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Submitted on 07/02/2020

Categories: General

The day must end on this chaotic feud I am having with my nemesis. One that happened to call themselves, Sisemen. How original, and one of many things that irritate me. It’s like having an annoying bird fluttering around my hand. Don’t know why they were created except for food for the deer.

  “I just want to be home with my mosquitoes and flies,” I thought. “They always tickle my neck and make me laugh.”

 They were also cheap to feed. Not like bears and cougars.

  I’m getting off track.

  I climbed the ladder and down into the large, square hole that radiated an extremely bright light. I was whispered to as I slept that this is the direction to my nemesis.

  “Strange destination for Sisemen likes where darkness mingles with the light so it was a constant change for the eyesight.”

  Luckily, my eyes easily adapt to all kinds of environments so there is no need to take them out at night to put among the coals of a fire.

  I went down into the hole, and immediately into a multi-darkness of yellow and white with a dash of people.

  “This is more like it for Sisemen,” I muttered.

  I took a couple of steps where it flattened out, and I suddenly smacked my head on the ceiling of jello with nuts in it.

  “Ouch!” I cried out having to touch the jello instead of a nut. “With my good luck, it figures.”

  I soon went from down to sideways through the extremely large space where I had to turn sideways to fit through. My thin belly expanded so it felt more comfortable to make it through the area.

  The ground ahead looked like it was full of roses of many colors, which smelled like one who just used soap and mud for a bath, making me almost gag. I jumped up and continued to walk on spikes that smelled like vomit which put me at ease as each one pierced my feet, one step at a time.

  “If I didn’t heal would I continue with my hands or long strands of hair?” I pondered for I wondered if the spikes might swallow my feet.

  The thought made me cry for it made me laugh to think of such a thing. I should let my brain do the work instead of thinking so much.

  The expanding room suddenly shrunk so I had plenty of room to navigate, letting in a sigh of relief.

  “Will you please make your disappearance known Sisemen! I grow excited, and it doesn’t make me sad to continue on this short journey!”

 “Here I am,” a voice whispered out in a loud voice, making me suddenly run until I entered a round room.

  I started to roll, but suddenly dropped up a triangular hole into a middle-sized room, and landed on my head in a sea of weeds.

  “Where am I?” I asked as I stood up on my left leg then my other left leg.

 Across the room from me, straight ahead and from the corner of my eye stood Sisemen.

  “Strange to see you on your feet,” I told my nemesis. “You are usually on your hands or your side.”

  “Today is a different day which calls for drastic changes,” Siseman spoke from a voice that changed from high pitch to normal to very deep.

  I wanted to skip over to Sisemen and tear off the metal mask made of plastic to find out who they truly were, and end this feud. Maybe they could become friends and smack each other day after day.

  Suddenly, Sisemen tossed two foam balls that took both of my arms off.

  “You know that won’t take me in,” I told my nemesis as my arms attached to my legs and inched up to my shoulders.

  “I know,” said Sisemen with a smile. “I just like watching it.”

  “Today we need to end this or start a new destination,” I said without moving my lips.

  Silence, which almost drove me insane in a sane world.

  “What do you say?” I said with calmness.

  Moments later, we sat in the middle of rolling hills with white, puffy clouds falling to the ground all around us as grass shot up into the air to enter the blue of outer space.

  “You know I don’t like this place so why bring me here?” I told Sisemen.

  “You need to taste your surroundings,” my nemesis remarked. “It will make you feel good instead of bad all the time.”

  I did feel bad all the time but excited that Sisemen was always good which meant we were the same.

  “Do you want to start this or call it a go?” Sisemen asked. “I grow young so we must bring this to a stop or move on to eternity in a constant hug.”

  “Show me who you are so I can feel dissatisfied, and laugh to death,” I demanded with a squeak.

  “Will you be pleased?”

  “The faded lines shall become bold as my discomfort comes to a close, and I will open like a dead flower.”

  “Let’s move on to a new chapter.”

  Sisemen took the mask off with a smash of a hammer, and I stared with a constant blink of my eyes.

  “Mother?” I questioned as I looked at the girl with ponytails. “You are to misguide me in life.”

  “So I have,” she said and I was befuddled by the warm smile. The many times I have beholden the looks of hate was indeed love.

  “All a test?’ I asked. “All this time?”

  “You have flunked so for now on shall stay with me.”

  I cried out in anguish, rushing over and smacking her all over. 

  Then seeing statues of henchmen surrounding us I reached out and smashed the good out of them until they were left with just their sins they will commit in the future.

  “Shall we go home?” she asked.

  “Let’s go.”

  My crazy day ended on a sane note.

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28 comments

Niveeidha P
06:53 Jul 07, 2020

Hi Corey, the descriptions were amazing! Keep up the amazing job and looking forward to reading more!

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Corey Melin
20:07 Jul 07, 2020

Greatly appreciate the comments!

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Niveeidha P
08:35 Jul 08, 2020

No problem Corey, looking forward to reading your next stories!

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Tori Routsong
03:45 Jul 10, 2020

I really liked the descriptions in this story!!! If I had any feedback to give it would be that sometimes the pronouns confused me a little, like I couldnt figure out the antecedent. Great job! Keep it up!

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Corey Melin
04:34 Jul 10, 2020

Thank you! The story was meant to be confusing and an experiment when it comes to my writing style. I wasn't sure how it would be taken

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13:36 Jul 09, 2020

It is so action-oriented. I loved it. From start to the end, there is a tight grip over the reader's attention and you have a knack with all flowing language. Thumbs up.

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Corey Melin
13:59 Jul 09, 2020

Greatly appreciate the feedback. Glad I succeeded in what I intended.

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Cheri Jalbert
04:15 Jul 08, 2020

Vivid descriptions, interesting dialogue, and nice twists and turns as we figure out the story. Nice writing!

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Corey Melin
04:19 Jul 08, 2020

Much appreciate the comments on a story that was an experiment for me.

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Vimal Rao
08:06 Jul 06, 2020

Woah. What a point of view. Excellent command on the flow man. Loved every word. Cheers.

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Verda H
06:02 Jul 06, 2020

Oh, how cute. Lovely story

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Batool Hussain
15:18 Jul 05, 2020

This is so good. A very unique take on the prompt. Great descriptions!

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Corey Melin
17:41 Jul 05, 2020

Much appreciated!

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Batool Hussain
18:07 Jul 05, 2020

;) Could you check out my new story? Thanks.

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Corey Melin
18:18 Jul 05, 2020

Will do. You are in my library so will definitely read.

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Justine mae D
17:50 Jul 04, 2020

Great writing, I specifically enjoyed the amazing descriptions in the story!

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Corey Melin
18:23 Jul 04, 2020

Thank you! I always feel like I don't use enough description.

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Reena B.
01:22 Jul 04, 2020

Another great story! I love your writing!

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Deborah Angevin
21:21 Jul 03, 2020

A wonderful, well-written story, Corey! Would you mind checking my recent story out too? Thank you! :)

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Corey Melin
22:23 Jul 03, 2020

Thank you and will love to read your story

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Arya Preston
15:17 Jul 03, 2020

Really interesting story! I like how the dialogue propelled the plot, which is something I struggle with, you've done it wonderfully! Well done, Corey.

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Corey Melin
16:27 Jul 03, 2020

Greatly appreciate the comments!

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Roshna Rusiniya
03:55 Jul 03, 2020

This was wonderful. I really enjoyed it. The genre isn’t an easy one to write I must say. And you did a great job.

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Corey Melin
04:08 Jul 03, 2020

Thank you. Greatly appreciate the comments on a writing style I have done little throughout my years of writing.

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Roshna Rusiniya
04:12 Jul 03, 2020

You are very welcome Corey. If you get time, please check out mine too.

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Corey Melin
04:27 Jul 03, 2020

I will definitely do so. Actually going through my library now reading numerous stories. Yours is coming up.

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Grace M'mbone
18:54 Jul 02, 2020

Brilliant work Corey. Close to perfect. Amazing.

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Corey Melin
01:48 Jul 03, 2020

Much appreciate the comments that was an experiment on writing style

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