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The woman was nervous. She was constantly fidgeting; crossing and uncrossing her legs, adjusting her hair, glancing at the thin sheets of paper in her hand.

Her name was Aishwarya and she had come here to get her first book published. Her name was called and she jumped up and hurried to the little booth at the end of the corridor.

“Close the door and sit down.” The person inside was a tall, thin lady. She had high cheekbones and expensive silver earrings. Aishwarya thought she looked rather like a Victorian era noble or a famous singer. They were all so rich nowadays.

She sat down and pushed the manuscript across the table without a word. Her voice had caught in her throat and she was sure it wouldn’t come back anytime soon.

The person on the other side of the table stared at her for a minute and then picked up the manuscript. “My name is Saina. Yours?”

Aishwarya cleared her throat three times as Saina crinkled her face in disgust. Then she found her voice. “Aishwarya.”

Saina turned to the first page of the script and cut her off. “’My (Hopefully) Amazing Life’ by Aishwarya K Rao. Wait,” she looked up, “the Aishwarya Rao? The one with… with that Lao-”

“Yes, yes,” said Aishwarya hurriedly, “That one.”

Saina raised an eyebrow, then gestured to the manuscript. “So this is like an autobiography?”

“Yes, you can call it that. It’s mostly from when I was ten, though, not much before.”

“And that comes to how many years?”

“Fifteen.”

“Is this your first-time writing?”

“Yes, I was more of a speaker before, not a writer. But I decided to pick up the pen for the first time.”

“Well,” Saina muttered under her breath, “I’m going have my hands full with this newbie.”

“Sorry?”

“Nothing,” Saina replied hurriedly, “Nothing.”

She turned to a page in the middle. “I followed your news story for almost the full time it ran. This is a good opportunity for me to hear your side of the story.”

Aishwarya nodded, looking embarrassed and uncomfortable. Saina placed the manuscript in the photocopier just outside her office and handed the original back to Aishwarya. “You can take this. I’ll take the photocopy home and read it there. I need to give it my full attention. I mean, it’s a tad more interesting than the usual ones that come in here, yeah?”

Aishwarya nodded mutely. Saina sat back down and pulled out a small list. “Next,” she bellowed, “Who’s next?”

Aishwarya thanked Saina and left the building.

It was just before bedtime, when Saina picked up Aishwarya’s manuscript. She looked at her watch, then the manuscript, then her watch again. She shrugged and got into bed with the script. She put on the night lamp and began reading.



 Ever since I can remember, I have been quick at everything. I was born one-and-a-half months premature. I began talking three months before my first birthday and walking two months prior.

Later, I also realized that I speak one point three times faster than the average human, and run extremely fast too.



Saina was bored. She was searching for a particular portion of the book. She flipped through the pages, scanning them quickly. Ah, there it was. The beginning of chapter three.



It was two days after my twelfth birthday that I met Feroze for the first time. He was twelve years older than me, and a good deal more talkative too, which surprised me.

I remember it quite clearly. He took over a little auto repair shop that I used to frequent. I used to help the previous owner a lot with the smaller scooters and bicycles. Feroze was equally welcoming.

He had a bright face with sparkling eyes and an attractive nature. He was a very likable person, and knew almost everything about everything. I never got bored the entire time I was with him. We became great friends soon enough.

The day he started working, I walked and looked at him suspiciously. “Where is Rathod Uncle?” I asked boldly. Rathod Uncle was the previous owner.

Feroze pointed to the back of the garage. Rathod Uncle emerged from the shadows, wearing a welder’s mask. “Ah,” he said, “My favorite little assistant! And how are you today?”

I grinned at him. “Fine, Uncle.” Then I dropped my voice to a secretive tone, “Who’s he?”

“Oh, he’s my new assistant. My friend’s son. He’s from the city apparently. He was just telling me about the wonderful aspects of city life before you came.”

Feroze smiled at me innocently. I walked over and asked, “What’s your name?”

“Feroze,” he replied, still smiling, “And yours?”

“I’m not supposed to tell it to strangers.”

He laughed. It was a deep, melodious laugh. “And I’m a stranger?”

“According to my dictionary, the definition of stranger is ‘one whom you don’t know enough about to consider a brother or sister, or family in general, depending on the age difference.’ So I think you qualify.”

Feroze laughed again. “Okay. Let’s clear this up now, shall we? How would you like to be my brother?”

“I think you’d be more of an uncle.”

“Uncle? Please! I’m only twenty-four!”

“You look older.”

He shrugged. “Yeah, I get that a lot.”

Rathod Uncle looked up from his welding. “Feroze, are you going to help me or chat with Aishwarya all day?”

“I find the latter more fascinating.” Feroze replied, winking at me.

“Then you can go back to the city now.” Rathod Uncle said, a smile tugging at the corners of his lips.

“Okay, coming!” Feroze turned to me, “So, about my offer, do you want to be my brother?”

I thought about it for a moment. “Okay.” I held out my hand. He shook it and said, “Done. Now, come on. Let’s go help Uncle, shall we?”



Saina put the script aside. No wonder Aishwarya had been fooled so completely. He did seem genuinely likable. She would have also been taken in. She got up and locked the manuscript in her drawer and went back to bed. She switched the light off and fell asleep.

She didn’t sleep very well, and woke up an hour earlier than she normally did. Consequently, she had a whole hour and a half to burn at the bus stop. She sat for a while, staring at the traffic that passed by, then took out the manuscript from her bag. She had the time anyway.



Feroze took over running the shop from Rathod Uncle after three years. I began to visit him more and more frequently. I told him everything that happened to me, however personal. And even though he was a chatterbox, he had this wonderful ability to listen, which I unfortunately lack.

He would stay quiet throughout the complete story I was telling him, and then he’d clearly, objectively, tell me whether what someone did was correct. When he’d say what I’d done was wrong, I’d get all defensive and sulk in the corner of the garage, either reading or working on a scooter. But during that time, I’d think about what he said, and realize that it was true, and by the end of the day, we’d be reconciled.



Saina skipped the remaining part of the chapter; it was more about Aishwarya’s school life and her piano lessons. She skimmed through the pages of the fourth chapter till she found an interesting part.



I remember it was the eighteenth of October, two days before Feroze’s twenty seventh birthday. I stormed into the motor shop, cursing. Feroze raised an eyebrow, “What’s wrong?”

“This!” I wrenched a newspaper from my bag and read a headline aloud, “Tensions continue to rise as one EBSF officer killed on third day of ceasefire violation between Laore and Endhia. I mean, what’s their-” I swore, “-problem?!”

Feroze slid under a car and began hammering away at something. “Maybe it’s not completely their fault. Maybe they had good reason to do so.”

“Reason? That’s like saying we should let all murderers go scot free just because they have motive!”

Feroze didn’t reply. But I continued relentlessly, “And since when did you get so defensive about Laore? They’re all a bunch of-” I swore again, “-terrorists!”

Feroze’s face hardened for a second, then it was back to normal. “All I’m trying to say is there are always two sides to a coin.”

“Oh, you want to play that game? I can play that. Heads. Us. Good. Tails. Laore. Bad terrorists. You happy now?”

There was silence for a while. Then I asked, “By the way, what are you planning for your birthday?”

Feroze emerged from under the car, a huge grin plastered across his oily, grimy face. “I am going on a date.”

“A date? No way! You?” I laughed.

“No, I’m not kidding. We’ve met once before. I think you were at school when she came to have her motorbike fixed. We chatted, exchanged numbers, and have been talking ever since.”

“Why the hell didn’t you tell me?”

He slid back and began hammering again. “I didn’t feel the need to.”

“It sounds like it’s straight out of a movie.”

“Who knows?” said Feroze, from under the car, “It could turn out to be as dramatic.”

“What’s her name?”

Feroze didn’t reply. I thought he hadn’t heard. I got up and walked closer to the car. “What’s her name?”

Feroze slid back out. “What’s it to you?” he said, in mock annoyance.

I laughed. “Okay, no, seriously, what is it?”

“I won’t tell you.”

And he didn’t. How much ever I begged and pleaded.

“Okay, fine,” I finally relented, “But at least tell me what she’s like.”

He thought for a moment. “A bit like you, but older.”

“Genius?”

“Not even close.”

I punched him in the arm. He laughed. “She’s smart, though, and talkative.”

“What does she work as?”

Feroze frowned. “Now that I come to think of it, I don’t really know. I don’t think I ever once asked her about her work.”

I laughed. “Come on! Even you can’t be that stupid!”



Saina closed the book. Her bus was approaching. She got on and stared outside the window, mulling over this new manuscript. Aishwarya was already famous, having been splashed over the news. She wasn’t sure whether it would sell.

The news had mentioned that Feroze was rumored to have a serious relationship with someone, but couldn’t find out who.

Saina got off at her publishing house and spent the next three hours collecting manuscripts of all sizes and forms. It wasn’t easy to be an editor at such a coveted publishing house. It was a hard, thankless job; only the Chief Editor really got the recognition.

During the lunch break, she jogged down to her favorite restaurant and ordered her usual. She decided to make use of this time and complete a little more of Aishwarya’s book. It was actually well-written.



Feroze began disappearing for long hours together. He said it was personal matters back at the city; his mother or some relative was ill, but I didn’t wholly believe it. His face had become longer and paler, his eyes bloodshot, and his hair was a long, tangled mess. He laughed as often as before, but it was shorter and had a nervous undertone. In fact, there was a nervous undertone to everything he did.

That was also the day Laori militants entered an army camp and blew nearly the whole thing up. I remember vividly complaining about it to Feroze. He barely replied, which I didn’t mind at the time. I just wanted him to listen.

I told him the next week. I was leaving to a nearby state for higher studies. I was pursuing law at a prestigious university. I promised to keep in contact, calling every day. Feroze nodded. His eyes were filmy, but not a tear fell. Quite the contrary with me. I cried into my mother’s shoulder for almost an hour straight; I’d never been away from her for more than three days.



Saina finished her lunch. She had to admit, the book was quite interesting. It was funny and relatable, but the selling point she would use is that it told a wildly different story than the one portrayed in the news. It showed Feroze in a whole different light, and Aishwarya too.

Saina would pitch it to her Chief once she was done with the parts she wanted to read.



I got the news when I was in college, the last month of my last year. I was on the first train home, but I still reached only in four hours. It took me an additional two to get to the police station. So much for my supposed speed.

I stormed in and looked around. Everyone in the building was staring at me, and for good reason too; I must have been a mess. I was all sweaty and my hair was sticking up in all directions. My clothes were all shabby and I hadn’t even bothered to put on socks before shoes.

“Where is he?” I demanded. No one replied. Then a strong, burly man in a black suit stepped forward. “He’s waiting to be taken into our custody.”

“He has a right to a lawyer.”

“Yes, we know that. But you need to calm down first.”

It was a few minutes before I did. I took a deep breath and followed the man. I was led through the narrow, winding corridors of the station till I reached a dimly lit, small, cramped room. There was another person in it. I walked inside and turned, then gasped in horror.

Through a glass pane, I could see Feroze. He was seated at a table, handcuffed to it. His face was all bruised and bloody, his hair almost completely cut off, and his chest… it sickens me to even write about it.

I turned away to stop myself from gagging. I inhaled deeply again, then exhaled. “That’s it,” said the man behind me, and I could hear the mirth in his voice, “In through the nose, out through the mouth.”

Then I heard him mutter, “Delicate,” to the other person and laugh. I straightened angrily. I said, “I’ll go in now.”

They led me inside. Feroze looked up as we entered. For a moment, we stared at each other. I broke the silence. “Tell me it’s not true.”

“Aishwarya…”

“Tell. Me. It’s. Not. True.” I said, spitting each word out with fury and viciousness I never imagined I could express.

Feroze shrugged. He looked utterly downcast. But at that moment I didn’t care. With an animal roar I flung myself towards him. I landed just a single punch before the men caught hold of me and dragged me, screaming and kicking.

“Hey, hey! Listen,” one of them said, “You’re his lawyer, and that’s the only reason why you’re even in there! But no hitting him!”

I shrugged him off. “Okay.” I went back inside and sat down on the chair opposite him, my hands on the cold table. It felt like the only thing that could cool my burning rage.

He stared at me. “I’m sorry.”

“Oh, don’t give me that-” I swore, “-rubbish! It’s bul-”

“I’m sorry,” he cut me off. He took my hands in his. I withdrew them harshly. He winced, and then I saw his wrists. They were covered in scars and burn marks.

We sat in silence for a while. Then he said, “My fiancée-”

“Fiancée?” I asked sharply. He nodded. “We got engaged yesterday. They took the ring away.”

“Yeah, I suppose she’s a high-ranking diplomat, or don’t tell me, in the Cabinet itself? What did you want to do, extract classified information from her? Fake love!” I said, caustically.

“No,” he said, “She has a normal, civilian job. “And my love for her was genuine. I won’t tell her name, before you ask. It would put her in danger.”

I had a feeling he was telling the truth. “And how about your love for me?”

Feroze looked pained. “I didn’t think you’d question it.”

“Well, I’m starting to question everything you did. Was everything just a ploy, a fake?”

Feroze shook his head, sobbing. “You were real. My love for you was true. At first, I didn’t know what to make of you, but you were so kind and lively and you just lit up the whole workshop.”

“You told me you were my brother.”

“Do you still believe me?”

“I don’t know what to believe anymore.” I paused, hardening my heart for what I was going to say next, “I’m sorry, Feroze, but I’m not going to defend you. I love my country and I won’t defend a goddamn Laori spy.”

Feroze nodded, “Laore has already set me up with a lawyer.”

There was nothing more to be said, and even if I was going to say something, I would definitely regret it later on. I got up and walked out. I was taken to another interrogation room and grilled for hours, ruthlessly. But I had nothing to hide. I was let go the next morning.

I didn’t attend his trial. But I later found out that he was sentenced to death by hanging. It was to be a public execution in the market.

On the appointed day, I pushed my way to the front of the crowd. Feroze’s head was covered with a black bag. I turned and ran, crying freely.

Yes, I cried that day. Yes, I shed tears that day, not for a Laori spy, but for a fellow human being. Yes, I shed tears that day, not for an enemy of the State, but for my brother.



Saina shut the book, tears glistening in her eyes. She opened her desk drawer and pulled out a small photograph. It was a photograph of Feroze and her, the day they got engaged.

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Pranati Chavali
07:54 Jun 29, 2020

I can't say anything. It's toooooooooo powerfully emotional.

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Nandan Prasad
09:07 Jun 29, 2020

Thanks so much!

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John Steckley
18:54 Jun 26, 2020

Powerful story Nandan, rich in emotions. And I liked that the reading of the story and the actual events both contributed to your story.

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Nandan Prasad
01:43 Jun 27, 2020

Thanks! Like if you enjoyed!

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Jasmine Navarez
18:03 Jun 26, 2020

That... That was.. Whoa. Just, whoa... I was not expecting that ending. Very well written!!

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Nandan Prasad
01:42 Jun 27, 2020

Aw, thank you so much!

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Ranya Navarez
17:59 Jun 26, 2020

That was good! So good!

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Nandan Prasad
01:42 Jun 27, 2020

Thanks!

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Ranya Navarez
02:21 Jun 27, 2020

You're welcome!

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Johanna J
14:14 Jun 25, 2020

Wow! This is really interesting-great take on the prompt! The twist at the end really got me:) Great story, and keep on writing!!

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Nandan Prasad
15:16 Jun 25, 2020

Thank you so much!

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Johanna J
15:44 Jun 25, 2020

No problem!

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Pranathi Gorty
18:21 Jun 23, 2020

Hi Nandan, I must say that this is a great story! You really captured the emotion and all. The part where Aishwarya meets Feroze in the workshop seemed a little confusing, but other than that, this story was amazing!

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Nandan Prasad
01:17 Jun 24, 2020

Thanks for the feedback, it’s really helpful! Like if you enjoyed!

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Pranathi Gorty
15:28 Jun 28, 2020

Of course!

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Alex Pilgrim
16:50 Jun 23, 2020

Very good imagery and the narrative flows well! As Arya Preston mentioned, perhaps the ending was slightly abrupt, and the beginning went into a tad more detail than necessary, but you really made everything look so vivid!

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Nandan Prasad
01:16 Jun 24, 2020

Thanks for the feedback, I’ll see what I can do!

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14:03 Jun 23, 2020

WOW...the twist at the end was really unexpected! Loved it! Great job Nandan! Keep writing Nandan! :))))

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Nandan Prasad
15:10 Jun 23, 2020

Thanks!

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Daryl Gravesande
10:40 Jun 23, 2020

Dang! You're REALLY good! I love the imagery you're putting in my head, and the consistently good dialogue. You are a VERY good writer. You deserve all of my followers and karma points, lol.

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Nandan Prasad
11:42 Jun 23, 2020

Aw, that's a little much, but thanks! You're really good too!

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Daryl Gravesande
12:08 Jun 23, 2020

I mean it, you actually have a real passion for writing. I'm jus a novice, who happened to meet the right people at the right time. My stories aren't even that good.

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Nandan Prasad
15:09 Jun 23, 2020

Thank you so much, but don't be so hard on yourself. You're here because you're good and not lucky, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.

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Daryl Gravesande
16:31 Jun 23, 2020

Wow, thanks, Nandan!

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Nandan Prasad
01:15 Jun 24, 2020

Welcome.

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Arya Preston
14:06 Jun 22, 2020

Very well written story, Nandan! I can tell you have a knack for visual imagery and that's always a good thing for plots like these. I thought the ending was quite sudden and I didn't expect Saina's connection to the autobiography, maybe try subtle foreshadowing to weave the entire story together - but that's just my opinion. Great work :)

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Nandan Prasad
15:04 Jun 22, 2020

Yeah, I thought of that too, but unfortunately that would exceed the word limit, so I had to edit out those parts. Thanks for the feedback!

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Deborah Mercer
06:28 Jun 22, 2020

Hi, Nanan, checking in on your story as promised and will do on more of them. I think this was excellent. I especially admire both your use of dialogue and the way that you make clear the uncomfortable interface between personal and political. It is also (at times literally!) quite hard-hitting which I think it needs to be.

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Nandan Prasad
07:03 Jun 22, 2020

Thanks a lot! This means a lot coming from you. Like if you enjoyed!

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Greg Gillis
23:23 Jun 21, 2020

I became engulfed in the images which were derived from your story. It was very well written.

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Nandan Prasad
01:11 Jun 22, 2020

Thank you.

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Jane Andrews
13:43 Jun 21, 2020

Like your previous story, I think the strongest parts of this are when you are writing in the voice of one of your characters. The third person narration is a little clunky in places, but the first person autobiography works really well. One thing that I found confusing though is when you have several references to Feroze asking Aishwarya if she wants to be his brother - you might want to edit that so he says, "Do you want me to be your brother?" as it made me have to go back and reread to check that the manuscript Saina was reading was a wo...

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Nandan Prasad
15:59 Jun 21, 2020

Thanks so much for that feedback! It’s really helpful. Please like you enjoyed.

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Emily Nghiem
02:36 Jun 25, 2020

I was also confused by that same line, ^ about being the brother ^, and had to go back and re-read this several times to make sure I understood the relationships. I think the way you structured a story within the story, where both are interesting enough on their own, makes this even more intriguing. I found it captivating the way you create context and cultural setting with very little descriptions here and there. Very nice writing and story, good use of dialogue that is very realistic. Thank you for sharing your stories, talents and comment...

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14:19 Jun 20, 2020

Wow, another twist ending! I was a bit confused by the politics, and it would have been interesting to hear more of Saina's feelings about the sequence of events--but it was intriguing. One technical note--at one point in the middle a section was italicized that wasn't part of Aishwarya's manuscript, and that made it a bit confusing

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Nandan Prasad
15:36 Jun 20, 2020

Thank you for the comments. I would have been included Saina’s feelings, but unfortunately after I checked, I turned out to be five words from crossing the word limit. As for the italics, thanks for that, I have edited that.

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Roshna Rusiniya
06:29 Jun 20, 2020

Well-written story. The twist at the end was unexpected. Good work.

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Nandan Prasad
14:04 Jun 20, 2020

Thanks!

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Roshna Rusiniya
14:18 Jun 20, 2020

You are welcome. When you get time, have a look at mine too. Thanks!

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Avani Gupta
14:47 Jun 19, 2020

Hi, Nandan! You asked me to read, so here I am. I loved the concept of this story, and especially what Eric said, lol. I'm also a HUGE fan of the ending. A couple things—I noticed that in places you were supposed to be putting in an em dash (—) you put a hyphen (-). That's just a small thing, so I should probably delete this paragraph, but it is a small thing to keep in mind. Also, I would suggest that in the places you put the autobiography that Aishwarya wrote, I would say to put it in italics (Control + i) so it would be just a l...

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Nandan Prasad
15:51 Jun 19, 2020

Thanks for the feedback. I'll definitely keep this in mind. Like if you enjoyed!

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Avani Gupta
15:58 Jun 19, 2020

Haha, no problem! (And yes, I did enjoy it and like it 👍)

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Nandan Prasad
16:14 Jun 19, 2020

Thanks!

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Eric Deitch
07:04 Jun 19, 2020

I have traveled the world, lived in Qatar for 7 years; machine guns on me in Isreal, Egpyt, Jordan. So I get the concept of the story. We all live in different worlds. I'm just some white educated Canadian man.“I don’t know what to believe anymore.” That is a perfect phrase for what we are going through these days. Compassion is the great greatest form of humanity. Stay safe, E

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Nandan Prasad
11:46 Jun 19, 2020

Wow, reading this made me go all wobbly. Guns on you in Israel. Must have been terrifying. Thanks and you stay safe too. Like if you enjoyed!

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Kathleen March
03:53 Jun 19, 2020

There is a much longer story here, so it was a challenge to follow. Cultural context is so important. Readers who do not have familiarity with that context will miss a large part of the story. Is there a way to help the ignorant like me? You do know howollo!

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Nandan Prasad
11:45 Jun 19, 2020

Yeah, that's what I was afraid of. But this is like a representation of any two countries having a dispute. But I drew mainly from a fictional representation of India and one of its neighboring countries. Thanks for reading. Like if you enjoyed!

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Kathleen March
13:47 Jun 19, 2020

I understand the culture question, because I write half of my stories based in a part of the world few people know. I try to keep the context clear, but it can be a challenge. Maybe less detail? Or breaking this into two stories? I know that would be hard, but it might be possible.

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Tvisha Yerra
19:52 Jun 18, 2020

Did you mean Lahore? I couldn't tell, but great story!

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Nandan Prasad
01:22 Jun 19, 2020

Actually I did not want to make it that obvious, so I changed the name.

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Tvisha Yerra
02:47 Jun 19, 2020

Oh, really smart way!

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Nandan Prasad
15:01 Jun 18, 2020

Thank you so much!

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