better! You created...

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13:03 Oct 28, 2020

Thank you so much, Haripriya!!! And I will! ;)

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Lina Ozz
04:30 Oct 28, 2020

This is so creative and descriptive. I love the world-building you've created here, from the characters to the conjuring item (so cool) and the last bit of action; anxiously awaiting Part 2! Tiny edits: We pick out our first robes, Esme picks green and I pick red, both traditional colors. --Needs semicolon separating independent clauses: We pick out our first robes; Esme picks green and I pick red, both traditional colors. “That one’s a trouble maker, she is,” A witch in grey robes says, smiling. --No capitalization for dialogue...

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13:19 Oct 28, 2020

Thank you so much! I'll fix those!! I will! ;)

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23:12 Oct 27, 2020

Hey guys! Thanks for reading! Just a heads up, this one's rough! I'll take any critique you have! Thank you again!

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Radhika Diksha
14:42 Nov 05, 2020

hey felicity I have seen that you gave thumbs up for some of my stories, But I would love more if you commented on them.

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14:59 Nov 05, 2020

Sure! I will be sure to do that! ;)

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Alexander Katz
18:13 Oct 30, 2020

Dig it, give me chapter 2! I love being dropped into a story–it's not easy to pull off, but I think you did it exceptionally well here. You've made me believe that there's more to the story in this universe. And in a short like this, that's awesome.

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18:14 Oct 30, 2020

Thank you so much, Alex!!

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Suzi Zinn
01:48 Oct 30, 2020

Loved your story, Felicity. Also good job on bio. Important messages within. I m following you now. Keep writing. It is good for the soul

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02:02 Oct 30, 2020

Thanks, Suzi!!

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Mark D
02:30 Oct 29, 2020

Hey Felicity, great story there. It seemed like you were writing from personal experience with the details you included. I agree with Lina's comments. a couple really minor punctuation things that didn't detract from the story. I come across so many stories on here where people clearly didn't even bother to reread their submission even once to catch the plethora of spelling and punctuation errors. You have those things pretty well nailed down, so good on ya for that. And you have a creative mind and a good way of telling your story, so...

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18:04 Oct 29, 2020

Thank you, Mark! I will be sure to fix those!!

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Jane Digiovanni
21:20 Oct 28, 2020

I hope there's another installment in the future. The story really pulled me in.

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21:48 Oct 28, 2020

Thank you, Jane!

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Leilani Lane
14:57 Oct 28, 2020

Magical! Love the world-building and the dialogue. Great work, Felicity! Just some small suggestions: If the narrator calls her "Miss Andromeda," I think she should be labeled as that throughout the story instead of just "Andromeda." Her shiny, raven-colored hair falls down past her waist, and her shining green eyes are alight with magic and mischief. Shiny/shining are pretty similar, could use another adjective! Personal preference. :) But then, I see it. There is a small hair clip with a shining red butterfly on the end. -->...

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15:10 Oct 28, 2020

Thank you so much, Leilani!!

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Leilani Lane
16:17 Oct 28, 2020

Of course!! :)

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Radhika Diksha
02:33 Oct 28, 2020

This is such a wonderful story, the way you write your stories is amazing. I think I should take writing lessons from you. Actually I wanted to write something about this prompt, and you definetly inspired me. I'm not going to copy your story in any way, but I have got a idea. And there's a last sentence, behind us says" do you think, you're doing". I think you should change this sentence to "IN GODS NAME CAN I KNOW WHATS HAPPENING HERE" I think this will be more impactful. Would love its sequel. I know you have liked my recent stories, but ...

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13:05 Oct 28, 2020

Thank you so much for the feedback! And I'd be happy to read and comment on yours! :)

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Philip Clayberg
00:42 Nov 09, 2020

Thank you for writing this. In my opinion, it's just begging for a sequel (or, preferably, more than one sequel). I truly hope that you have plans to write it (or, preferably, them), because I want to read it (or, preferably, them). I can almost imagine the boy turning to Hazel (whose back blocks Andromeda's view of what he's going to do) and whispering, "When I say 'hit the ground', do it." "What are you going to do?" Hazel asks. "Hit the ground!" he cries and she does so without hesitation. A jagged blue bolt cuts through the air...

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15:21 Nov 09, 2020

Haha, thank you! That's a way better start to the sequel than I was planning! ;)

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Philip Clayberg
19:15 Nov 09, 2020

You're welcome. I'm glad I could help. I figured you could use it as brainstorming material and then come up with your own version. Btw, I just fixed two typos in what I wrote in my last response: "hestitation" should've been "hesitation", and "friend hand" should've been "free hand". I guess I should proofread and edit more than just my stories, but also my responses. Looking forward to your sequel. Want to see how *you* wrote it.

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21:02 Nov 09, 2020

Thanks again, Philip! :)

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Nora K
16:18 Nov 05, 2020

Hi Felicity!! I really love your story’s dialogue and descriptions! I think you did an outstanding job on this one! Witches assemble!! :)

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16:23 Nov 05, 2020

Hey Nora! Thank you!!!

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Alice N.
16:32 Nov 04, 2020

Really loved this! I felt like I was reading a chapter out of a book and I only wish there was another page to turn! :)

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17:10 Nov 04, 2020

Thank you, Alice!

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I. F.
01:23 Nov 02, 2020

This was a really fun read for me! You had good dialogue and nice pacing. The idea of a witch's convention is quite funny, great job!

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14:20 Nov 02, 2020

Thanks so much, Itay!!

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Ben Franklin
18:34 Oct 31, 2020

Cool start! That cliff though... I need part 2!

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20:18 Oct 31, 2020

Thanks, Ben!

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Jeni Conrad
09:49 Oct 31, 2020

Hah, I LOVE the idea of a witch's convention, It's modern and funny. This seems like it has the potential to go somewhere super fun and adventurous. Great story!

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15:42 Oct 31, 2020

Thanks, Jeni!!

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Derrick Kakooza
07:29 Oct 31, 2020

This is amazing. I want more....... I like the suspense 🤠

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15:42 Oct 31, 2020

Thanks, Derrick!

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Ashley Fraley
03:20 Oct 31, 2020

I love this story so much! If you were to write an entire book about this I’d buy it.

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15:40 Oct 31, 2020

Thank you so much, Ashley!

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Andrew Krey
22:13 Oct 30, 2020

Hi Felicity, I enjoyed your story. You quickly place the reader in the witches expo, with strong visuals. As the prompt is still live, I would suggest tweaking the section where you explain what a conjure item is. It’s a bit repetitive, and feel it can be streamlined a bit more to make it feel less like an info dump. But overall, a fun story :) I hope the feedback was helpful. Happy writing.

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15:36 Oct 31, 2020

Thank you so much!

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Andrew Krey
15:51 Oct 31, 2020

You're welcome

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Would you be able to provide me with some prompts like Ru did? The link is in my bio and I would really appreciate it. Plus I want to write stories that interest you guys!

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17:32 Oct 30, 2020

Sure!!

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17:37 Oct 30, 2020

Okay! Done! I'll add a new one every day if I can

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Cool! I probably won't be able to do all of the prompts that you give me but I will get some of them done for sure! :)))

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20:34 Oct 30, 2020

Okay! You'll just have a boatload of ideas in case you ever get stuck. 😂😅

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Wow this is really good! Also, I read your bio. I also live in Wisconsin!

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16:54 Oct 30, 2020

Thank you! That's so neat! :)

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