Aug 28, 2020

Romance Funny

Author's Note: This is Part 2 to another story I've written, Vampire Hunt. You probably want to read it to understand a lot of what happens in this one. Enjoy!

Ernis

I groan, falling to the ground. My sword falls discarded to the side.

“Dederick! Alright, Alright, you win!” I say as he mockingly points his sword as my face. He laughs, helping me up.

“Not so rusty anymore, are we?”

“Man, I never knew one weekend of extra practice could get you so much better!”

“You better believe it! You’ve probably been holding me down.” I roll my eyes just as the captain comes over to us.

“Ernis, someone’s here to speak with you.” I inwardly groan as I nod and follow the captain to midfield. Last time this happened, I had to go kill a vampire. Well, actually, pretend to kill a vampire and return home. They haven’t found out yet…

The captain motions to a young woman looking up at the clouds. I can’t see her full face yet, but if I’m not mistaken she’s the same overstating seer from before. 

This time, she’s wearing a short almost knee-length dress and her hair is considerably shorter, still with her signature flower crown on top. Her silvery eyes glint in the sunlight. After the weekend, the weather became much hotter. I’m sweating in my full armor. I sigh, preparing myself for what she has to say and walk up to her. 

Once I’m next to her, I clear my throat.

“Oh! Ernis! Nice to see you again! You’re still in that armor? I thought they’d give you something lighter to wear in this blistering heat! I swear, one of you will probably die of heatstroke soon!” there she goes exaggerating again.

“Well? You wanted to speak to me?” I say, a hint of annoyance in my voice. 

“Oh! My bad! This weather always makes me wanna ramble for some reason! Well, back to business. I know what you did... I know the ‘vampire’ you killed was actually a wolf.”

“Um, excuse me, but you can’t just accu-”

“Sh-sh! Don’t try and deceive me, darling. I’m a seer for goodness sake, don’t you think I know what a real vampire looks like? she says, putting her finger by my lips. I look down at her perfectly manicured fingers and back up at her face which is way too close to mine. I blush and push her away. 

“I’m not trying to ‘deceive’ anyone-” the look on her face stops me. She rolls her eyes.

“It’s okay. You don’t have to be all flustered. I know why you did what you did.”

“Oh really?” I say, raising my eyebrows. She nods, putting a hand on my shoulder.

“You did it for love.” It takes all my willpower not to double over laughing. 

“Look, if you’re done with all your assertions and so-called ‘prophecies’, then I better get back to training,” I say, just about leaving when she grabs my arm.

“Ernis, wait! I should’ve known not to tell you this so...so fast. Come to my tent tonight. I’ll explain as much as I can. And for God’s sake, do wear something a little more fitting for the weather.” she says, leaving.

“Hey, how will I even know where to go!” I call out after her. She laughs.

“Follow the blue jay!” oh, of course, she’ll give me some cryptic message like ‘follow the blue jay’. Whatever, not like I’m going to go anyway. Maybe if I don’t, she’ll finally leave me alone…

Kat

“Jade!” I pause for breath. “Jade, where are you! This. isn’t. Funny. Anymore!”

No answer. I sigh, running a little further into the forest. Even with wolf legs, my body’s starting to ache. I transform back into a human and plop down on a nearby tree stump. 

Much appreciated wind blows a lock of my red hair into my face. 

Suddenly, I hear the faintest sound of a leaf crackling like someone stepped on it. My wolf ears perk up as I jump, surveying the area. 

There’s a wolf standing not too far away from me. I transform, ready to pounce when I realize the eyes of the wolf and detransform. 

“You better detransform right now and explain,” I say crossing my eyes. Jade waits for a second and soon is her normal pretty self (not that her wolf self isn’t pretty) She sits on the stump I just jumped up from and sighs. 

“Hey, Kat….” she sighs, “Look, I was just-”

“You better not have been hunting. They caught us once, they’ll catch us again, last time was way too close.” I cut her off.   

“Actually...that’s what I have to tell you. I was scouting the grounds. There are knights, Kat. They know the wolf they killed was just a wolf. Remember that guy we ran into last time? When he told us to hide? We did, obviously, but they’re coming after us again. We need to change bases.” How could I forget...Ernis… 

I shake my head and try to understand.

“But what are we even gonna do?” I panic, starting to pace. 

“Whatever we plan on doing, we have to get out of here, befo-” We hear yells coming toward us. We immediately transform into bats, flying up into the trees.

“You think they’re here for us?” I harshly whisper to Jade. She gives me a look that even as a bat, I can easily interpret as “Shut-up-stupid-they’ll -hear-us” 

“I could’ve sworn I heard something over here. There was also definitely a wolf near where we were.”

“What color did you say the wolf’s fur was?”

“Jet Black. There’s no way a regular wolf is that color.” 

It’s my turn to glare at Jade. Jet Black? That’s definitely a description of Jade. We fly to another tree and quietly detransform. It’s really tiring to stay in bat form for too long.

Just as I’m about to transform back, a net falls over my head! Jade is right next to me and is tangled as well. An alarm starts blaring all around us.

Guards surround us.

Shoot.

Ernis

Finally. Training’s over. I dress in shorts and a t-shirt and am just going on a leisurely stroll when I notice an annoying bird calling. 

I turn to the tree to see…...a blue jay. Continuously squawking. I roll my eyes. Seeing that it captured my attention, it stops and starts flying away. Thank God. I start walking again but feel a beak at my head. The blue jay is on me now. 

She’s just not going to leave me alone, is she?

I sigh. “Alright, alright, I’ll follow you. Take me to the ‘seer’ or whatever.” The bluejay flys off, slowly so I can follow. 

I do, and pretty soon we’re in front of a dark purple tent. The blue jay flies away. 

The flap of the tent is closed, and I don’t really know where I’m supposed to knock, so I just awkwardly stand to the side.

Thankfully, the seer opens the flap and ushers me inside. 

It’s a magical wonderland in here! In the middle of the tent, there’s a small wooden table with a crystal ball on top of some pretty fabrics. There are two mats beside the table, and I plop down on one of them. The seer plops down on the other. 

“So, um, I’m here?” I say. The seer (I should really learn her name) is smiling with her eyes closed. She finally opens her eyes and takes a deep breath.

“Indeed you are. Well, though I’m slightly surprised you decided to show up, I’m glad you came. Thankfully, in better clothes. Back to our previous conversation- I know the wolf killed that night was not a vampire.”

“Are you gonna tell me how exactly you know that, or no?”

“You humans, so impatient. Let me finish. You have a thing for rudely interrupting, don’t you? “

“Excuse me, but if I’m not mistaken, you’re a human too.”

“I’m a seer. That’ll be too complicated for you to understand now. Just listen, will you? I know you did what you did, for love. You could have very easily killed the vampires once you found them, but you didn’t. Moreover, you knew that the wolf your fellow soldiers killed was just a wolf, nothing more, yet you didn’t bother to tell them.”

“Riiiight. Love for what exactly?”

“Love for who, not what. Tell me, what comes to your mind when you see someone with red hair, hmm?” I try to keep my expression nonchalant as if I don’t remember Kat’s dark, blood-red hair. “Don’t worry… I don’t exactly know why Melody would put you two together, but the simple way to put it is that you’re soulmates. Your life is tied to hers.” 

“Look, you aren’t making any sense at all-” I stop abruptly. My breathing feels very short all of a sudden, and my heart is beating faster as if I just started running. 

“She’s in trouble. Which means you are too. Go!” I run out of the tent. I don’t really know what I’m doing anymore, but I run to my house, changing into my armor and grabbing my sword. 

A TK(trainee knight*) comes up to me, looking as breathless as I for no reason feel. 

“Sir….Ernis, Sir(panting), the captin (panting) wants you.” I nod and run towards the training grounds where everyone is running around.

I see the captain standing somewhere off to the side, talking to one of the dungeon guards. 

“Captin!” I run up to him.

“Ernis. There is an urgent matter I need you to attend to. I have TK running all over the place, so while I’d rather deal with it myself, I’ll need you to go.” I nod. He runs off. I follow the dungeon guard.

“Um, what exactly do I need to do?” I ask the guard as we walk towards the underground dungeon.

“Zee Captin wishez for you to eeee interrogate zomeone, a new prizoner.” he says in an accent. Interrogate someone?! I haven’t done that in years! We reach the end of the tunnel and I soon hear a bunch of yells. 

In front of one of the dungeon, cells is about 5 or 6 guards, all trying to hold down what looks like two prisoners. 

Kat

I bite the hand of the guard who’s trying to shove me in the cell. Jade kicks one of em in the shins.

There’s too many though, and we’re soon sitting in the cell. I run a hand through my hair and sigh.

“Zee what information you can receive from them.” a gruff guard says, leaving the cell. In front of the cell now is...Ernis?!

There are guards everywhere though, and I don’t think it’s safe for us to show that we’ve met. I walk over to the farthest corner of the cell and plop down. Jade comes next to me. 

Against my constant thoughts of don’t act up don’t act up don’t act up, my ears start turning towards Ernis. 

Why?

Just….why?

I can tell Jade is trying to suppress her giggle, even though we’ve just been jailed.

I hear Ernis clear his throat so I look towards him.

“Prisoners. I’m going to need you to come towards the door of the cell, please." I roll my eyes. Do I really have to go?

“I’ll have to use more extreme measures if you won’t listen…” he says. I sigh and walk forward, Jade at my heels. Ernis’s eyes widen in recognition. At least now that I’m in front of him, my ears will stop turning.

“Er-um-I just remembered-something-Will you watch these prisoners?” he says to a guard, running off. I wince as my ears turn towards the direction he ran in. 

Though it’s just calmed down from my capture, my heart starts beating faster and faster as if I’m the one running, not Ernis.

I sigh and sit down in the corner of the cell. It’s gonna be a long day...

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21:05 Aug 29, 2020

Hey, Amany! So you know how obsessed I am with Reedsy, right? Well anyways, I’ve been bored out the last our because I’m getting ZILCH notifications. Seriously, I’ve been doing stuff on my iPad and checking Reedsy every ten seconds. Basically, I’m bored. And since you’re my good friend whom I’ve never met in real life, I’m going to come do my millionth comment! Yippeeeeeeeeeee! Ima make a list of stuff: 1. YAY VAMPIRE HUNT 3 MIGHT COME OUT!! 2. Idk...I was just thinking...before I met you, I didn’t even know the name ‘Amany’ existed. An...

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21:52 Aug 29, 2020

2. Hehehehehe...okay, so, do you want to be a goddess (you can pick what you want to be—to break it down for you, there are Mahns and Lottz gods. Amany can be a Mahns goddess, meaning she some big group, or a Lottz goddess, meaning she’s aspects of many Mahns groups. For example, you could be...idk...a Lottz goddess, with drawing and flowers as your domain. Cuz you like drawing and sunflowers, idk.), and you can pick what you are, OR I could make you a bigger character in some other books. Your choice!! 😄 Side note: the Mahn god of writing ...

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18:54 Sep 03, 2020

Hiiii, Amany! Just a random question—can there be a place called SayedStore in a short story I’m writing? Idk, I just wanted to represent you in some way...there’s already a guard called Jimi, hehe! So...do you wanna? ~Aerinnn!

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19:15 Sep 03, 2020

'SayedStore'? Looks cool!

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19:15 Sep 03, 2020

Tehehehehe

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19:18 Sep 03, 2020

hehe

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17:21 Sep 01, 2020

I loved this story! Great job!! The cliffhanger... was well, a cliffhanger and I cant wait for part 3! I also loved how you did the modern/medieval, I thought that was really creative and different ( in a good way ).

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Amany Sayed
17:32 Sep 02, 2020

Thanks so much! I'm glad! It's being written, so stay tuned! Yay, I'm glad you think so!

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17:42 Sep 02, 2020

No problem!

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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22:49 Sep 04, 2020

Okay! Heading there nowww.

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D. Jaymz
19:25 Aug 30, 2020

Great story 👏 You did zee dialogue in za foreign voice well 😊

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Amany Sayed
20:22 Aug 30, 2020

Thanks! Hehe, Thanks!

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D. Jaymz
21:26 Aug 30, 2020

You're welcome 😊

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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D. Jaymz
04:12 Sep 05, 2020

I'll check it out in the morning 😊

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Lulu Lemon
20:54 Sep 02, 2020

Awesome job!! I really liked this story!

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Amany Sayed
20:54 Sep 02, 2020

Thanks so much!

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Lulu Lemon
20:58 Sep 02, 2020

No problem!!

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Lulu Lemon
22:40 Sep 04, 2020

Okie Dokie!

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Love the story girl! Super interesting and funny!!! Awesome!!! 😀

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Amany Sayed
17:33 Sep 02, 2020

Thank you! And thanks for commenting on so much of my stuff! <3 :D

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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k! I'll read it in a sec!

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Hriday Saboo
11:35 Sep 04, 2020

Hey Amany when are you posting another story. I m waiting Post it soon

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A u d r e y - s
23:59 Sep 03, 2020

This is so good! You’re so talented.

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Amany Sayed
00:00 Sep 04, 2020

Aw, thank you ^-^

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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A u d r e y - s
22:59 Sep 04, 2020

I’ll be sure to check it out 👍

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Helen Jett
21:49 Aug 28, 2020

Wow! This was all so fast-paced I had to read it twice to wrap my brain around it. It was amazing and the cliff hanger ending just leaves me wanting to know more! ( Who is this Melody?? I guess I'll just have to wait and find out...) Really good job, I love how you combined modern dialogue with a medieval theme. Can't wait for Part 3!! -Helen P.S. I put out a new story this week and I would love your feedback if you have the time!

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Amany Sayed
22:48 Aug 28, 2020

Haha, hope you got it all in the end. Yes, yes you will... Thanks so much! Stay tuned! Of course, I've been a little busy lately due to school beginning Monday for me, but I'll go ASAP!

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Helen Jett
23:19 Aug 28, 2020

Thanks, no rush :)

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Amany Sayed
23:20 Aug 28, 2020

No Problem!

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Helen Jett
21:31 Sep 04, 2020

Yay! I'll definitely stop by :)

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Leya Newi
21:47 Aug 28, 2020

Yes! You wrote a part two!! I love Ernis and Kat, and their relationship. I do have a couple nitpicky notes, which I went back to try and find since I know you want to be as good as you can, even though you can’t edit anymore I don’t think. When Ernis realizes that it’s the same seer as last time, you describe her as ‘... the overstating seer...’ to me, this adjective seems kinda clunky. I know what you mean, I just wonder if there’s a better word. Maybe over the top? Or exaggerating, if it wasn’t so close to the second time you used it....

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Leya Newi
05:06 Sep 05, 2020

Yesssss!

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Kristin Neubauer
21:23 Aug 28, 2020

Ernis and Kat are back! I'm so glad. I loved that last story and this keeps the same momentum. It cute and hilarious how they talk in modern voices against that medieval backdrop. I'm looking forward to the next!

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Amany Sayed
21:25 Aug 28, 2020

Thank you so much! Thanks, it means a lot for you to say that a lot of people say the dialogue is much too modern. Thanks, stay tuned :)

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Kristin Neubauer
21:36 Aug 28, 2020

I guess it's subjective, but for me, the contrast between the old-timey setting/characters and the modern-day dialogue is really funny. I feel like it works for the tone of the story, which is light and cute and fun. But, I haven't taken any writing classes or anything like that - I just know what I enjoy reading and what I don't. And I definitely enjoyed this. Maybe you would be better served to listen to the advice of more experienced writers. I'm sure if you experimented with some medieval-type dialogue, you'd do that really well too...

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Amany Sayed
21:44 Aug 28, 2020

I'm glad you think so. Yeah, I get what you mean. Anyway, I'm writing for ME not them. Someone else enjoying is an added bonus :) It's not that it's hard, I've done it before, it just didn't feel right for these characters. Thank you for your support :D

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Kristin Neubauer
21:51 Aug 28, 2020

I'm glad to hear that - it's actually very inspiring to me too. To remember to write for myself. Keep 'em coming!

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Lily Kingston
21:11 Aug 28, 2020

I love the girls' reaction to seeing Ernis again :D like they're about to be interrogated, but Jade just giggling like "ope, there's your man, Kat." Keep up the good work and keep writing!!

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Amany Sayed
21:12 Aug 28, 2020

Thank You! XD yas. Thanks so much, you too!

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21:00 Aug 28, 2020

Woooow awesome job! I loved it ;) I really like the seer...idk why I just do...and I love the names. YAY, AN OFFICIAL SHIP! Iiii’m Captain!!! MUAHAHAHAHAHA! Umm...so...yeah. Oh, one mistake I found: ‘ Continuously squawking. I roll my eyes. Seeing that it capture3d my attention, it stops and starts flying away.’ I’m preeeeetty sure you didn’t mean to write ‘capture3d‘, if you wanna fix that. Anyways, nice work! Keeeep writing!

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Amany Sayed
21:03 Aug 28, 2020

Realllyyy? That means a lot, cause I really didn't feel like it was too good. I like her too hehe. Aw, thanks, I put some thought into them. Still thinking of a good one for the seer... HAHAHAAA YAS! Thanks for catching that! You toooo! ~A

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21:11 Aug 28, 2020

Possible seeer name: Erin Aeryn Arynn Aarin Okay, time for real ones (NOT LIKE THOSE AREN’T REALLY...I feel like she’d make a really good Arynn): Lizzy (!!!) Mihika (!) Darla (!!) Audrey (!!) Marama (!) Cici (!!) Alexandra (!) Alex (!!) Alexis (!) Alexa (!!) Hmmmmmmm...I still think Lizzy/Lizzie would be best! But yeah. !!! means I think they’re really good, ! means pretty good but not my top pick. Enjoy!

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Amany Sayed
21:14 Aug 28, 2020

Haha, I'll see. Thanks for all the suggestions.

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Avery G.
20:44 Aug 28, 2020

Yay! A part two! This was good! But....THE CLIFFHANGER!!!!! I loved how it was medival/modern! Great job!

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Amany Sayed
20:48 Aug 28, 2020

:) I KNOWWWW Thanks, it's just a lot of people comment saying "The dialogue is too modern" and stuff. Thank you!

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Avery G.
20:48 Aug 28, 2020

You're welcome!!! :)

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Amany Sayed
21:23 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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Avery G.
23:21 Sep 04, 2020

Yay, okay!

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B. W.
18:28 Sep 04, 2020

I really like this story and you did great with it ^^ i'm going to give this story a 10/10 :) i was also wondering if you could go and check out my recent stories "Useless" and "getting her back" i'd love to see what you have to say

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Amany Sayed
18:53 Sep 04, 2020

Thanks! I'm glad. Alright, I'll go as soon as I can!

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B. W.
18:54 Sep 04, 2020

No problem and thanks i'm a bit excited to see what ya have to say ^^

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Amaya Macaulay
21:56 Sep 02, 2020

Hi! I love your writing style and I was wondering if you could read my most recent story and give me some tips/criticism. I really love this story btw. Also, how could somebody NOT LIKE PICKLES?!?!?!?! How is that even possible?

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Amany Sayed
23:22 Sep 02, 2020

Hi! Thanks, that means a lot! Of course, I will! I don't even know...People these days...

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Amaya Macaulay
23:37 Sep 02, 2020

ikr...

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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03:59 Sep 02, 2020

Wow, Amany!!!!!!!! That cliffhanger.....I need a part 3!!! I'm shipping Kat and Ernis so much now! I really enjoyed it and loved how the seer says that their souls are tied together. That's a really sweet way of expressing it. Btw, could you please check out my story, The Queen of Hearts?

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Amany Sayed
17:30 Sep 02, 2020

Hehe, it's being written! Yes, as each story progresses, I amp up the romance a bit lol. Of course! Sounds cool!

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

Part 3 is out if you wanna read and leave your views on it!

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02:37 Sep 05, 2020

YESSS!!!! I'LL CHECK IT OUT NOW!!

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15:23 Sep 01, 2020

I loved the cliffhanger! It adds intrigue to an already fascinating story. Your characters keep gaining individuality and a stronger uniqueness as you develop them. Great description of scenery and background without being overbearing. Still really enjoying this story and please let me know when part three is available!

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Amany Sayed
21:59 Sep 01, 2020

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it! I will!

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21:23 Sep 04, 2020

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B. W.
18:00 Aug 30, 2020

I like this story and you did a great job with it ^^ you should continue to make stories and i might go and take a look at some of your other stories as well i think i've only seen 2 or so by now. so can you take a guess on what i'm about to give you? 10/10 :)

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Amany Sayed
20:23 Aug 30, 2020

Thanks so much! That's really sweet of you to say! :)

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B. W.
20:25 Aug 30, 2020

no problem ^^ i was also wondering if you could maybe go and check out "Her arrival" i'd love to see what you have to say

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Amany Sayed
00:00 Aug 31, 2020

Of course! I'm tryna go on a marathon of all the stories I missed from you. Read the Iris's daughter one so far.

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B. W.
00:08 Aug 31, 2020

Alright thank you ^^ i promise all the stories will be great and can't wait to see what ya have to say

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Amany Sayed
21:22 Sep 04, 2020

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Hriday Saboo
16:50 Aug 30, 2020

Like always a brilliant story. Amany sayed. And I have submitted my new story, do read it

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Amany Sayed
20:12 Aug 30, 2020

Thanks so much! Of course!

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