Commented on: Sea of pale faces
14:18 Dec 12, 2019
Hello Jayden. This is Arthur, your designated circle critic for the week.
From what I can see, you have an adequate grasp of plot techniques - you know the story you want to tell - and for the most part you carry this throughout your writing. However, execution faults at times, and while the dialogue is fairly decent, it still leaves something to be desired.
Your experimentation with semantics are interesting to read, and seem to be paying off well. All in all, it would seem that the only thing you need is more practice, and I look forwa... read more