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Oct 09, 2020

Fantasy Fiction Funny

“You are now the King of Lopaland!” pronounced to all who attended the event.

The crown is placed on Elmgudren’s head, and soon there is major applause. Much happiness, but not from the major attraction itself. The one who is now King wasn’t looking to this moment, and it came way sooner than expected.

It was two days ago that Elmgudren was out with his buddies in the woods playing their favorite games when his father’s commander-in-charge of latrines rode out to them on his favorite donkey.

“Urgent news!” the commander called out before falling off the donkey. “Urgent!” he cried out as he tried to get up, but fell on his face once again.

“Did the toilets overfill again?” asked Elmgudren as his friends snickered.

“No, no,” the commander replied as he finally got back onto his feet, pulling up his tights. “This is dire news.”

“Must not be that bad for you to come out to tell us,” Elmgudren’s buddy Nester said with a snort.

“Your father is dead!” the commander cried out as the tears flowed.

Elmgudren’s favorite wooden sword slipped out of his hand.

“What?” all of his buddies said at the same time.

“How?” Elmgudren squeaked out, feeling like this world was falling apart.

“He got into a wrestling match with Borest. Borest accidentally broke his neck,” the commander explained.

Borest was one of the few orcs that hung around the castle, making good friends with the King. Now, the one who killed the King.

“Did they execute Borest?” asked Elmgudren.

“No, no,” replied an astonished commander. “It was an accident.”

Elmgudren just stood there dumbfounded. His father is dead and now he is to be King. Part of what he is foretold from birth is to become true. He is about to become King. He figured that would never happen in his life. His father was so fit, Elmgudren figured his father would live close to two hundred. Impossible in a sensible mind, but for Elmgudren it was possible.

Now, he stood with a crown on his head, looking up at the crowd who were clapping for him.

“Stop it!” he wanted to cry out for he knew the people loved his father. Everyone adored his father, Eugene.

Elmgudren waved his arms a few times, then departed to go to his room to ponder. To scream. To cry. To go to his favorite spot, under his bed. He wanted to dream of running over the rainbow and land on a bright blue dragon to fly to the heavens.

When he opened the doors to his room, he saw his mother, Leslie, sitting on his bed.

“How did you get here so quick?” he asked in astonishment. “You were beside me as they crowned me King.”

“As you stood there looking out at the crowd in a stupor, I quickly came to your room,” she replied. “I knew you would come here immediately.”

“Because you know I don’t want to be King,” pouted Elmgudren.

“I never understood why you didn’t want to be King,” she told him. “they foretold it you will be the most like King ever.”

“I can’t believe that. It’s not possible to be the most like. I don’t like myself.”

“Once you get over that silly notion you will understand.”

“I don’t want to. Can I go under the bed?”

“No!” she screamed, making him jump. “It’s time to be a man. You are in your thirties.”

“I don’t want to.”

Leslie stood up and went to stand in front of Elmgudren. He flinched back, not sure what she would do.

“Today you become a man,” she stated. “Time to put on your adult tights, put away your toys, and time to be a King.”

Elmgudren’s bottom lip protruded, and he stomped his right foot twice.

“I recommend you act a different way,” his mother said, and she walked out of the room.

Elmgudren sat down on his bed and immediately pondered on what he could do to no longer be King. He could flee far, far away, but had a feeling he wouldn’t last long. He could chuck the crown, but that wouldn’t do any good. They would just make another crown. He could renounce his throne, but then they would execute him for being a joke.

“What to do? What to do?”

Day by day went by with Elmgudren staying inside, mostly. Then one day he walked among the castle grounds with his bodyguard and came across the local news on a scroll, nailed to a piece of wood in the middle of the square. It didn’t take long upon reading it for his temper to come forth. For these so-called journalists to come out and mostly call him an embarrassment of a King did not sit well with him.

“This will end now,” he muttered.

He soon had the corrupt journalists jailed and put a group of kobolds in charge of the news. They keep it simple. Elmgudren wasn’t sure how the people would react. Quite the surprise that they applauded his change for no one really cared for fake news.

“Part of me hoped they would hate me,” he thought.

His popularity just went up a notch.

It didn’t take him long to ban bow and arrows, saying they killed things too easily. The people cheered him once again, for most everyone preferred swords and axes. A sure death in most instances.

“You are doing wonderfully,” his mother told him.

“I don’t feel like it.”

“You don’t hear them cheering?”

“I figured they would boo me.”

“You were told you will be the most loved King. You are succeeding.”

As time went by, Elmgudren realized it didn’t take much to please these people. To where he wondered how anyone could despise any King.

He put shrubs and trees in areas of the castle, and told the people it was now off limits. People adored him for caring about the environment.

Anyone who had contagious diseases were told to wear very long shoes, so they stayed some distance from others. Everyone thought it was an awesome idea.

For organic and less meat promoted, which brought much praise.

Praise, praise, praise!

Elmgudren soon became the most loved, even though recently he wanted the opposite.

“They love me,” he said to himself. “It was foretold, and has become reality.”

Elmgudren thought it was so crazy that he paid a visit to a dragon. He didn’t return home.

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Love this story! :)

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Yumeko X ☼
06:55 Jan 21, 2021

I loved this story it was so nice, and it had such an amazing flow to it. Definitely, this will be used for inspiration for many others in the future :)

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Corey Melin
18:04 Jan 21, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Corey Melin
18:05 Jan 21, 2021

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09:15 Nov 10, 2020

I liked the flow

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09:14 Nov 10, 2020

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Sahitthian 🤗
11:50 Nov 09, 2020

Hey please write anew story

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Sahitthian 🤗
05:53 Nov 05, 2020

Wow this is a wonderful story.Well writing.Keep writing.10/10.Amazing

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Cricketer Amogh
06:10 Oct 25, 2020

It's a wonderful story, Corey! There were no mistakes and please check out my new story after a month

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B. W.
02:10 Oct 20, 2020

I'll give this story a 10/10 :)

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Chrissy Lemon
21:50 Oct 19, 2020

I love this so much! The way it's written and I also loved the depth and detail. I can tell the characters are really thought out and all in all, it was amazing

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Corey Melin
01:14 Oct 20, 2020

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Rachel Sundar
00:59 Oct 16, 2020

WOW! This is great! I really love how short it is.. if that makes any sense.. I just love how you managed to tell a story in so few amount of words. This is a great piece of work!!

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Corey Melin
22:30 Oct 18, 2020

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Rayhan Hidayat
10:07 Oct 15, 2020

This was an interesting blend of your usual wacky comedy and more serious stuff. I love how inmature the king is, especially at his age. And of course the long shoes thing as a lighthearted Covid reference. The ending felt rushed but it happens to the best of us. Good stuff as always Corey. 😙

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Corey Melin
22:31 Oct 18, 2020

Thank you for the comments!

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Rayhan Hidayat
07:05 Oct 19, 2020

No problem Corey! Feel free to check out my latest story if you’re interested 😙

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Hriday Saboo
03:14 Oct 15, 2020

Cool story Corey. I didn’t find any mistakes. Would you mind reading my new story

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Bianka Nova
18:19 Oct 13, 2020

That was funny, especially in the beginning. Towards the end the focus of the cartoonish satire became more serious, which was nice, but I felt it ended a bit too soon. You could've expanded a bit more on his reign I think 😉 You have some really cool characters in this "kingdom". I also liked how everyone had a funky name, except for the mother who is plainly named Leslie 😁

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Corey Melin
21:03 Oct 13, 2020

I was going up and down on the mood of this story, and eventually came to the point where I couldn't think of other outlandish details to put in so the reason for the abrupt ending. Thank you for the comments!

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Bianka Nova
21:09 Oct 13, 2020

Yep, the usual drawbacks of having to submit in a week (at least for me)

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Ola Hotchpotch
14:35 Oct 13, 2020

This story is hilarious. I had a good laugh.

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Lourenço Amorim
18:23 Oct 12, 2020

A cool and funny short story with a twist that really got me. Nice work.

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Corey Melin
19:51 Oct 12, 2020

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Andrew Krey
13:23 Oct 12, 2020

Hi Corey, I enjoyed your story, and especially liked the contemporary references to fake news and long shoes!

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Corey Melin
19:50 Oct 12, 2020

Thank you for the comments!

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Andrew Krey
16:44 Oct 16, 2020

You're welcome

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Shea Redmond
22:11 Oct 11, 2020

Am I wrong to read the King's voice in a petulant tone? Because I feel like I heard my kid talking the same way this afternoon when I asked them to take care of their chores. I enjoyed the long shoes, that gave me a great laugh....

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Corey Melin
22:33 Oct 11, 2020

I have young ones so they were an inspiration for this story. For the long shoes it’s actually a reality due to COVID. Comes from shoemaker in Romania. Thank you for the comments!

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Charles Stucker
20:46 Oct 11, 2020

You went way out in left field for the humor on this one. This is all the way to Monty Python with no room for sanity. The king makes arbitrary idiotic decisions and everyone loves him. It does seem like it could have been written as a parody of a living person, which means it may age badly. Except...there is always someone like that somewhere. you have a few problems with verb tense, particularly in dialogue, but I can't tell if those are deliberate, to make the king more buffoonish or not. Your English is generally good enough that...

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Corey Melin
21:37 Oct 11, 2020

Very well done on the critique. Quite deliberate to reflect our current environment. The amount of stress has made it quite silly out there.

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Princemark Okibe
20:01 Oct 11, 2020

You have gone mad. Really gone mad. You and Chiamaka Adeniyi are made of the same stuff. I couldn't believe I was reading the story with such seriousness that I didn't notice it was a comedy. Anyways, Thanks for liking my stories Colin and I am now here to look for your trouble. Was his mother high on dragon dung when she said this “they foretold it you will be the most like King ever.” And did he also smoke the same stuff when he gave his reply as “I can’t believe that. It’s not possible to be the most like. I don’t like myself.” ...

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Corey Melin
20:13 Oct 11, 2020

Thank you for the comments. This was set up to be a wacky story. The scary part is there have been similar people in real life.

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Carille Durbin
20:55 Oct 11, 2020

I thought it was about real people.

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Corey Melin
21:32 Oct 11, 2020

Maybe so

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