Aug 28, 2020

Romance Funny

Author's Note: This is Part 2 to another story I've written, Vampire Hunt. You probably want to read it to understand a lot of what happens in this one. Enjoy!

Ernis

I groan, falling to the ground. My sword falls discarded to the side.

“Dederick! Alright, Alright, you win!” I say as he mockingly points his sword as my face. He laughs, helping me up.

“Not so rusty anymore, are we?”

“Man, I never knew one weekend of extra practice could get you so much better!”

“You better believe it! You’ve probably been holding me down.” I roll my eyes just as the captain comes over to us.

“Ernis, someone’s here to speak with you.” I inwardly groan as I nod and follow the captain to midfield. Last time this happened, I had to go kill a vampire. Well, actually, pretend to kill a vampire and return home. They haven’t found out yet…

The captain motions to a young woman looking up at the clouds. I can’t see her full face yet, but if I’m not mistaken she’s the same overstating seer from before. 

This time, she’s wearing a short almost knee-length dress and her hair is considerably shorter, still with her signature flower crown on top. Her silvery eyes glint in the sunlight. After the weekend, the weather became much hotter. I’m sweating in my full armor. I sigh, preparing myself for what she has to say and walk up to her. 

Once I’m next to her, I clear my throat.

“Oh! Ernis! Nice to see you again! You’re still in that armor? I thought they’d give you something lighter to wear in this blistering heat! I swear, one of you will probably die of heatstroke soon!” there she goes exaggerating again.

“Well? You wanted to speak to me?” I say, a hint of annoyance in my voice. 

“Oh! My bad! This weather always makes me wanna ramble for some reason! Well, back to business. I know what you did... I know the ‘vampire’ you killed was actually a wolf.”

“Um, excuse me, but you can’t just accu-”

“Sh-sh! Don’t try and deceive me, darling. I’m a seer for goodness sake, don’t you think I know what a real vampire looks like? she says, putting her finger by my lips. I look down at her perfectly manicured fingers and back up at her face which is way too close to mine. I blush and push her away. 

“I’m not trying to ‘deceive’ anyone-” the look on her face stops me. She rolls her eyes.

“It’s okay. You don’t have to be all flustered. I know why you did what you did.”

“Oh really?” I say, raising my eyebrows. She nods, putting a hand on my shoulder.

“You did it for love.” It takes all my willpower not to double over laughing. 

“Look, if you’re done with all your assertions and so-called ‘prophecies’, then I better get back to training,” I say, just about leaving when she grabs my arm.

“Ernis, wait! I should’ve known not to tell you this so...so fast. Come to my tent tonight. I’ll explain as much as I can. And for God’s sake, do wear something a little more fitting for the weather.” she says, leaving.

“Hey, how will I even know where to go!” I call out after her. She laughs.

“Follow the blue jay!” oh, of course, she’ll give me some cryptic message like ‘follow the blue jay’. Whatever, not like I’m going to go anyway. Maybe if I don’t, she’ll finally leave me alone…

Kat

“Jade!” I pause for breath. “Jade, where are you! This. isn’t. Funny. Anymore!”

No answer. I sigh, running a little further into the forest. Even with wolf legs, my body’s starting to ache. I transform back into a human and plop down on a nearby tree stump. 

Much appreciated wind blows a lock of my red hair into my face. 

Suddenly, I hear the faintest sound of a leaf crackling like someone stepped on it. My wolf ears perk up as I jump, surveying the area. 

There’s a wolf standing not too far away from me. I transform, ready to pounce when I realize the eyes of the wolf and detransform. 

“You better detransform right now and explain,” I say crossing my eyes. Jade waits for a second and soon is her normal pretty self (not that her wolf self isn’t pretty) She sits on the stump I just jumped up from and sighs. 

“Hey, Kat….” she sighs, “Look, I was just-”

“You better not have been hunting. They caught us once, they’ll catch us again, last time was way too close.” I cut her off.   

“Actually...that’s what I have to tell you. I was scouting the grounds. There are knights, Kat. They know the wolf they killed was just a wolf. Remember that guy we ran into last time? When he told us to hide? We did, obviously, but they’re coming after us again. We need to change bases.” How could I forget...Ernis… 

I shake my head and try to understand.

“But what are we even gonna do?” I panic, starting to pace. 

“Whatever we plan on doing, we have to get out of here, befo-” We hear yells coming toward us. We immediately transform into bats, flying up into the trees.

“You think they’re here for us?” I harshly whisper to Jade. She gives me a look that even as a bat, I can easily interpret as “Shut-up-stupid-they’ll -hear-us” 

“I could’ve sworn I heard something over here. There was also definitely a wolf near where we were.”

“What color did you say the wolf’s fur was?”

“Jet Black. There’s no way a regular wolf is that color.” 

It’s my turn to glare at Jade. Jet Black? That’s definitely a description of Jade. We fly to another tree and quietly detransform. It’s really tiring to stay in bat form for too long.

Just as I’m about to transform back, a net falls over my head! Jade is right next to me and is tangled as well. An alarm starts blaring all around us.

Guards surround us.

Shoot.

Ernis

Finally. Training’s over. I dress in shorts and a t-shirt and am just going on a leisurely stroll when I notice an annoying bird calling. 

I turn to the tree to see…...a blue jay. Continuously squawking. I roll my eyes. Seeing that it captured my attention, it stops and starts flying away. Thank God. I start walking again but feel a beak at my head. The blue jay is on me now. 

She’s just not going to leave me alone, is she?

I sigh. “Alright, alright, I’ll follow you. Take me to the ‘seer’ or whatever.” The bluejay flys off, slowly so I can follow. 

I do, and pretty soon we’re in front of a dark purple tent. The blue jay flies away. 

The flap of the tent is closed, and I don’t really know where I’m supposed to knock, so I just awkwardly stand to the side.

Thankfully, the seer opens the flap and ushers me inside. 

It’s a magical wonderland in here! In the middle of the tent, there’s a small wooden table with a crystal ball on top of some pretty fabrics. There are two mats beside the table, and I plop down on one of them. The seer plops down on the other. 

“So, um, I’m here?” I say. The seer (I should really learn her name) is smiling with her eyes closed. She finally opens her eyes and takes a deep breath.

“Indeed you are. Well, though I’m slightly surprised you decided to show up, I’m glad you came. Thankfully, in better clothes. Back to our previous conversation- I know the wolf killed that night was not a vampire.”

“Are you gonna tell me how exactly you know that, or no?”

“You humans, so impatient. Let me finish. You have a thing for rudely interrupting, don’t you? “

“Excuse me, but if I’m not mistaken, you’re a human too.”

“I’m a seer. That’ll be too complicated for you to understand now. Just listen, will you? I know you did what you did, for love. You could have very easily killed the vampires once you found them, but you didn’t. Moreover, you knew that the wolf your fellow soldiers killed was just a wolf, nothing more, yet you didn’t bother to tell them.”

“Riiiight. Love for what exactly?”

“Love for who, not what. Tell me, what comes to your mind when you see someone with red hair, hmm?” I try to keep my expression nonchalant as if I don’t remember Kat’s dark, blood-red hair. “Don’t worry… I don’t exactly know why Melody would put you two together, but the simple way to put it is that you’re soulmates. Your life is tied to hers.” 

“Look, you aren’t making any sense at all-” I stop abruptly. My breathing feels very short all of a sudden, and my heart is beating faster as if I just started running. 

“She’s in trouble. Which means you are too. Go!” I run out of the tent. I don’t really know what I’m doing anymore, but I run to my house, changing into my armor and grabbing my sword. 

A TK(trainee knight*) comes up to me, looking as breathless as I for no reason feel. 

“Sir….Ernis, Sir(panting), the captin (panting) wants you.” I nod and run towards the training grounds where everyone is running around.

I see the captain standing somewhere off to the side, talking to one of the dungeon guards. 

“Captin!” I run up to him.

“Ernis. There is an urgent matter I need you to attend to. I have TK running all over the place, so while I’d rather deal with it myself, I’ll need you to go.” I nod. He runs off. I follow the dungeon guard.

“Um, what exactly do I need to do?” I ask the guard as we walk towards the underground dungeon.

“Zee Captin wishez for you to eeee interrogate zomeone, a new prizoner.” he says in an accent. Interrogate someone?! I haven’t done that in years! We reach the end of the tunnel and I soon hear a bunch of yells. 

In front of one of the dungeon, cells is about 5 or 6 guards, all trying to hold down what looks like two prisoners. 

Kat

I bite the hand of the guard who’s trying to shove me in the cell. Jade kicks one of em in the shins.

There’s too many though, and we’re soon sitting in the cell. I run a hand through my hair and sigh.

“Zee what information you can receive from them.” a gruff guard says, leaving the cell. In front of the cell now is...Ernis?!

There are guards everywhere though, and I don’t think it’s safe for us to show that we’ve met. I walk over to the farthest corner of the cell and plop down. Jade comes next to me. 

Against my constant thoughts of don’t act up don’t act up don’t act up, my ears start turning towards Ernis. 

Why?

Just….why?

I can tell Jade is trying to suppress her giggle, even though we’ve just been jailed.

I hear Ernis clear his throat so I look towards him.

“Prisoners. I’m going to need you to come towards the door of the cell, please." I roll my eyes. Do I really have to go?

“I’ll have to use more extreme measures if you won’t listen…” he says. I sigh and walk forward, Jade at my heels. Ernis’s eyes widen in recognition. At least now that I’m in front of him, my ears will stop turning.

“Er-um-I just remembered-something-Will you watch these prisoners?” he says to a guard, running off. I wince as my ears turn towards the direction he ran in. 

Though it’s just calmed down from my capture, my heart starts beating faster and faster as if I’m the one running, not Ernis.

I sigh and sit down in the corner of the cell. It’s gonna be a long day...

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Regina Perry
01:34 Aug 30, 2020

Yay! You did a Part 2! I love the seer and I'm glad to see her more in this. My favourite line is when she says, “You humans," which is something I find myself saying at times. I do have a few typos to point out: "he mockingly points his sword as my face." It should be "at my face." The first letter of "there she goes exaggerating again." should be capitalised. “Sh-sh! Don’t try and deceive me, darling. I’m a seer for goodness sake, don’t you think I know what a real vampire looks like? she says, putting her finger by my lips. Y...

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Amany Sayed
20:24 Aug 30, 2020

Yesss I did. Thank you for all the long feedback as usual! Of course, I can make an exception for my fellow vampire. ~Amany

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Evelyn ⭐️
21:44 Aug 29, 2020

Nice story Amany! The detail was good! I think the plot was perfect for the prompt! I always love your stories but this one stood out to me. Its probably one of my favorites! Great job, can't wait for your next story. Also if you have time, could you please check out my new story? No pressure, just looking for some feedback!

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Amany Sayed
20:24 Aug 30, 2020

Thanks a ton! Really? Thank You! Of course, I'll check it out ASAP!

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Evelyn ⭐️
00:26 Sep 06, 2020

Yay! I'll go check it out!

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05:11 Aug 29, 2020

Great follow up to your first story, the saga continues..... I like the ongoing love story between Ernis and Kat, that's great. I did, however, figure out what was giving me trouble when you switch between POVs. It's the fact that you use first person for two different characters and that's what's confusing. I think that, if you removed all of the first person, it would make it easier to know which character we're following. I'm enjoying the story though, should we expect a part 3?

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Amany Sayed
20:30 Aug 29, 2020

Thank you so much! Ah, well, to each his own! I'm better at first-person than the third person, and I think I'll just continue like this. Thanks for reading! Yes! I have an idea incorporating one of this week's prompts actually! :)

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15:43 Aug 30, 2020

I look forward to it. And please, don't get me wrong, it's not that first person doesn't work, but I think that you're upping the difficulty level when you have two different characters being written in first person. Usually, that POV is reserved for the story's main character, allowing the reader to follow directly through their eyes and ears, right? So, when there's a second character in first person, it becomes increasingly difficult for the reader to follow.

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Amany Sayed
16:19 Aug 30, 2020

Yeah, I see what you mean, but I want to show both Ernis and Kat's thoughts, and I'm not very good at third person omniscient.

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04:04 Aug 31, 2020

Totally get it, it can be so tough to properly achieve what you're trying to get across sometimes.

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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03:37 Aug 29, 2020

😂😂😂I loved this sequel Armani! So refreshing! Definitely can't WAIT for the next!!! Amazing! Kat's ears are one very naughty pair😂😂😂 P.S. Armani, I've just suited another story, "Nut Judge", mind reading it? Thanks!!!

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Amany Sayed
20:22 Aug 30, 2020

Thanksss! hehe, yes they are. I read it! Veery funny and amazing as always!

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20:51 Aug 30, 2020

Thank you you!😁

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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21:48 Sep 05, 2020

Of COURSE!!!! Oh gosh, ive made a lot of promises, Lord help...😖

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22:53 Aug 28, 2020

PART TWOOOOOOOOO! MY PRAYERS HAVE BEEN ANSWERED!

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Amany Sayed
22:55 Aug 28, 2020

😂😂

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Rayhan Hidayat
22:37 Aug 28, 2020

I’ll read anything that’s fantasy on this site, and this was a worthy sequel! The seer was my favorite character from the last story so I’m so glad she got more screen time, just love the way she teases and messes with Ernis. I don’t know if it was intentional but I imagined the dungeon guards to have a German accent. 😂 And I wonder who this mysterious Melody character is, hmmm... 😉

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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22:14 Aug 28, 2020

YAY PART TWO! Now I have to wait for Part 3 *sobs* Lol just like the other one..I loved this! I liked how her ears always turn to him. And soulmates, crazyy!! This definitley did not disappoint👏 And I liked the Medieval and Modern plot. I think its really creative..and super unique. And the cliffhangers actually keep me more interested in the story. I realllly wanna know what happens next!! Alsooo I'm not sure if you meant this..(probably not) but when the Blue jay finds Ernis. you put "capture3d"..just put that in ctrl f, or ctrl g...if...

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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23:36 Sep 04, 2020

On me way! WOW 2 stories!!

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Cal Carson
17:48 Sep 08, 2020

Thanks for part two! I love your tone- it's really great! Also, pickles.

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Anshika Goyal
19:49 Sep 03, 2020

I loved the Vampire hunt and this story makes no exception. I read your bio and you sound like someone I would definitely want my friends to be. The way you write makes the story come alive. It is as if I am an observer in that room. By the way, I am Anshika and I am new to reedsy as well as writing, but my passion makes me want to join even the community, even though it might be too late. I hope I can learn to write like you. Seeing stories like yours I think I have a long way to go. Well, you nice, keep going. P.s- please check out my rec...

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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The Cold Ice
03:11 Aug 31, 2020

Hilarious story.Great job👍keep it up.I enjoyed the story.Waiting for your next story.Well written. Would you mind to read my story “The dragon warrior?”

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Amogh Kasat
02:02 Aug 31, 2020

IT'S A WONDERFUL STORY

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Amany Sayed
13:23 Aug 31, 2020

THANK YOU VERY MUCH

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Amogh Kasat
16:15 Aug 31, 2020

My pleasure and please read my story like and comment

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22:57 Aug 30, 2020

~Hey! Amazing story! Loved the cliffhanger and waiting for part two~ Btw, say in your bio you set a challenge for yourself where we kinds choose the prompt! Here you go: Write a story starting with "I didn't mean to kill her." I want to see you write that kinda story!!

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Amany Sayed
23:10 Aug 30, 2020

Thanks so much! be sure to read Part 1 of this while you wait, it's titled, Vampire Hunt. Ooh, I really like that! I'll start it ASAP! Thanks for the challenge!

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02:00 Aug 31, 2020

Sure :D np!

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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22:11 Sep 04, 2020

sure!

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I. F.
02:19 Aug 29, 2020

Finally part 2, way to go, this was great! I loved the fast-pace, it made the story even more fun to read. Ernis and Kat seem really genuine, and Jade is hilarious. I liked the combination of modern and medieval. Nice cliff ending, can’t wait for part 3!

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Amany Sayed
20:22 Aug 30, 2020

Thank you so much! This means a lot!

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Doubra Akika
22:44 Aug 28, 2020

Hey Amany!!! Just read this! You’re right. It is fast-paced but I understood really well. Really liked it anyway. Some editing suggestions Seeing that it capture3d my attention, it stops and starts flying away. Remove the 3 “Captin!” I run up to him. Change the Captin to Captain In front of one of the dungeon, cells is about 5 or 6 guards, all trying to hold down what looks like two prisoners. I’m not sure what this should be, but it sounds odd. I don’t know. Maybe you could check it out🤷🏽‍♀️. “Prisoners. I’m going to need you...

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Amany Sayed
21:24 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Doubra Akika
22:02 Sep 04, 2020

Sure! Could you check out my recents as well? I’d love your feedback!

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Amany Sayed
22:04 Sep 04, 2020

Of course! Really bored right now, so ...

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Doubra Akika
22:06 Sep 04, 2020

Thanks 🤣.

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