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Oct 27, 2020

Sad Thriller Fantasy

Hi there. I know you. I know you are reading this. I know what you feel.

Β I'm inside you. Oh-oh no, no don't worry. I'm inside everyone. Do you know who I am? I suppose not. Oh well, not everyone is famous, are they?


Come on, try to guess who I am. You know. You know me. And I know you, we have known each other since birth. Yes, since birth. To speak of, everyone knows me. I know everyone.


I go by different names. You see, aliases. So that the good don't get me. But you, you are my favourite.Β You are my best piece of work. My masterpiece.


So, I'll tell you my aliases. You won't tell the good will you? No, because I control you.Β have powers to. Here we go.

DepressionΒ 

Sadness

Anxiety

Peer PressureΒ 

Low self-esteemΒ 

No ConfidenceΒ 

LonelinessΒ 

And all the others.Β 


Honestly, Depression and Anxiety are my favourite. It's so fun to make people cry. Shut themselves. Isolate themselves.Β Make them feel bad. Like they're worth nothing. Hehe. You'll understand later. Oh and the best part is when they give up on you.Β Hehe.


But you fought. Why? Why did you fight against me? You knew I'd win. I am made to win.Β 


I met you first when you were Five. Yes, the day your mom died. That was fun. For me. I had a good feast. You shut up. You cried. Cried your heart out. In your pillow. You wept day and night. I actually felt sad for once. Yes. Me. It is sad to see a Five year old cry. Maybe the good finally found me. But then I laughed. At your foolishness.Β 


I kept on whispering. In your ears. That she's gone. You'll never see her. She's dead. She didn't say goodbye. She didn't come in your dreams. She did nothing.Β 


You heard me. But shut me out. Bad move. You ignored this for a year. Two. Four years. Then it flooded back to you. That she's freakin' dead. She will NEVER EVER come back. You turned 10. You learnt that your dad was smoking. He couldn't bear the loss. He went with his friends. Out. Everyday. Came back at 2 o'clock.Β 


That's how you went into depression at 10 years of age. You had panic attacks. Your dad couldn't do anything. He passes out on the sofa. You lay there. Frozen. White foam coming out of your mouth.Β You lay there for a day. Then the maid came, and she saw you twitching your mouth in all directions.Β 


She took you to the hospital and admitted you. She was a nice lady.Β But your dad, he didn't even apologize for not being there. So, you went into a coma. For 3 years.


You came out. At 14. Smoking took a toll on your dad. He had a heart attack. And, well, he too died. But this time you didn't cry. You didn't care. He was nothing to you. Not after what happened to mom. He didn't care about her. He didn't care about you. All he cared was for himself.Β Β 


So, you went boarding. A very bad place. You entered "Your room" and saw a moth-eaten bedsheet on a disgusting bed with cigarette burns all over the bedsheets. The walls were rotting and the Mirror was covered with mold and black spots.Β 


And according to Murphy's Law. "If something can go wrong, it will."Β 

So, New rotten school = New rotten bully. Yeah. You got bullied, hurt because of this Noah kid. Good bully.Β 


You see, I live in The Suddesion. Pain and Regret, my two assistants guard the door of Suddesion. The Suddesion is a universe.Β As you guess, it isΒ made up of Sadness and Depression. In your words " a black hole of sadness".Β 


I grow more as you become more sad. I also emit sadness through bullies, bad luck, and other things. Then there are Stunbees. Yes, these Stunbees sting you. When they do. They stun you really bad. They are like animated creatures. They have long violent zig-zag shaped stripes. These stripes sting you.Β 


For example, you have met a stunbee before. Everyone has. Like if you failed an exam, or got fired, or just got to know that your crush likes your friend. They always travel in threes.Β 


A Year Later… 


You stand at your Mother's grave thinking of your past. You are 15 now. Noah is in a mental asylum. His brain became distorted.Β It's your birthday today. But no one remembers. Then you hear a shuffle of feet. It's Noah. With a gun.Β Your head spin around, your vision is blurred and as you see the smile on his face widen you scream: "BOOM LIFE! I DIDN'T KILL MYSELF. ALL MY LIFE I FOUGHT THROUGH!"


Click, Click.Β 

Shot.Β 

You're dead.

On your birthday.Β 

Happy Birthday



Author’s note: This story was a little short so this note is gonna be long. Ignore if wanted. So um….. this is sad. Very sad. Sorry! 😬😬


And also, HAPPY BIRTHDAY RHONDA!!!!Β Β 

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Find the Four "Ugh" loll I'm soo annoying. Bye!!!!Β 


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Hi! First of all Happy Early Birthdayyy!!!!! Also, would you like to go on an upvote for upvote spree anytime soon?

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Awww thanks Blair! Of course!

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Of course! I will try to come by on your real birthday but I just wanted to wish you an early one in case I forget. Okay, just let me know when and how many!

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Aww that's still sweet. :) I'll do you now, umm around 150?

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Of courseeeeee! :) Sure! Heading to do 150 to you right nowwww

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Hii! I just did 150+! Also, I got to say that it is so sad that most of your comments were at 0! I am so sorry and you (Or anybody else for that matter) don't deserve this at all.

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Thank you!! Oh, well, that's fine. I decided to ignore the dv. But still, thanks! I'm in class so ill do it during my break?

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Orenda ♀
07:28 Oct 28, 2020

okay, this WAS AMAZING, SIAAAA! you did a terrific job with it! πŸ₯³ I loved the symbolization of depression and sadness. I'd suggest working on your punctuation, it'll be all okay with just a quick scanning of the story. Overall, I'm impressed! (as always haha)

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Awww thenku so much Ren! This made my day!!

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Orenda ♀
07:56 Oct 28, 2020

awwwπŸ₯Ί I'm so glad it did. You did an amazing job.

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😊😊. Btw I'm still angreh that ren is your pencils name 🀫 In code words lol

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Orenda ♀
08:59 Oct 28, 2020

lmaooo, I can make it my reel steal name 🀫

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Lolllllll,I need a pen name...

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Raquel Rodriguez
20:27 Dec 01, 2020

OMG GURL YESSSS STARTING A NOVELLLLL! Anyway, check my bio! ;)

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YESSSSS, ACTUALLY TRYING TO LMAO Oooh sure!

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Raquel Rodriguez
14:46 Dec 02, 2020

WOWWWWW GURL I'M SO PROUD, MY LITTLE GIRL IS GROWING UPPP! :) did that help you a little? There will be no crying Sia's (no that's not correct punctuation) on my watch

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AWWW LMAO, SHANKSS yes, yess :D

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Raquel Rodriguez
18:08 Dec 02, 2020

WHY WERE YOU CRYINGGG? SPILL, I don't want any of my friends to be sad.

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LOLL, I TWAS CUZ 9F SCHOOL, STRESS, ETC,

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Raquel Rodriguez
14:47 Dec 02, 2020

No problemmmm! :)

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Raquel Rodriguez
13:02 Nov 23, 2020

OMG I REALIZED I WASN'T FOLLOWING YOU EEEEEEEE I did itttt I'm so sorryyyyyyy

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Raquel Rodriguez
13:09 Nov 23, 2020

Also, I found the four 'ughs' yeeeee

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Raquel Rodriguez
19:05 Nov 23, 2020

>:)))) I'm a genius lol

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Raquel Rodriguez
05:11 Nov 24, 2020

lol I'm happy now :)

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Lolllll same thing happened to meereen I realized that i wasn't following, Vayd, lol

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Raquel Rodriguez
19:06 Nov 23, 2020

Oh, lol I thought I did though, hmmm

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Raquel Rodriguez
05:10 Nov 24, 2020

Alright! Ooh, my Thanksgiving break is coming, how about you?

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No holidays till Jan. *internally cr8es*

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Zilla Babbitt
16:46 Jan 12, 2021

Hi Sia, hope you’re doing okay. Do you plan to write anything this week? I’ve seen what’s been going on and I want you to stay hopeful and strong, kay? Love you 😘

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Hey! Aw, gee, thanks so much Zilla! This means so much coming from you!! Well, I have writer's block since 4-5 months now 😬 still thanks so much <3

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Ackkkk I LOVE THIS!!!!! Absurdly creativeβ€”you have an amazing story AND the way you tell it is amazing. Like, the narrator and second-person? LOVE IT!!! Super-sad but, y’know, some of the best stories all. The end lines are genius. And gosh, I feel bad for this girl. Terrific job!’!

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Awww thanks so much!! I was having a bad day and really needed this, lol :D!!

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Yayyyyy I’m a fairy! Noice! I’d peg you as...a Phoenix!

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Amany Sayed
16:11 Nov 19, 2020

Saw you were a little down with the downvote stuff so I attempted to counter their stuff a little. Stay SMILING. Be HAPPY. You are WORTHY and STRONG and AMAZING. Bye now ^^

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Aww, thank you so much Amany!! I'm in a hard place now, and this means a lot. :))

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Amany Sayed
02:22 Nov 20, 2020

:) <3

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I looked at your bio and I'm mostly February or June, but I am partially October and September!!

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Arham Ishraq
22:28 Nov 06, 2020

Helloujecdokmslx! I'm friends with Raquel irl, which is kind of how I found you. I also saw how high you were on the leaderboard! Nice. Anyways, about your story. I like how you went into sadness (Or just negativity in general)'s POV. It reminded me a little of the Book Thief (AMAZING book btw), which is in death's perspective. Also, I loved the note at the end, and the ugh's.

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Hello Not Arcam, lolll ooh nice! Thanks sooo much!! I appreciate the time you took out to comment!

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Arham Ishraq
13:13 Nov 07, 2020

No problem, SIA :)

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Raquel Rodriguez
22:10 Nov 17, 2020

Yeeeeeee! My friends are getting alongggggg Sorry, lol. I was upvoting Sia bc ppl are downvoting her, and I came across this.

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Hehe, Yeah! Thank uuuuuu!! You deserve upvoting. One day, I'm gonna get u on that top 10 leaderboard. 😊

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Kristin Neubauer
16:33 Nov 02, 2020

This is so creative, Stacy. You had my attention right from the top with the questions directed at the reader. I think that technique is difficult to pull off, but you did it! I also think you told the story so well and from the perspective of the one who controls the negative emotions so well. Really super interesting - love the uniqueness!

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Awww thanks SO much Kristin! Byw, lovely name!!

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B. W.
03:17 Nov 01, 2020

Hm, i think i'd like to read a novel from you :) i think it would be interesting ^^

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B. W.
04:14 Nov 01, 2020

no problem ^^

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B. W.
04:22 Nov 01, 2020

maybe i could help you with it?

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That would be nice! Only if you have time and stuff, cuz I don't wanna force you. Okay?

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Hola! OMG, erhfdiujsoewrfinm. HOW DO YOU WRITE LIKE THAT? Seriously, that was so good. It was really sad but... what's the word I am looking for... compelling and powerful. So amazing job! :) Oh and I could only find 3 ughs :(

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Of course! Aww, thank you so much! You didn't have to but thank you! I will go upvote YOU now! You deserve it. :)

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Awwww Blair!!! You r soooo sweeet!!

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Awww ajdjcojdchgddla thanks SO MUCH BLAIR!!!! Your lovely !! You deserve upvoting. I'll do you tmrw!!

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Tru Sorcerer
15:02 Mar 18, 2021

Cool, seriously, hi depression, i'll laugh at you (and don't ask me why, i laugh when i get scared XD) Ok, i was not calling you depression by the way XD Terrific story! Happy today!

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Half the people down here have left for good or are thinking about it. :(

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Yeah.... ne too. Ame is thinking about leaving.

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Btw, I did the form!! But I did t get my name :/

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Amel Parvez
18:25 Feb 07, 2021

Amazinggggggggg! You described feelings perfectly:) Btw, I did find four ughs! ( πŸ˜…)

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Amel Parvez
08:06 Feb 08, 2021

You're welcome =)

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Amel Parvez
12:29 Feb 08, 2021

:D

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Harley Quinn
12:06 Jan 16, 2021

hey Sia looking forward to read ur new story ❀️❀️❀️

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