Tying The Thread, A Story of The Undead

Submitted for Contest #64 in response to: Write a ghost story where there’s more going on than it first appears.... view prompt

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Oct 22, 2020

Horror Sad

You wanted a ghost story

With a twist?

Here’s the twist-

I’m the ghost

You can laugh

Shake your head

Take a bath

Go back to bed

I’m not lying

Not a bit

I’m here sighing

I can’t even sit

If I don’t concentrate, 

Things go through my skin

I don’t have any weight

My ‘bones’ are papery thin

How am I writing?

Well I just keep fighting

These worlds that I create

I live in them you see

Bouncing from state to state

The characters are my family

So I’m a ghost

Sorry for keeping it from you

Not like I can boast

About being in the undead crew

You still think I’m lying

That this is all fake

You’re not buying

Think it’s a story I make

You can think what you want

You can scoff all you want

You can shake your head in disbelief

Take a sigh in some relief

I’m just a spirit

I’m pretty dead

Call me an ‘it’

I can’t even eat bread

Let me tell you something

It’s nothing like TV

They have nothing

Us you can see

We’re a little transparent

A little tainted white

But there’s nothing about us to fear

We don’t haunt the night

I’m just like you

But I’m really not

I don’t say boo

But I don’t get hot

I don’t need to eat

I don’t need to shower

I don’t feel the heat

And I don’t have any power

I can go where I please

But I don’t age at all

I don’t feel the breeze

And I can’t play with a ball

I don’t get sick

I can’t fall in love

Or get hit with a brick

I don’t feel a shove

And my blood isn’t thick

I have friends

They live in my head

Our fun never ends

When we tie our thread

Pulling and tying

Making sure to think hard

Forget about crying

Do you see a guard?

Are you confused now?

Even more than before?

Can you not see how?

I’ll tell you more

I have lots of thin thread

In all different colors

My favorite is red

I find that it covers

All the blood

Once it falls out

It covers the blood

And I muffle their shout

Who, you wonder

What do I do?

Outside, booms the thunder

I’ll tell you

Listen to me closely

Do you hear?

It’ll seem very ghostly

But there’s nothing to fear…

Nothing to fear, 

Though it seems scary

Nothing to fear

Even if you think it very

I’m just like you

You’re just like me

I do what I do

And I do it with glee

See I do what I feel

And I do what I please

Sometimes it leaves me with a meal

Other times with fleas

Am I making no sense once more?

Are you still confused?

You’ll get it soon for sure

Though sorry if you end up bruised

I told you I don’t eat

But that doesn’t mean I don’t get hungry

Sometimes I just want a treat

Yet no one wants to feed me

I must get food myself

But it’s a different hunger

A hunger in my soul

I feel much younger

I have but one goal

I take my long red thread

And I snip it with my teeth

They all end up dead

Their souls underneath

Ripe for the taking

Lovely and sweet

Still think I’m faking?

Then come watch me eat

I tie the thread tight

And pull the head off

I don’t take a bite

That would make me cough

I press my hands down

I close my eyes

Don’t give me that frown

I still hear your cries

This is just what I must do

Please don’t judge me

Not like I’m doing it to you

You don’t have to agree

But just leave me alone

If you won’t listen

Leave me alone

It’s my own decision


I wish I could cry

I feel so hurt

But I can’t even die

My body’s under the dirt

My soul bears the agony

My heart feels the pain

I’m losing my sanity

Again and again

Why should I spare everyone

And let the people live

It’s all in good fun

You have nothing you could give

For I’m just a spirit

I’m just air

Can you hear it?

The sound of my sweet despair

I feel like I’m dying

But I’m already gone

In my heart, I am crying

My body’s moved on

I know I’m doing wrong

I know it’s mean

My will isn’t strong

My conscience unclean

Sometimes I regret it

Sometimes I’m ashamed

And yet I never quit

Instincts be blamed

If this makes you shiver

Makes your skin crawl

Makes your lip quiver

Can’t hear more at all

Then I suggest you leave

Because it doesn’t end now

I don’t know how you’ll receive

When you hear how

I bury the body

Without cleaning the blood

It gets quite soggy

As if it’s covered in mud

It’s black and red

And other colors too

It spews from their head

It’s quite the view

It stains my hands 

And my clothes too

Ruins my plans

Gives others a clue

Of what I was doing

During the night

Give them a reason to keep booing

At my sorry sight

But don’t think for a minute

That I even care

I have quite the limit

And it’s really rare

To see me snap

To lose my cool

Maybe slap

It’s a personal rule

I let others have their own opinion

Think what you want about me

But I’m not your minion

And my will is free

I’ll keep killing 

You do you

I get my filling

Though I can’t undo

Families hate me

All of them do

So, you see

I kill them too

All alone

Is how I’m left

Future’s set in stone

And it’s not the best

You could say it’s my fault

And maybe it is

Soon I will bolt

Stop doing the biz

For now, just remember

That I’m a ghost


Remember remember, I haunt the night

Deeply sorry if I give you a fright...


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302 comments

01:38 Oct 22, 2020

This poem was amazing!! It gave me the chills! I think you did really good, although I don't know a thing or two about poems. I kinda felt like someone was watching me when I read this 😅 Oh dear is there something out my window..?

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Amany Sayed
02:22 Oct 22, 2020

Thank you! Ooh, success. Might wanna sleep with one eye open tonight... ;)

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03:15 Oct 22, 2020

Ayy yea I should 😂

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22:01 Nov 23, 2020

I love this story also! You have really good poetic skills, the poem/story flows really great with all the rhymes you use.

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Amany Sayed
00:21 Nov 24, 2020

Thank you! Much appreciated :)

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02:36 Nov 24, 2020

Your welcome! :)

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Amaya .
03:21 Nov 12, 2020

AMANY. WHY DID NOBODY TELL ME THAT LOUIS PARTRIDGE HAS A GIRLFRIEND

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Niveeidha Palani
23:35 Nov 09, 2020

Optimistic, creative and COLOURFUL! That's your quote!

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Amany Sayed
00:23 Nov 10, 2020

Thanks so much Niceeidha!

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Amany Sayed
00:25 Nov 10, 2020

Oh and I'm the nerdy one probably.

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Niveeidha Palani
01:55 Nov 10, 2020

No problem! Yeap, I'm probably the nerdy one as well.

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R. K.
20:54 Nov 09, 2020

Stylish writing and fashionable kindness. The embodiment of sugar and spice and all things nice. There's ambiguity in her title: LPBF (open to interpretation ;) ~ Ru

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Amany Sayed
20:58 Nov 09, 2020

This made me smile SO hard, thanks sooo much Ru!

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04:34 Nov 09, 2020

"Pink lemons, sunflowers and a whole lotta optimism" - Sia

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Amany Sayed
05:55 Nov 09, 2020

This made my day/night Sia thanks :)

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06:22 Nov 09, 2020

Happy to Help!

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01:14 Nov 07, 2020

Hi! I just posted a new story and would love it if you could check it out. Also, are you planning on posting this week? For the new prompts?

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Amany Sayed
04:08 Nov 07, 2020

Awesome! I will! Most likely, they're pretty cool!

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04:25 Nov 07, 2020

Thanks! Yeah, they are. I like how they are all pretty different and not basically the same prompt.

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13:41 Nov 06, 2020

Ok, I want to be a piano, since that's the instrument I play, but I'm more like a Trombone or Drum. :P

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Amany Sayed
15:16 Nov 06, 2020

Those are actually my favorites lol and they're based on people I know :) And that's really cool that you play the piano!

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15:22 Nov 06, 2020

Lol, now I just have to figure out by what method I can categorize people--maybe magical creatures. ;)

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Amany Sayed
15:34 Nov 06, 2020

That would be interesting :)

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05:58 Nov 05, 2020

Love the new bio! I'm a mix of flute and saxophone. <3

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Amany Sayed
14:11 Nov 05, 2020

Awesome <3

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Rhondalise Mitza
02:43 Nov 05, 2020

I want to be the piano person but I don't sing that well... :)

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Amany Sayed
03:42 Nov 05, 2020

Hehe that's alright :)

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Wow! You did an awesome job Amany! I love poetry, I kept a whole journal full of them and I find playing will word very musing. Your poem was amazing! You should do more of these! HOW DID YOU MAKE A POEM THAT LONG! I tend to usually write short rhythmic ones that don't have a big story base. Keep up your amazingness(that's a word right, I say it often)! Happy Writing! ~SS

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Amany Sayed
14:08 Oct 30, 2020

Aw, thank you! That sounds awesome! Honestly, I don't even know. Normally it's hard, but for this one, the words really flowed. Haha, I will! You too!

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You are super-duper welcome! :) LOL!

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Amaya .
19:49 Oct 28, 2020

Amany I found this account on tiktok, and the account is Louis Partridge's sister, and she has a ton of videos with him in it and stuff...like just doing normal human stuff

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Orenda .
19:23 Oct 28, 2020

henlooo, I've a new story out. Mind reading it and sharing your valuable feedback? Thankoo!

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Amany Sayed
01:06 Oct 29, 2020

Ofc!

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Orenda .
04:17 Oct 29, 2020

yay, thanksss!

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Avery G.
18:53 Oct 28, 2020

Hi, Amany! I don't know if I have ever commented on this, but I came back and re-read it. Man, I loved it. I've always been scared of poetry, but you were amazing at it. Great job!

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Amany Sayed
01:07 Oct 29, 2020

Thanks! Haha, don't be, it's the most fun thing in the world!

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Avery G.
14:19 Oct 29, 2020

You're welcome! :)

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B. W.
15:10 Oct 28, 2020

Aw, ya put me in your bio ^^ thanks and I like what ya said for me and the others

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Amany Sayed
15:22 Oct 28, 2020

You're welcome ^^

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B. W.
15:27 Oct 28, 2020

:)

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Wolfy 🐺
12:58 Oct 27, 2020

This is really good! I'm (trying) to write poetry right now, but I'm not rly sure if it's working out well.😅

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Amany Sayed
14:54 Oct 27, 2020

Thanks! I'm sure it's awesome!

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Wolfy 🐺
17:21 Oct 27, 2020

We shall see! :)

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22:26 Oct 24, 2020

This was so refreshing to read!! I am not very good at poems but after reading is I wish I was. I must say you did it so well!! [10/10]

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Amany Sayed
14:43 Oct 26, 2020

Thank you! I'm sure you'd be great!

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03:43 Oct 23, 2020

Gosh, I feel terrible for getting to this so late. Sorry! So I was scrolling through the comments before reading just cuz, and I decided to rap this out like Orenda did. I learned a few things: 1. I should never try rapping again. 2. This was funny and scary at the same time and the fact that I kept messing up made it even funnier. Note to self: Don't rap things or I'll miss out on the whole horror aspect of the story (err...poem in this case) 3. My voice is taking a break. I spoke to the mailman through the window and I think he thinks ...

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Amany Sayed
14:12 Oct 23, 2020

Aw, no worries! Haha, that's okay. Thanks so much!

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17:43 Oct 23, 2020

Sure! Mind checking out my latest story? I'd love some feedback.

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Skyler Grey
19:34 Oct 22, 2020

Dang, girl. This is impressive! "Horror's not my thing" my buttocks. Also, would you mind checking out my friend Lily's page? She's new here and could use some support because she thinks she sucks at writing

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04:28 Oct 22, 2020

Congo on 10k points!!!!!!!

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Amany Sayed
12:51 Oct 22, 2020

Shanksss!

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16:43 Oct 22, 2020

:)

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