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Oct 27, 2020

Sad Thriller Fantasy

Hi there. I know you. I know you are reading this. I know what you feel.

Β I'm inside you. Oh-oh no, no don't worry. I'm inside everyone. Do you know who I am? I suppose not. Oh well, not everyone is famous, are they?


Come on, try to guess who I am. You know. You know me. And I know you, we have known each other since birth. Yes, since birth. To speak of, everyone knows me. I know everyone.


I go by different names. You see, aliases. So that the good don't get me. But you, you are my favourite.Β You are my best piece of work. My masterpiece.


So, I'll tell you my aliases. You won't tell the good will you? No, because I control you.Β have powers to. Here we go.

DepressionΒ 

Sadness

Anxiety

Peer PressureΒ 

Low self-esteemΒ 

No ConfidenceΒ 

LonelinessΒ 

And all the others.Β 


Honestly, Depression and Anxiety are my favourite. It's so fun to make people cry. Shut themselves. Isolate themselves.Β Make them feel bad. Like they're worth nothing. Hehe. You'll understand later. Oh and the best part is when they give up on you.Β Hehe.


But you fought. Why? Why did you fight against me? You knew I'd win. I am made to win.Β 


I met you first when you were Five. Yes, the day your mom died. That was fun. For me. I had a good feast. You shut up. You cried. Cried your heart out. In your pillow. You wept day and night. I actually felt sad for once. Yes. Me. It is sad to see a Five year old cry. Maybe the good finally found me. But then I laughed. At your foolishness.Β 


I kept on whispering. In your ears. That she's gone. You'll never see her. She's dead. She didn't say goodbye. She didn't come in your dreams. She did nothing.Β 


You heard me. But shut me out. Bad move. You ignored this for a year. Two. Four years. Then it flooded back to you. That she's freakin' dead. She will NEVER EVER come back. You turned 10. You learnt that your dad was smoking. He couldn't bear the loss. He went with his friends. Out. Everyday. Came back at 2 o'clock.Β 


That's how you went into depression at 10 years of age. You had panic attacks. Your dad couldn't do anything. He passes out on the sofa. You lay there. Frozen. White foam coming out of your mouth.Β You lay there for a day. Then the maid came, and she saw you twitching your mouth in all directions.Β 


She took you to the hospital and admitted you. She was a nice lady.Β But your dad, he didn't even apologize for not being there. So, you went into a coma. For 3 years.


You came out. At 14. Smoking took a toll on your dad. He had a heart attack. And, well, he too died. But this time you didn't cry. You didn't care. He was nothing to you. Not after what happened to mom. He didn't care about her. He didn't care about you. All he cared was for himself.Β Β 


So, you went boarding. A very bad place. You entered "Your room" and saw a moth-eaten bedsheet on a disgusting bed with cigarette burns all over the bedsheets. The walls were rotting and the Mirror was covered with mold and black spots.Β 


And according to Murphy's Law. "If something can go wrong, it will."Β 

So, New rotten school = New rotten bully. Yeah. You got bullied, hurt because of this Noah kid. Good bully.Β 


You see, I live in The Suddesion. Pain and Regret, my two assistants guard the door of Suddesion. The Suddesion is a universe.Β As you guess, it isΒ made up of Sadness and Depression. In your words " a black hole of sadness".Β 


I grow more as you become more sad. I also emit sadness through bullies, bad luck, and other things. Then there are Stunbees. Yes, these Stunbees sting you. When they do. They stun you really bad. They are like animated creatures. They have long violent zig-zag shaped stripes. These stripes sting you.Β 


For example, you have met a stunbee before. Everyone has. Like if you failed an exam, or got fired, or just got to know that your crush likes your friend. They always travel in threes.Β 


A Year Later… 


You stand at your Mother's grave thinking of your past. You are 15 now. Noah is in a mental asylum. His brain became distorted.Β It's your birthday today. But no one remembers. Then you hear a shuffle of feet. It's Noah. With a gun.Β Your head spin around, your vision is blurred and as you see the smile on his face widen you scream: "BOOM LIFE! I DIDN'T KILL MYSELF. ALL MY LIFE I FOUGHT THROUGH!"


Click, Click.Β 

Shot.Β 

You're dead.

On your birthday.Β 

Happy Birthday



Author’s note: This story was a little short so this note is gonna be long. Ignore if wanted. So um….. this is sad. Very sad. Sorry! 😬😬


And also, HAPPY BIRTHDAY RHONDA!!!!Β Β 

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Find the Four "Ugh" loll I'm soo annoying. Bye!!!!Β 


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1213 comments

Kate M
14:07 Dec 01, 2020

I loved this story. It was very sad, but I appreciated it. It was interesting how it was written from Depression and Anxiety’s perspectiveβ€”I liked that! Especially now β€œGood” was also a character, and how Depression and Anxiety shied away from it. I think this is a very real depiction of how β€œhe” can work his way into your mind and whisper in your ear. Also, thanks for following me! ❀️

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Wow! Thanks a lot for this heartful comment! ❀ I appreciate the time taken!! :D

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B. W.
05:32 Dec 01, 2020

Could you check out "Unforgivable" and leave some feedback?

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B. W.
06:29 Dec 01, 2020

alright thanks, im a bit excited to see what ya think ^^

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B. W.
07:20 Dec 01, 2020

I hope ya like it though, i was kinda thinking that people wouldnt like it

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Hey, Sia!!! Would you mind checking out my new story?? Thx!

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B. W.
21:16 Nov 29, 2020

Heyyy

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B. W.
05:46 Nov 30, 2020

how are ya?

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B. W.
18:39 Nov 30, 2020

whats wrong?

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Laiba M
20:28 Nov 28, 2020

I found you on Reedsy just today! Happy Birthday, Sia~~! I love this story! It's great :) And I loved how you filled up the 1k words with that long endnote :DD

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Laiba M
13:22 Nov 29, 2020

No problem!!~

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B. W.
00:53 Nov 28, 2020

Hey, whats wrong? are you alright?

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Aww thanks ! The thing in my bio, was mostly just stress, but bday magic fixes everything!

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B. W.
05:09 Nov 28, 2020

well if ya say so, at least if your alright then its fine with me ^^ Have ya maybe tried a stress ball or anything like that for when ya get stressed?

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^^ yes, I tried a fidget spinner, which was later snatched away by my little sister 😬

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B. W.
05:16 Nov 28, 2020

have ya tried anything else?

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B. W.
21:43 Nov 27, 2020

Could i maybe ask you something?

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B. W.
05:10 Nov 28, 2020

someone commented on my story before deleting it "Sorry i have to do this :(" and probably on some other peoples as well, though we have no idea or at least we don't remember who it was :/ and i kind of have a small feeling that they could be the downvoter or just one of them, so i was wondering if that's maybe happened with you yet and if you maybe remember their name?

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Yess!! I did see a comment like this on Zilla and Aerin's stories!

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B. W.
05:17 Nov 28, 2020

ya did? do you possibly remember the name or anything like that of the person who said it??

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Hi Sia!! I just posted a new story and would love it if you could check it out (if you have time and want to of course) Also, what is up with your bio? Are you okay?

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Ooooohhhh yessss!! Ohh well, I wasn't feeling that well, stress, and stiff. But bday magic fixed it!!

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Thankss! Can’t wait to see what you think Okay! Well I am glad that you are better noww!

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Halfway through...? Your birthday?

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Radhika Diksha
07:57 Nov 23, 2020

Sia, can you upvote me few points? Someone here doesn't take comments properly hence they are downvoting me. I have closed like 60 points. It will be helpful to me. And I will upvote you too. By the way, How are you? Any update about The boy?πŸ˜πŸ˜‚

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Sure! I'd love too! Aww that's bad. :) I'm doing fine, how about you? He's been sad and not playing that well because his crush (my bff) was out of town for 9 days. But today she's back!

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Radhika Diksha
13:15 Nov 23, 2020

IM WELL. Thank you for upvoting me. I have to ask you a question Is my stories cliche in romance? Who does Austin like? he should love you. Austinnnnnnnn loves Sia.

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yay! Awww my pleasure! No, I wouldn't call them cliche at all. They are really good! Aww thanks!

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Radhika Diksha
17:20 Nov 23, 2020

how many points did you upvote so I can do the same?

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B. W.
20:36 Nov 21, 2020

heyyyy

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B. W.
05:04 Nov 22, 2020

how are ya?

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B. W.
05:46 Nov 22, 2020

eh, i guess im fine

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Good! So, how does it feel to be in the top 10?

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Amany Sayed
16:19 Nov 06, 2020

Yellow dot yellow doooooot

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Alright, I'm giving you that yellow dot! Can you check out my latest story, Stace?? (can I call you that? It's SUCH a cool nickname) Thanks!

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Yayy thanks!! Oohhhh yes sure! Aww thanks!

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Thank you so much!!!!

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22:56 Nov 04, 2020

This is such a sad story! I felt that the 2nd POV made it a lot more chilling. Nice job! Being the selfish girl I am, I am now expecting a birthday story for yours truly from you. K? Thanks. πŸ˜‰

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Aww thanks! And, yes sure! You'll definitely be getting one!

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02:52 Nov 05, 2020

Yay! :)

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By the way, what were you sick with? You know, you can tell me

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Shae Greyfeather
19:12 Oct 30, 2020

Wait, am I about to cry. I think I am. That story was so moving, it reminds people that there are people out there with anxiety.

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Shae Greyfeather
14:07 Oct 31, 2020

Your welcome! 😊

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AHHHH SO YOU HAD A PEN NAME TOOOO THIS ALWAYS CONFUSES MEEEEE THIS IS THE PROBLEM WITH ONLINE FRIENDS OS THAT YOU GET CONFUZZZZZZZLED AHHHH MIND BLOWN

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HAHAHAAAAA THIS WAS SOOO FUNNNNNN BUT YEAHHHH IT WAS CONFUZZLINGGG

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Kaitlyn James
03:32 Oct 28, 2020

This was very well written. I liked how you symbolized depression, and sadness. It was a great story. Very sad and I think that you should go back and instead of the blah blah blah's you should elongate the story, like instead of you dying, maybe Noah kidnaps you or something?? I think it would be really cool. Great job! Keep it up!

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Thanks Kaitlyn!! Hmm yes. I tried to make it longer. Thanks, but not tobe rude or anything, I think it should be dying only, cuz well she shouts about life and stuff and I think that's kinda important. But thanks!

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Kaitlyn James
03:38 Oct 28, 2020

Now I gotcha. It is your story and your decision and I think it's a good one. I think that the dying might be a better idea. Great job Sia!

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Oh thanks! I hope you aren't offended or anything, cuz if u r , then sorry!!

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Kaitlyn James
18:08 Oct 28, 2020

I’m not great job

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Wow Sia another great story! This was really really sad...and it left a trail of tears but it was amazingly written. I noticed your improving on your punctuation and thats good!! I also noticed from your usual BRIGHT and full of energy stories this one was more mellow and calm. But sad. Its good to change up your style once in awhile and you did it perfectly! Great job!

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Awww Thanks a LOT Ugochi !!! This made my day!! πŸ₯°πŸ₯°

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I'm sooo happy it did! Also I know when I write sad stories I am usually in a mood. So I wanna ask you, are you okay, mentally? Physically? everything alright?

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Aw Well, I was feeling a little down, so I wrote this. It was like sadness for no reason πŸ™„

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Well to me I don't think sadness ever really comes for no reason. Though it may feel like it, but there is always a reason you just have to look. And once you find it you can resolve it

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Woah i should do that. Ya know, you could earn money as a therapist!

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16:45 Oct 27, 2020

It's a well-made story! I suggest describing the part where the MC hears Noah coming, and how the MC feels at that point.

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Oh nice ! Will add more over there . Thanks!

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Kate Reynolds
00:26 Jan 16, 2021

Hello!! How are youuu??

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Kate Reynolds
15:06 Jan 16, 2021

I'm good tooooo

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Kate Reynolds
17:10 Jan 16, 2021

:DDD

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B. W.
23:22 Jan 15, 2021

Heyyy

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B. W.
06:56 Jan 16, 2021

How are ya?

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B. W.
08:09 Jan 16, 2021

I guess I'm fine, your writing a new story?

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