Tying The Thread, A Story of The Undead

Submitted for Contest #64 in response to: Write a ghost story where there’s more going on than it first appears.... view prompt

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Oct 22, 2020

Horror Sad

You wanted a ghost story

With a twist?

Here’s the twist-

I’m the ghost

You can laugh

Shake your head

Take a bath

Go back to bed

I’m not lying

Not a bit

I’m here sighing

I can’t even sit

If I don’t concentrate, 

Things go through my skin

I don’t have any weight

My ‘bones’ are papery thin

How am I writing?

Well I just keep fighting

These worlds that I create

I live in them you see

Bouncing from state to state

The characters are my family

So I’m a ghost

Sorry for keeping it from you

Not like I can boast

About being in the undead crew

You still think I’m lying

That this is all fake

You’re not buying

Think it’s a story I make

You can think what you want

You can scoff all you want

You can shake your head in disbelief

Take a sigh in some relief

I’m just a spirit

I’m pretty dead

Call me an ‘it’

I can’t even eat bread

Let me tell you something

It’s nothing like TV

They have nothing

Us you can see

We’re a little transparent

A little tainted white

But there’s nothing about us to fear

We don’t haunt the night

I’m just like you

But I’m really not

I don’t say boo

But I don’t get hot

I don’t need to eat

I don’t need to shower

I don’t feel the heat

And I don’t have any power

I can go where I please

But I don’t age at all

I don’t feel the breeze

And I can’t play with a ball

I don’t get sick

I can’t fall in love

Or get hit with a brick

I don’t feel a shove

And my blood isn’t thick

I have friends

They live in my head

Our fun never ends

When we tie our thread

Pulling and tying

Making sure to think hard

Forget about crying

Do you see a guard?

Are you confused now?

Even more than before?

Can you not see how?

I’ll tell you more

I have lots of thin thread

In all different colors

My favorite is red

I find that it covers

All the blood

Once it falls out

It covers the blood

And I muffle their shout

Who, you wonder

What do I do?

Outside, booms the thunder

I’ll tell you

Listen to me closely

Do you hear?

It’ll seem very ghostly

But there’s nothing to fear…

Nothing to fear, 

Though it seems scary

Nothing to fear

Even if you think it very

I’m just like you

You’re just like me

I do what I do

And I do it with glee

See I do what I feel

And I do what I please

Sometimes it leaves me with a meal

Other times with fleas

Am I making no sense once more?

Are you still confused?

You’ll get it soon for sure

Though sorry if you end up bruised

I told you I don’t eat

But that doesn’t mean I don’t get hungry

Sometimes I just want a treat

Yet no one wants to feed me

I must get food myself

But it’s a different hunger

A hunger in my soul

I feel much younger

I have but one goal

I take my long red thread

And I snip it with my teeth

They all end up dead

Their souls underneath

Ripe for the taking

Lovely and sweet

Still think I’m faking?

Then come watch me eat

I tie the thread tight

And pull the head off

I don’t take a bite

That would make me cough

I press my hands down

I close my eyes

Don’t give me that frown

I still hear your cries

This is just what I must do

Please don’t judge me

Not like I’m doing it to you

You don’t have to agree

But just leave me alone

If you won’t listen

Leave me alone

It’s my own decision


I wish I could cry

I feel so hurt

But I can’t even die

My body’s under the dirt

My soul bears the agony

My heart feels the pain

I’m losing my sanity

Again and again

Why should I spare everyone

And let the people live

It’s all in good fun

You have nothing you could give

For I’m just a spirit

I’m just air

Can you hear it?

The sound of my sweet despair

I feel like I’m dying

But I’m already gone

In my heart, I am crying

My body’s moved on

I know I’m doing wrong

I know it’s mean

My will isn’t strong

My conscience unclean

Sometimes I regret it

Sometimes I’m ashamed

And yet I never quit

Instincts be blamed

If this makes you shiver

Makes your skin crawl

Makes your lip quiver

Can’t hear more at all

Then I suggest you leave

Because it doesn’t end now

I don’t know how you’ll receive

When you hear how

I bury the body

Without cleaning the blood

It gets quite soggy

As if it’s covered in mud

It’s black and red

And other colors too

It spews from their head

It’s quite the view

It stains my hands 

And my clothes too

Ruins my plans

Gives others a clue

Of what I was doing

During the night

Give them a reason to keep booing

At my sorry sight

But don’t think for a minute

That I even care

I have quite the limit

And it’s really rare

To see me snap

To lose my cool

Maybe slap

It’s a personal rule

I let others have their own opinion

Think what you want about me

But I’m not your minion

And my will is free

I’ll keep killing 

You do you

I get my filling

Though I can’t undo

Families hate me

All of them do

So, you see

I kill them too

All alone

Is how I’m left

Future’s set in stone

And it’s not the best

You could say it’s my fault

And maybe it is

Soon I will bolt

Stop doing the biz

For now, just remember

That I’m a ghost


Remember remember, I haunt the night

Deeply sorry if I give you a fright...


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302 comments

Amany Sayed
01:22 Oct 22, 2020

Poetry is extremely fun and a great way to let out emotion. Where that second part started "I wish I could cry" I started when I was a little down. The words flowed lol. Horror....Not my thing. Do give your advice, please!

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No, you actually did, like REALLY good! The descriptions were amazing, and the whole thing flowed really well.

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Amany Sayed
14:20 Oct 24, 2020

Aw, thank you!

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Of course! Btw, I love your pfp. Who is that? (I also liked your previous "My mood changes in 0.5 seconds" pfp ;))

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Amany Sayed
16:32 Oct 24, 2020

It's Louis Partridge, the love of my life :) Ah, yes, I like that one too. I change my pic a LOT.

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18:31 Oct 25, 2020

YES! NEW IT! VICTORYYG

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18:52 Oct 25, 2020

I l o v e poetryyyyy

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17:47 Nov 05, 2020

I know this story was soooo goood!

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Amany Sayed
21:50 Nov 10, 2020

Aw, thank you!

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Hello there!! I just want to say that you did a great job writing this poem!! It was very creative of you to write it in this format!! Love to read more of your stories!!! :)

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Amany Sayed
12:52 Oct 22, 2020

Thank you!

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03:30 Oct 22, 2020

Oh my goodness! Amany this is so SO well written! It's extremely difficult to master the craft of writing in the horror genre, especially when using such few words but you did it fantastically! I don't know if this was a conscious choice or not, but writing a poem with a rhythmic cadence tends to work well for horror. The reader immediately falls into the rhythm, creating an aspect of hypnosis which layers another dimension of fear within the text. Amazing job!

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Amany Sayed
12:51 Oct 22, 2020

Thanks so much! Oh, wow, glad you think so! Thanks again!

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Niveeidha Palani
03:11 Oct 24, 2020

Wow, Amany! A long poem here! So meaningful, and this portrayed a humourous streak to it!

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Amany Sayed
14:20 Oct 24, 2020

Yup! Thanks so much!

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Niveeidha Palani
01:07 Oct 25, 2020

:)

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00:44 Oct 29, 2020

Oohoohooh, love the new bioooo! Thx for including meeee 😊 Ohhhh and I saw on Wattpad you are officially part of the KotLC fandom! YAYYYYYY NOW THAT YOU’RE READING MY FAV SERIES WE HAVE SO MUCH TO DISCUSS— oki, oki, calm down Aerin. Any who, what book are you onnnnn?!?!?! Oh and also...just so you know...I’ll be pretty much ditching all my websites during NaNoWriMo. So I’ll hardly be on Reedsy or AP (not that you’re on AP). I’ll be on the NaNo website, tho! And anyways I’ll be writing the wholeeee month to finish Color Quest Book 2! (I wrote...

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Amany Sayed
13:05 Oct 29, 2020

You're welcome! Hah, okie. Still on the fourth, I'm reading other stuff rn. Aw noooooo. (no way that's awesome)

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14:44 Oct 29, 2020

Hehe. Ooooh, oki. Noice! Lol sorry/thankssss :D :D :D

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Avani G
16:33 Oct 26, 2020

AHHH! IS THAT LOUIS PARTRIDGE? HE'S SO HOT!!!!

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Amaya Macaulay
03:21 Nov 12, 2020

OMG I KNOW RIGHT *sigh* literally he's better than cedric diggory and that is SAYING SOMETHING.

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Avani G
04:04 Nov 12, 2020

ikr Louis Patridge is way hotter...

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Amaya Macaulay
04:04 Nov 12, 2020

*sighs for the 300000000th time* agreed

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Avani G
04:06 Nov 12, 2020

So how are you? How's school and everything? Are you doing virtual?

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Amaya Macaulay
04:08 Nov 12, 2020

well i just found out Louis Partridge has a girlfriend like a few hours ago so that ruined everything...not like i had a chance lmao I'm too young and ugly but anyway.... school is goooddd I've been getting good grades so yayyy. yeah I'm doing completely virtual. still PUMPED ab the biden win, hoping America will go into 4-6 week lockdown so that the pandemic can be controlled. sucks he won;'t be president until Jan thoo

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Rayhan Hidayat
11:06 Oct 24, 2020

I am sooo impressed with this and the fact that you maintained an ABAB rhyme scheme throughout. It just... flows. Looks like Rhonda might have some competition 😉 (I’m just kidding please don’t kill me) I thought the horror was subtle enough to make the reader think “holy crap who is this guy” and it was never too heavy-handed. It made me want to read on. Good work as always!! 😙

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Amany Sayed
14:20 Oct 24, 2020

Aw, thanks so much! HahahahhHHAHAHAHAH. I'm so glad! Thanks!

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Rayhan Hidayat
15:08 Oct 24, 2020

No problem! And btw, is that guy in your profile pic the one who’s gonna be in the new Dune movie or am I thinking of someone else?

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Amany Sayed
15:18 Oct 24, 2020

You're thinking of Timothee Chamlet I believe. My pic is Louis Partridge. :)

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Rayhan Hidayat
15:26 Oct 24, 2020

LMAO forget I said anything 🙊

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Kristin Neubauer
15:37 Oct 23, 2020

That's wonderful, Amany! So creative and so well-written....and so poignant. I came away feeling so sorry for the poor ghost. I really loved that unique perspective and voice you provided. What a joy to read!

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Amany Sayed
16:45 Oct 23, 2020

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it!

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B. W.
01:25 Oct 22, 2020

This was a nice story/poem ya did ^^ I'm not that good with horror or anything like that either, but i think you did a good job with it, maybe i could help you with anything horror related if you do it again? 10/10 :)

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Amany Sayed
02:21 Oct 22, 2020

Thank you ^^ I don't know, we'll see! Thanks so much :D

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B. W.
02:27 Oct 22, 2020

No problem ^^ what did ya ever think of these prompts? maybe the newer ones later will be better ^^

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Amany Sayed
02:28 Oct 22, 2020

Ya know, I didn't like them at first, but they sparked a lot of ideas. Hopefully! I love the ones that say start with the first sentence of blank.

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B. W.
02:34 Oct 22, 2020

I hope the new prompts are stuff for spooky month ^^ like completely for it, because there was only 1 or maybe 2 prompts for spooky month in this one

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Zilla Babbitt
02:34 Nov 05, 2020

Drum, violin, or saxophone. Except I hate math.

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Amany Sayed
03:42 Nov 05, 2020

Hm I think you're violin :)

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Zilla Babbitt
15:08 Nov 05, 2020

This one's for you. What kind of swimmer are you? The flyer: Big-boned and expressive, has short hair if female and long hair if male, wants to add to their collection of ear piercings, drives big cars but not very well, is always the first in the water and the last out, the life of the party/team, always smiling and joking even right before a hard set, hates the coach with a passion but hides it well, has a bunch of superficial friends but lacks a heart-to-heart one, a little aloof just because he's good-looking, the flyer is bright and ...

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Amany Sayed
15:11 Nov 05, 2020

Well I'm not too sure actually...hm...

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13:46 Nov 06, 2020

I'm a freestyler if anything, but none of these quite fit my vibe. ;) If ya want to know what my (exaggerated) vibe is, check out Rhonda's bio. I saw she was doing board games, so I HAD to write one for chess. XD

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Zilla Babbitt
17:52 Nov 08, 2020

I saw that! I wrote my bio around some people I already know, and the backstroker is me, sort of.

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Fplldg Wakdwwdg
15:05 Oct 28, 2020

Ow man! I'm impressed with this. I love poetry. I saw poems within stories before ( in reedsy), but what you did is, absolutely awesome. Keep up the good work

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Amany Sayed
15:23 Oct 28, 2020

Wow, thanks so much! Gosh, thank you!

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Kylie Rudolf
19:56 Oct 27, 2020

I love this! Your poetry was creative and well put together. Your rhymes were in a beat. Poetry is a very hard thing to do, but you did wonderfully!

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Amany Sayed
19:58 Oct 27, 2020

Thank you so much for your kind words! I appreciate you :)

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Amaya Macaulay
15:59 Oct 26, 2020

WOAH AMANY!!! this is so so good I'm really impressed. It has really good flow, which I love. also I really really like ur new profile pic :)

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Amany Sayed
16:47 Oct 26, 2020

Thanks! As does everyone lol

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Alina Manha
08:07 Oct 26, 2020

Hi. Loved your poetry it was great. I don't read poems much so I don't know much about them. But I certainly love this one Just wanted to let you know. I think i did as much as I could to spam your account so that you could see the yellow dot. 😜

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Amany Sayed
14:42 Oct 26, 2020

Thank you! Aw, thanks! Haha, I could tell, thanks!

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Alina Manha
20:22 Oct 26, 2020

Your welcome!. 😊 My pleasure. 😇

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05:48 Oct 26, 2020

Amany- I have one thing to tell you. Just one. Hear me out. Okay? I love your profile pic. It's marvelous. It makes me cry every time I see it, sure, but it's simply beautiful. :)

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Amany Sayed
14:43 Oct 26, 2020

It is, isn't it? You know I came to the realization that I will never be in a relationship or marry because people like Louis Partridge have given me much to high expectations... Oh well, I'll always have my writing.

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Amaya Macaulay
03:52 Nov 12, 2020

wait omg....that's actually gonna happen for me lmao I'll be like "hmmm....nope ur not Louis Partridge level. Next!" as if anyone is actually gonna be there. plus personality first. AND it's not like boys are lining up to date me lmao...i don't have the looks for that

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R. K.
13:50 Oct 26, 2020

She should be convicted for murder (she knows what she did, love you Amany). Yes, Ria. I'm a ghost after setting my eyes on it. You cry and I die — it's the way of the world.

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Amaya Macaulay
03:25 Nov 12, 2020

dude noone compares to Louis

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B. W.
04:22 Oct 26, 2020

Hey, i could use some help with a new story. are you possibly good at writing stuff in second person? i could use some advice?

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Amany Sayed
05:28 Oct 26, 2020

I'm not great at overall advice, but maybe you can look at the couple of my stories that use 2nd person and sorta just see what I do? A Second Shot and Royal Mystery are my stories that use it, hope they help

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B. W.
05:42 Oct 26, 2020

So, do ya think i'd do something like this then? "Your little cousin was always a strange kid, ever since he was around three years old. He was always telling you about his little 'imaginary friend' whenever you would be babysitting him. Though you had never expected any of this to happen, and on Halloween." I'll check those out as well ^^

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Amany Sayed
14:40 Oct 26, 2020

That actually sounds really cool B! Tell me when it's out!

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B. W.
16:50 Oct 26, 2020

itll be out later today ^^

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Rhondalise Mitza
02:27 Oct 26, 2020

Noticed your profile picture...:)

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Amany Sayed
03:56 Oct 26, 2020

;)

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00:02 Oct 24, 2020

Hey Amany, Great story! I honestly get bored reading some stories because they have TOO MUCH DETAIL, but this was PERFECT. It was simple yet awesome! HEHEHEHEEEEE Upvoting spree for upvoting spree HEHEHEHEHEEEE

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Amany Sayed
14:19 Oct 24, 2020

Thank you so much! Yay! HHEHEHEHEHEHE I'm sorry but I'm super busy this weekend. HEHEHEHEHEHEHE

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14:09 Oct 25, 2020

HEHEHHEHE ITS OK HEHEHEHEHEH

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Raquel Rodriguez
19:16 Oct 23, 2020

Ay girl, haven't talked to you in a while, lol. How is everything?

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Raquel Rodriguez
19:17 Oct 23, 2020

Also, holy crap, this is good! I can't- How?! Lol, this format seems like a poem, so I'm going to assume that it is I guess? Great job, this feels so full of emotion! :D

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Amany Sayed
22:23 Oct 23, 2020

Everything is good...Stressful, but, you know, good, thanks for asking. You? Aw, thanks so much! Yes, it's a poem! Thank you :)

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Raquel Rodriguez
22:32 Oct 23, 2020

Great! Same, I'm doing a Health homework assignment right now, lol. Loved it! :) Also, btw, the red balloon is a nice addition! Did ya soak it in blood? ;D

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11:04 Oct 24, 2020

Loll, sorry I just want to exist in here 😅😂

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Raquel Rodriguez
16:33 Oct 24, 2020

Sure, hey what's up! :)

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A u d r e y - s
09:30 Oct 23, 2020

This is so good! It gives me a very eerie feeling, which I’m guessing is what you wanted to happen. 10/10

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Amany Sayed
14:10 Oct 23, 2020

Thank you so much!

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A u d r e y - s
22:08 Oct 23, 2020

Anytime :)

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